Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Rèn luyện phát âm và ngữ pháp cơ bản, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và chi tiết cụ thể. Nên sửa lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ: “bad”→“bright/positive”), tránh từ sai (moose, consensus), và giữ câu ngắn gọn tối đa 3–4 câu. Dùng liên từ khi thêm chi tiết (for example, when, because) để mạch lạc hơn.

例: I prefer happy music because it has upbeat and positive lyrics that lift my mood. For example, when I do morning stretches I play cheerful pop to feel more energetic and ready for the day.

提案: Cải thiện: Sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng (Yes, it makes me feel...) và tránh lỗi từ vựng sai (“mouse”, “Jess”, “bit”). Thêm lý do cụ thể và liên từ phù hợp (for example, when, because) và giới hạn câu tối đa 3 câu để rõ ràng.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me feel more excited because the upbeat tempo and positive lyrics boost my energy. For example, when I listen to lively pop songs while getting ready, I feel more motivated for the day.

提案: Cải thiện: Cần dùng thì và cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác (I studied piano for three years when I was ten). Tránh dịch sai từ trực tiếp (“tenure”→“ten”), và mở rộng chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, vì sao, kết quả). Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng, có câu chủ đề và câu bổ trợ.

例: Yes, I took music lessons when I was a child. I studied piano for about three years starting when I was ten because my parents wanted me to learn music, and regular practice improved my sight-reading and technique.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., focus, concentrate, relax). Tránh các từ sai và câu không liên kết. Nên cho ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động (cooking, cleaning, studying) và nêu lý do ngắn gọn với liên từ (because, when).

例: Yes, I often listen to music while doing other activities because it helps me relax and stay focused. For example, I usually play soft instrumental music when I cook or clean, and upbeat songs when I exercise.

× I prefer happy music because it's a bad and positive lyric.

✓ I prefer happy music because it has positive lyrics.

The original sentence uses 'bad and positive lyric' which is contradictory and grammatically incorrect: 'lyric' should be plural 'lyrics' and 'has' is the correct verb to describe content. Use 'positive' to describe the lyrics. Suggestion: use 'it has positive lyrics' to clearly express the idea.

× Leave a moose and happy consensus while working.

✓ It helps me feel calm and happy while working.

The original sentence contains nonsensical words ('Leave a moose and happy consensus') and wrong structure. Replace with a clear subject and verb phrase: 'It helps me feel calm and happy while working.' Suggestion: state effect of music on mood using 'helps me feel' + adjective.

× For example, when I stretch I play cheerful pop and to feel more initiated and.

✓ For example, when I stretch I play cheerful pop to feel more energetic.

Original mixes infinitive and incomplete phrase ('to feel more initiated and'). Use correct infinitive 'to feel' plus appropriate adjective 'energetic'. Also remove extraneous conjunctions. Suggestion: use 'to feel + adjective' for purpose.

× Jess is make me feel more excited because it's a bit and positive lyrics puts me energy and mouse.

✓ Yes, it makes me feel more excited because its upbeat, positive lyrics give me energy.

Multiple problems: 'Jess' seems to be 'Yes'; 'is make' should be 'makes' for third person singular subject 'it'; 'it's a bit and positive lyrics' is ungrammatical — use 'its upbeat, positive lyrics'; 'puts me energy' should be 'give me energy'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct possessive 'its' without apostrophe.

× For example when I listen to Lily pop songs while getting ready I feel more motivated and about the day.

✓ For example, when I listen to lively pop songs while getting ready I feel more motivated about the day.

Original had 'Lily pop songs' (likely 'lively') and awkward ending 'motivated and about the day'. Use adjective 'lively' and complete phrase 'motivated about the day'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective and complete the thought.

× Yes, I have taken music classic.

✓ Yes, I have taken classical music classes.

'music classic' is incorrect word order and form. Use 'classical music' as the subject area and plural 'classes' for lessons. Suggestion: use proper adjective 'classical' and pluralize 'classes'.

× I studied piano and about three years when I was a tenure because my parents want wanted me to learn music.

✓ I studied piano for about three years when I was a child because my parents wanted me to learn music.

Use 'for about three years' to indicate duration, 'when I was a child' instead of 'tenure', and 'wanted' past tense for parents' desire. Also 'want wanted' duplicates; keep 'wanted'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and correct duration expression.

× For example, regular lessons and practice helped me.

✓ For example, regular lessons and practice helped me improve.

Original ends abruptly. Specify what was helped: 'helped me improve' or 'helped me learn'. Suggestion: complete the sentence by stating outcome.

× Yes, I often listen to music while doing all the things because it's helped me count and this move.

✓ Yes, I often listen to music while doing other things because it helps me concentrate and keep moving.

Use present tense 'helps' for habitual action. 'doing all the things' should be 'doing other things'. 'helped me count and this move' is unclear; likely 'concentrate and keep moving'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and clear verbs.

× For example, I play chess when I starting to block, sometimes I joist a bit strong.

✓ For example, I play chess when I start to relax; sometimes I listen to something a bit more upbeat while cleaning.

'I starting to block' is incorrect; use 'I start to...'. 'joist a bit strong' is unclear; interpreted as 'listen to something more upbeat' or 'turn the music up'. Provide a coherent correction matching context. Suggestion: use base verb after 'I' for habitual actions and clarify intent.