Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ непоследователен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Сформулируйте тему прямо, избегайте повторов, дайте причину и пример. Используйте связки (because, so, for example) и простую правильную грамматику: например, I prefer happy music because it makes me feel good. Затем добавьте конкретную причину: например, it energizes me and helps me focus.

例: I prefer happy music because it makes me feel good and energetic. For example, upbeat pop songs help me concentrate when I study and lift my mood when I’m tired.

提案: Односложный ответ слишком короткий. Дайте расширенный ответ с объяснением и примером, используя связки (Yes, because / Yes, it does because). Постройте предложение: сначала утвердительный ответ, затем причина и короткий пример.

例: Yes, it does because the fast rhythm and cheerful melodies energize me. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs in the morning, I feel more motivated to start my day.

× I prefer happy music because he's my, because he he do me happy.

✓ I prefer happy music because it makes me happy.

The student incorrectly used a masculine pronoun 'he' to refer to 'music' which is an inanimate object; English uses the pronoun 'it' for things. The phrase 'he he do me happy' is ungrammatical: 'do me happy' should be expressed as 'make me happy' using the verb 'make' + object + adjective. The corrected sentence uses the present simple 'makes' for a general truth about music and the pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: use 'it' for inanimate subjects and the verb 'make' in present simple ('it makes me happy').