Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Work on clarity, accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and pronunciation errors (e.g. “learn” → “tend”, “a big tracks” → “upbeat tracks”, “Milo” → “mellow”). Keep the response to no more than 3–4 sentences and use a linking word (e.g. “but” or “however”) to connect ideas.

例: I usually prefer happy music because upbeat tracks help me stay motivated. However, I sometimes listen to mellow, sad songs when I want to reflect quietly. For example, on rainy evenings I play soft piano pieces to relax and think.

提案: Focus on producing a clear and fluent answer with correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Begin with a direct yes/no and a brief reason, then add a specific example. Correct word choices: use “fast tempo” instead of “fast temper”, “lift my spirits” instead of “leave my spirits”, “music” instead of “muses”, and avoid repetitions. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word like “so” or “therefore”.

例: Yes — happy music with a fast tempo definitely lifts my spirits and gets my heart racing, so I feel more energetic. For instance, I play upbeat pop or electronic tracks at the gym because they boost my stamina and help me exercise harder.

× It really depends on my current state of mind. Generally I learn I lean towards happy a big tracks because they have me to, uh, help me stay motivated.

✓ It really depends on my current state of mind. Generally, I tend to lean toward happy, upbeat tracks because they help me stay motivated.

This sentence contained several issues: incorrect verb choice ('learn' instead of 'tend'), repeated words ('I learn I lean'), wrong adjective order and form ('happy a big tracks' should be 'happy, upbeat tracks'), and unnecessary fillers ('have me to, uh,'). Classify as sentence structure errors because multiple structural problems affect clarity. Suggestion: use 'tend to' or 'tend to lean toward' for preference, place adjectives in correct order ('happy, upbeat tracks'), remove fillers and unnecessary phrases, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('they help me').

× However, I do enjoy some Milo sad songs when I want to reflect or just relax in a quiet space.

✓ However, I do enjoy some mild, sad songs when I want to reflect or just relax in a quiet space.

The word 'Milo' is likely a typo for 'mild' or an incorrect adjective; classify as incorrect use of adjectives. Suggestion: choose a correct adjective that fits context ('mild, sad' or simply 'sad') and separate adjectives with a comma if both modify the noun. Ensure word choice matches intended meaning.

× Without a doubt a doubt a big turns with a fast temper definitely leave my spirits and get my heart racing.

✓ Without a doubt, upbeat songs with a fast tempo definitely lift my spirits and get my heart racing.

This sentence had repetition ('a doubt a doubt'), incorrect words ('turns' instead of 'songs', 'temper' instead of 'tempo'), and wrong verbs ('leave my spirits' instead of 'lift my spirits'). Classified as sentence structure errors due to multiple word choice and structural mistakes. Suggestion: remove repeated words, use correct nouns ('songs'), use 'tempo' for musical speed, and use appropriate verbs ('lift' to mean improve mood).

× I I often listen to high energy muses at the gym because it's really boost my stamina and give me boom.

✓ I often listen to high-energy music at the gym because it really boosts my stamina and gives me energy.

Problems include repeated word ('I I'), incorrect noun ('muses' should be 'music'), hyphenation ('high-energy'), wrong verb form after 'it' ('it's really boost' should be 'it really boosts'), and informal/unclear 'give me boom' which should be 'gives me energy'. Classified as sentence structure errors. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use correct noun and hyphenation for compound adjectives, ensure subject-verb agreement ('it boosts'), and choose clear collocations ('gives me energy' or 'gives me a boost').