Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, fluent and precise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “I prefer happy music.”), avoid filler words and repetitions, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use more appropriate vocabulary (e.g. “uplifting” or “cheerful” instead of “funny”). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer happy music because it’s uplifting and improves my mood. For example, upbeat pop songs help me feel energetic when I’m studying or exercising, so I often choose them to stay motivated.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating phrases from the previous response. Begin with a clear yes/no plus reason, then add one specific effect and a brief example. Use correct grammar (subject–verb agreement) and linking words like “because” or “which helps” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, happy music definitely makes me more excited because its fast tempo and positive lyrics boost my energy. For instance, listening to a lively playlist in the morning helps me feel motivated to exercise and tackle my tasks.

× I prefer happy music because it's very funny and and, and I like this, yeah.

✓ I prefer happy music because it's very cheerful, and I like it.

The word 'funny' typically means 'causing laughter' rather than 'joyful or pleasant'. Use 'cheerful' or 'happy' to describe music that makes you feel good. Remove the repeated 'and' and replace 'this' with the pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'happy music'. Also avoid filler words like 'yeah' in a formal answer.

× Yes, I prefer happy music because it make me feel more excited and motivating during the day and I can live more happily and do more things.

✓ Yes, I prefer happy music because it makes me feel more excited and motivated during the day, so I can live more happily and do more things.

The verb must agree with the third-person singular subject 'it', so 'make' should be 'makes'. 'Motivating' is an adjective describing cause; use 'motivated' to describe the speaker's state. Add 'so' or a comma to link the clauses clearly. This fixes subject-verb agreement and corrects adjective/adverb usage.