Music— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 반복되고 어색한 표현(예: 'a free time', 'Uh')이 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제 문장으로 바로 답하고, 한 번만 'prefer'를 사용하세요. 또한 구체적인 이유(예: 활동 상황, 좋아하는 장르나 아티스트)를 덧붙여 내용을 풍부하게 만드세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유와 예를 자연스럽게 이어주면 좋습니다.

例: I prefer happy music in my free time because it lifts my mood. For example, upbeat pop or indie songs help me feel more energetic when I'm walking or doing chores, so I usually play playlists with lively rhythms to stay motivated.

提案: 문법(주어-동사 일치, 어순)과 불필요한 'uh' 같은 말버릇을 줄이세요. 한 문장에 이유와 결과를 논리적으로 연결하고, 구체적인 예시를 넣어 설명을 강화하세요. 연결어(For example, Moreover, As a result)를 사용하면 답이 더 논리적으로 들립니다.

例: Yes, happy music usually makes me feel more excited because of its fast tempo and cheerful melodies. For example, when I listen to upbeat electronic tracks before exercising, I feel more energetic and less stressed, which improves my overall mood.

× I prefer happy music in my free time.

✓ I prefer happy music in my free time.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct. Keep using the simple present to express general preference.

× Uh, when I have a free time, I prefer to listen to happy music to relieve my stress.

✓ Uh, when I have free time, I prefer to listen to happy music to relieve my stress.

Use 'free time' without the indefinite article 'a' because 'time' in this phrase is an uncountable noun. Remove 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I believe uh listening happy music make me feel more excited.

✓ I believe, uh, listening to happy music makes me feel more excited.

After 'listening' the preposition 'to' is required (verb + -ing often needs a preposition). Also, with the gerund phrase 'listening to happy music' as the subject, use third person singular verb 'makes' for subject-verb agreement. Add commas to reflect speech hesitation.

× Also it can relieve stress.

✓ It can also relieve stress.

Adverb placement: 'also' is usually placed before the main verb or after the subject. Moving 'also' before 'relieve' or after 'it' improves word order and clarity.

× It helps for mental health.

✓ It helps mental health.

'Help' is followed directly by the object without 'for' when indicating beneficial effect. Alternatively, you could say 'It helps with mental health.' but removing 'for' is the simplest correction.