Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Những điểm cần cải thiện: (1) Ngữ pháp: sửa cấu trúc động từ (ví dụ: 'prefer to listen to' hoặc 'prefer listening to'), và thêm mạo từ hoặc giới từ khi cần ('listen to happy music', 'when I study'). (2) Tính tự nhiên: tránh tiếng ậm ừ ("mmm", "uh") trong bài thi; bắt đầu câu trực tiếp với ý chính. (3) Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng: câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ với liên từ (because, so, for example). (4) Từ vựng: dùng từ phong phú hơn (cheerful → upbeat, uplifting). Cách cải thiện cụ thể: luyện nói các mẫu như ‘I prefer listening to upbeat music because…’ và thực hành nối câu bằng 'because' hoặc 'so' để mở rộng ý trong tối đa 3 câu phụ.

例: I prefer listening to happy, upbeat music because it lifts my mood and helps me relax. For example, I often play cheerful songs while studying, since they keep me focused and in a good mood.

提案: Những điểm cần cải thiện: (1) Rõ ràng và chính xác: câu trả lời có một vài lỗi hiểu nhầm 'epic music on cheerful Moses' - cần dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'epic or cheerful music'). (2) Ngữ pháp: chia động từ (it helps), thì (I feel → present simple), và cấu trúc ý nghĩa ('so I have more energy to...'). (3) Mạch lạc: sắp xếp ý theo trình tự hợp lý: trả lời có/không + lý do cụ thể + ví dụ. (4) Từ vựng: thay 'do something such as study exercise' bằng các hoạt động cụ thể ('study, exercise, or complete chores'). Thực hành nói ngắn gọn: câu trả lời 2–3 câu, dùng liên từ (because, so, for example) và tránh tiếng ậm ừ.

例: Yes, happy or epic music does make me feel more excited because it increases my energy levels. For example, when I listen to upbeat songs I feel motivated to study or exercise, so I can concentrate better and stay active.

× MMM I prefer listen to happy music.

✓ MMM I prefer listening to happy music.

You should use the gerund after prefer when it is followed by a verb. Use 'prefer + -ing' (or 'prefer to + verb') so say 'prefer listening' or 'prefer to listen'. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer listening to happy music.' or 'I prefer to listen to happy music.'

× It makes me feel more happy and relaxed.

✓ It makes me feel happier and more relaxed.

Use the comparative adjective 'happier' instead of the adverb 'more happy'. Adjectives that form comparative by adding -er are preferred for short adjectives like 'happy'. Suggestion: Use 'happier' for comparison: 'It makes me feel happier and more relaxed.'

× I usually listen happy music when study.

✓ I usually listen to happy music when I study.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by a noun object: 'listen to music'. Also the clause 'when study' needs the subject 'I' to form a complete clause. Suggestion: Use 'listen to' and include the subject: 'I usually listen to happy music when I study.'

× MMM I usually listen to epic music on cheerful Moses.

✓ MMM I usually listen to epic music or cheerful songs.

The phrase 'on cheerful Moses' is incorrect and likely a misselection of words. 'Cheerful' should modify a noun like 'songs'. Use a conjunction 'or' to list alternatives. Replace unknown word 'Moses' with the intended noun 'songs'. Suggestion: Say 'epic music or cheerful songs.'

× It help me feel relaxed and more excited so I have more energy.

✓ It helps me feel relaxed and more excited, so I have more energy.

When the subject is 'It' (third person singular), the verb must take the -s form: 'helps'. Also add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'helps' for third person singular: 'It helps me feel relaxed and more excited, so I have more energy.'

× Umm I thought I had more energy to do something such as study exercise.

✓ Umm I think I have more energy to do things such as studying or exercising.

Tense and sentence structure are inconsistent. The context uses present tense preference, so use present 'think' and 'have' rather than past 'thought/had'. Use plural 'things' and gerunds 'studying' and 'exercising' after 'such as'. Suggestion: Use present tense and gerunds: 'I think I have more energy to do things such as studying or exercising.'