Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar/repetition errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating words and correct word forms (e.g. "doing doing" and "listen happy songs").

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood when I do household chores. For example, upbeat pop songs make routine tasks like cleaning or cooking feel quicker and more enjoyable, so I stay motivated to finish them.

提案: Give a direct yes/no, then briefly explain with a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar issues (remove repeated words, prefer "let me" or "help me" rather than "so that I can"). Use one linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, happy music definitely energizes me because upbeat rhythms increase my pace and focus. For instance, listening to lively electronic tracks helps me finish cleaning faster and keeps me from feeling tired.

× I prefer happy music because it's helpful to fix my bad mood while doing doing household activities.

✓ I prefer happy music because it's helpful in fixing my bad mood while doing household activities.

The phrase 'helpful to fix' is unidiomatic; use 'helpful in fixing' or 'helps to fix'. Also 'doing doing' contains a duplicated word; remove the duplicate. Use the gerund 'fixing' after 'helpful in'. Suggestion: say 'it's helpful in fixing my bad mood' or 'it helps to fix my bad mood.'

× I often listen happy songs so that I can complete any of the activity easily.

✓ I often listen to happy songs so that I can complete any activity easily.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' (incorrect preposition use combined with verb + -ing category). 'Any of the activity' is incorrect; use 'any activity' for general meaning. Remove 'of the' and keep 'activity' singular or use plural 'activities.' Suggestion: 'I often listen to happy songs so that I can complete any activity easily.'

× Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited whenever I do any household activities.

✓ Yes, happy music makes me feel more excited whenever I do household activities.

Sentence is mostly correct but 'any household activities' is wordy; omit 'any' for natural phrasing. 'Makes me feel more excited whenever I do household activities' is acceptable. Suggestion: use 'whenever I do household activities' for natural flow.

× I like upbeat songs so that I can do any activity easily without any stress and I I also can do more work.

✓ I like upbeat songs so that I can do activities easily without stress, and I can also do more work.

Remove the duplicated 'I'. 'Any activity' sounds odd here; use plural 'activities' or 'any activity' but be consistent. 'Without any stress' can be simplified to 'without stress.' Word order 'I also can' should be 'I can also' for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: 'I like upbeat songs so that I can do activities easily without stress, and I can also do more work.'