Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了偏好，但存在语法错误、重复和不自然的词汇。改进时：1) 用一句主题句直接回答（如：I prefer happy music）。2) 减少填充词（如 umm），避免重复意义相近的短语。3) 修正语法（如 listen to, makes me upset → makes me feel sad）。4) 补充一两条具体原因或例子，使用连接词（because, so, for example）使回答更连贯。

例: I prefer happy music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, when I listen to upbeat pop songs after a long day, I feel more energetic and motivated.

提案: 回答肯定但内容不清楚且有词汇错误（“big wipe”不合适），句子结构混乱，存在语法错误（it make → it makes）。改进时：1) 首句直接肯定或否定并简短说明原因。2) 用恰当词汇描述音乐元素（rhythm, beat, melody, tempo）。3) 使用连接词给出具体例子或场景。4) 注意主谓一致和时态。

例: Yes, absolutely. Happy music usually has an upbeat tempo and catchy rhythm, which energises me. For instance, lively dance tracks make me want to move and improve my focus when I'm working.

× when you listen happy music, you feel good, you will be happy too.

✓ when you listen to happy music, you feel good and you will be happy too.

句中缺少介词“to”搭配动词listen，正确用法是“listen to something”。此外原句用逗号连接三个并列成分，改为“and”更自然。建议记住固定搭配“listen to”，并用连接词明确并列关系。

× I don't always listen sad music because it's upset.

✓ I don't always listen to sad music because it makes me upset.

第一处同样缺少介词“to”，应为“listen to sad music”。其次原句用“it's upset”不合适，upset是形容情绪，应该说“it makes me upset”或“it upsets me”。建议掌握“make someone + adjective”或“upset”作及物动词的用法。

× I think happy music, umm it contains a big wipe and the wipe attracted me so I always listen happy music and it make me feel excited.

✓ I think happy music, umm, contains a big beat and the beat attracts me, so I always listen to happy music and it makes me feel excited.

多个问题：1) “contains a big wipe”中“wipe”用词不当，推测应为“beat”（节拍）；2) “listen happy music”缺少介词“to”；3) 动词时态与主语不一致，应为第三人称单数“attracts”和“makes”。建议注意词汇选择，固定搭配“listen to”，以及主语为第三人称单数时动词加-s。