Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (e.g. “like”, “just”, “OK”). Use correct grammar (e.g. “depends on my mood”).

例: I usually prefer happy music, but it depends on my mood. When I’m feeling low, I sometimes choose sad songs to help me process emotions; however, most of the time upbeat music lifts my spirits and keeps me positive.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical main sentence, then provide one specific example or effect using a linking word. Reduce hesitations and repeated words. Correct verb forms and collocations (e.g. “it increases my mood” → “it improves my mood” or “it makes me feel more energetic”).

例: Yes, definitely. Happy music usually makes me feel more energetic and motivated; for example, I play upbeat songs when I’m exercising or getting ready in the morning because they boost my energy and improve my mood.

× It depends from my mood, because sometimes I like to listen to sad music when I have a bad mood and I just want, sometimes I just want to cry too, like let everything out OK.

✓ It depends on my mood, because sometimes I like to listen to sad music when I am in a bad mood and I sometimes just want to cry too, like to let everything out.

Use 'depend on' not 'depend from' (preposition error). Also 'in a bad mood' is the correct prepositional phrase. Replace the informal repetition and filler words for clarity: use 'sometimes just want to cry' and 'to let everything out' (infinitive after 'want'). Maintain present simple 'am' for current state.

× And but some, like most of the time I like to listen to happy music because I'm mostly happy.

✓ But most of the time I like to listen to happy music because I'm usually happy.

Using both 'and' and 'but' together is incorrect; choose one conjunction. 'Mostly happy' is less natural than 'usually happy' for frequency. Remove filler 'some, like' to improve sentence structure and clarity.

× I have a good mood.

✓ I am in a good mood.

English uses 'be in a good mood' rather than 'have a good mood.' This is a collocation/verb usage issue that fits present-tense description of state.

× I'm positive.

✓ I'm positive.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed; provided for completeness.

× In fact, like when I have to, when I'm really happy or like like I'm having a good day, I always listen, listen to happy music because it increase my my mood.

✓ In fact, when I'm really happy or having a good day, I always listen to happy music because it increases my mood.

Remove filler repetition. Use present simple 'it increases' for habitual action (subject-verb agreement plus present tense). 'Having' is correct as present participle to describe current state. Also correct double 'my my' to single 'my'.

× ...because it increase my my mood.

✓ ...because it increases my mood.

Subject 'it' requires third-person singular verb form 'increases'. Also remove duplicate word 'my'. This is a subject-verb agreement error.

× So yeah.

✓ So yes.

Informal filler 'So yeah' is conversational but acceptable; 'So yes' is slightly more formal. This is a stylistic suggestion to fit spoken-test register; not a strict grammatical error.