Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid repetition. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my high school chemistry teacher. She helped me by taking detailed notes and explaining difficult theories and lab procedures step by step, which made chemistry much easier to understand. I also liked her polite and patient manner.

提案: Be direct and clear: state your intention, give two concise reasons with linking words, and avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'help others', 'rewarding', 'underprivileged students').

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher. I find teaching rewarding because it lets me help others learn and make a positive difference. Also, I would like to support underprivileged students by offering free tutoring when I can.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the remembered teacher and give specific, coherent reasons. Use correct pronouns and simple vocabulary. Remove confusing or contradictory statements and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I remember my former math teacher very well. She encouraged creative problem solving and often showed how unusual methods could make difficult problems easier, which changed how I think about math.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, give one or two brief reasons with linking words. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I am no longer in touch because...'). Avoid extra hesitation words.

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers. I moved away a few years ago and many of them have also relocated, so we lost contact.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence describing one or two concrete ways she helped you. Use linking words (for example, 'for instance', 'also') and correct verb forms. Be specific about actions (e.g., 'gave step-by-step feedback', 'explained lab techniques').

例: She helped me in several ways. For instance, she gave me step-by-step feedback on my mistakes and showed me practical techniques in the lab, and she also supported me outside class like a mentor.

提案: Give a concise direct answer, then two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid general negative statements; use precise language and correct grammar (plural/singular, tense).

例: No, I prefer my high school teachers. My primary school teachers were sometimes strict and harsh, whereas my high school teachers were polite and gave patient, step-by-step help to improve my mistakes.

× Yes, of course I have the favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, of course I have a favorite teacher.

Use of definite article 'the' before 'favorite teacher' is incorrect because the speaker refers to one among many, not a specific previously identified teacher. Use the indefinite article 'a'. Suggestion: use 'a favorite teacher' or 'my favorite teacher' if specifying ownership.

× My chemistry teacher is a one of my favorite because I think she helped me the doing the different kind of the notes and also the help needed when I was struggling any kind of the chemical theory and practical.

✓ My chemistry teacher is one of my favorites because she helped me take different kinds of notes and gave the help I needed when I was struggling with chemical theory and practical work.

Errors: unnecessary article 'a' before 'one of', plural 'favorites' needed, incorrect verb forms ('helped me the doing' -> 'helped me take'), incorrect use of 'different kind' (should be 'different kinds'), missing preposition 'with' after 'struggling', and 'practical' should be 'practical work'. Suggestion: remove extra articles, use plural where appropriate, use correct verbs and prepositions.

× That's why she is my favorite and also her nature is very polite.

✓ That's why she is my favorite, and she is very polite.

Awkward phrase 'her nature is very polite' is unnatural in English. Use subject 'she' with adjective 'polite'. Suggestion: say 'she is very polite' or 'her personality is very polite' (better: 'she has a very polite manner').

× Yes, of course, I want to be a teacher when I get a chance in my future, because in the teacher profession, I think that's all give help to the another person is one of the grateful work in the my life and I also I think that helping the poor, poor pupils and poor students without any fees.

✓ Yes, of course. I want to be a teacher if I get the chance in the future, because in the teaching profession, helping others is a grateful work in my life, and I would like to help poor pupils and students without charging fees.

Multiple issues: 'when I get a chance in my future' awkward — use 'if I get the chance in the future'; 'teacher profession' -> 'teaching profession'; 'that's all give help to the another person' should be 'helping others'; article errors 'the my life' -> 'my life'; repetition 'poor, poor' remove duplicate; verb form and modal usage 'I would like to help' fits intent. Suggestion: simplify and use correct noun forms and articles.

× One of them I God grace.

✓ One of them was, by God's grace.

Original fragment lacks a clear verb and uses incorrect structure. Add past tense verb 'was' to complete sentence and 'by God's grace' is correct idiomatic expression. Suggestion: include verbs and proper prepositional phrase.

