Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp hơn và rõ ràng (một câu chủ đề). Giảm tiếng ờ/ừ và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'it's make' → 'it makes'). Sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự: trước nói về sở thích chính, sau đó nêu ngoại lệ/khi nào chọn nhạc buồn. Dùng từ vựng chính xác hơn (energetic, uplifted, reflective) và rút gọn câu để không quá 5 câu. Thêm liên từ để nối ý (for example, when, however).

例: I usually prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and more confident. However, when I’m feeling down, I sometimes choose sad songs because they help me reflect and process my emotions. For example, after a stressful day, slow, melancholic tunes help me calm down and think things through.

提案: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'is make' → 'is to make' hoặc 'makes'). Nên dùng liên từ để so sánh ý chính và ngoại lệ (however, but). Nêu ví dụ cụ thể về loại nhạc nhanh khiến người khác khó chịu để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because upbeat rhythms and major chords boost my mood. However, some people find very fast or loud tracks irritating; for instance, frenetic electronic beats can be overwhelming if you’re tired or stressed.

× Will it be on situation? When I feel happy?

✓ Do you mean in which situation? When I feel happy.

The student used 'Will it be on situation?' which incorrectly uses 'will' and 'be' for asking about a situation. Use 'do you mean' to clarify, and 'in which situation' or 'when' to ask about timing. Suggestion: replace future 'will' and 'be' with the present question form and a preposition 'in'.

× So happy music is the great choice for me because it's make me feel more energetic and successful.

✓ So happy music is the best choice for me because it makes me feel more energetic and successful.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors: 'it's make' is incorrect because 'it' requires the verb form 'makes' in present simple. Also 'the great choice' should be 'the best choice' for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'it makes' and consider adjective choice.

× When I feel sad, so sad music is another choice.

✓ When I feel sad, sad music is another choice.

The use of 'so' is unnecessary and awkward in this present-tense statement. Removing 'so' results in a correct present simple sentence. Suggestion: omit filler words that don't add meaning.

× It's not only uh motivate me more in.

✓ It doesn't just motivate me more.

The structure 'It's not only ... motivate' is incorrect. Use 'doesn't' + base verb for negation in present simple: 'doesn't motivate'. Also the trailing 'in' is incomplete. Suggestion: use 'It doesn't just motivate me' or expand the clause to specify how.

× Of course, yes, the main purpose of happy music is make the user feel more excited and happier.

✓ Of course. The main purpose of happy music is to make the listener feel more excited and happier.

After 'is' we need the infinitive 'to make' to express purpose. Also 'user' is odd for music listeners; 'listener' is better. Suggestion: use 'is to make' and choose appropriate noun.

× But some, to some extent some people feel annoyed with some fast music.

✓ But to some extent, some people feel annoyed by fast music.

The original repeats 'some' and misuses 'with' after 'annoyed'. Use 'annoyed by' to indicate the cause. Also move 'to some extent' to the front and remove redundant 'some'. Suggestion: 'to some extent, some people feel annoyed by fast music.'