Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid filler words. Add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. For example, replace “It is a interesting question” with a direct answer: “I prefer happy music.” Correct verbs and word forms (energetic or energize → energize → makes me feel energetic).

例: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel energetic and confident. For example, when I work out, upbeat songs boost my motivation and help me keep going.

提案: Answer directly, use complete sentences, and link ideas clearly. Correct grammar (e.g., “Absolutely, it makes me happy”); use specific vocabulary (“anime music” if that’s meant). Use linking words like “for example” or “however” to contrast happy and calming music. Keep it to no more than five sentences.

例: Absolutely — it makes me feel excited, especially before I go to work. For example, I often listen to upbeat anime music because it motivates me and improves my focus; however, I usually switch to calming music in the evening to relax.

× It is a interesting question.

✓ It is an interesting question.

The indefinite article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'interesting'. Use 'an' to make pronunciation smoother: 'an interesting'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× Uh, I choose happy music because it makes me energize and confident, especially when I do a workout.

✓ Uh, I choose happy music because it makes me energized and confident, especially when I work out.

The verb 'energize' is incorrect here; the passive/adjective form 'energized' describes a feeling. Also 'do a workout' is correct but 'work out' is the more natural phrasal verb. Use 'energized' and 'confident' to describe states: 'makes me energized and confident' and 'work out' instead of 'do a workout'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 10

× Absolutely makes me happy, especially before I go to work.

✓ Absolutely; it makes me happy, especially before I go to work.

The sentence lacks an explicit subject and finite verb in the clause. Insert 'it' as the subject and a verb 'makes' is already present but needs a subject: 'it makes me happy'. Adding a pause or connector improves clarity. This fixes a sentence fragment/structure problem. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× I always play happy music such as animusic music which motivate me to become more productive.

✓ I always play happy music, such as anime music, which motivates me to become more productive.

There are two issues: 'animusic' seems incorrect; likely 'anime' or 'energetic'—I assumed 'anime music'. The relative clause needs subject-verb agreement: 'which' refers to 'happy music' (singular), so the verb should be 'motivates' not 'motivate'. Also add a comma before 'such as' and after the example for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× Uh, besides of that, I also love calming music after.

✓ Uh, besides that, I also like calming music afterward.

The correct phrase is 'besides that' or 'apart from that', not 'besides of that'. Also 'after' as an adverb here is awkward; 'afterward' or 'afterwards' is more natural. 'Like' is more idiomatic than 'love' if contrasting preference, but 'love' is acceptable; I changed to 'like' to match conversational tone. Use 'besides that' and 'afterward' for correct preposition/adverb usage. Grammar Problem Type ID: 11