× Yes, of course, I have a teacher from my past that I still remembered, and this not none another than my math teacher because when I was doing any kind of the mathematic solution, I remember that she heard taunts because he always say that to doing the novel mathematical is a one of the best, bad and helpful, uh, method in the life.

✓ Yes, of course. I have a teacher from my past whom I still remember; she was my math teacher. When I was solving mathematical problems, I remember that she would hear taunts, and she always said that doing novel mathematics is one of the best, most challenging, and most helpful methods in life.

Errors: mix of tenses ('have... remembered' -> 'have... remember' or 'whom I still remember'); 'this not none another than' incorrect—use 'she was'; 'mathematic solution' -> 'solving mathematical problems'; 'she heard taunts because he always say' unclear pronouns—use consistent 'she' and past tense 'said'; 'a one of the' -> 'one of the'; adjectives 'best, bad and helpful' unclear — choose 'best, most challenging, and most helpful'. Suggestion: keep past tense when recounting past events and use clear pronouns.

× No, I'm not still in the touch with my primary school teacher because, uh, I left my schools, uh, the last two or three years and, and I think that their time is totally changed.

✓ No, I'm not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I left my school two or three years ago and I think their lives have completely changed.

Errors: 'in the touch' -> 'in touch' or 'still in touch'; 'my schools' should be 'my school'; 'the last two or three years' -> 'two or three years ago'; 'their time is totally changed' unclear — likely 'their lives have completely changed'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and time expressions.

× My still family member, still teachers are moved from that schools and moved from another places.

✓ My remaining family members and former teachers have moved away from those schools to other places.

Errors: 'my still family member' incorrect; use 'remaining' or 'still' differently; plural agreement: 'members' and 'teachers'; 'that schools' -> 'those schools'; 'moved from another places' -> 'moved to other places'. Suggestion: ensure correct pronouns/determiners and plural agreement.

× So that's why not touched with me.

✓ So they are no longer in contact with me.

Original lacks subject and proper verb. Provide full clause with subject 'they' and verb phrase 'are no longer in contact with'. Suggestion: use complete sentence structure.

× Uh, there are a lot of the different ways to helping my favorite teacher in the chemistry.

✓ There are many different ways my favorite chemistry teacher helped me.

Incorrect infinitive/gerund: 'ways to helping' should be 'ways of helping' or 'ways to help', but context shows teacher helped student — rephrase to 'ways my favorite chemistry teacher helped me'. Suggestion: choose correct 'to help' or 'of helping' depending on structure.

× Uh, they were always to taught me to the different, my mistakes by step by step.

✓ She always taught me to correct my mistakes step by step.

Pronoun 'they' mismatches singular teacher; 'to taught' incorrect (infinitive vs past); 'to the different, my mistakes' awkward — use 'to correct my mistakes'; 'by step by step' -> 'step by step'. Suggestion: match pronouns to the noun and use correct verb forms.

× And also, uh, her nature is very polite. So that's why they was politely said to the, my mistakes and, uh, prove me, uh, without any another teacher help.

✓ Also, she is very polite. She would politely point out my mistakes and help me without needing another teacher's help.

Pronoun inconsistency: 'they was' should be 'she would' or 'she would'; 'politely said to the, my mistakes' -> 'politely point out my mistakes'; 'prove me' unclear -> 'help me'; 'without any another teacher help' -> 'without another teacher's help'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and use clear verbs for actions.

× And also they was to guide me like my parents.

✓ She also guided me like a parent.

Pronoun 'they' incorrect for singular; 'was to guide me' awkward — use simple past 'guided me'; 'like my parents' could mean 'like a parent' or 'like my parents did' — likely 'like a parent'. Suggestion: match singular/plural and prefer simple past for past actions.

× I think no, I don't like the primary school teachers more than high school teachers.

✓ No, I don't like primary school teachers more than high school teachers.

Unnecessary 'the' before 'primary school teachers'; keep comparative structure simple. Suggestion: remove definite article unless referring to a specific group.

× Look on in my primary there's some teacher are very rude and taught taught me the very rough behavior.

✓ In my primary school, some teachers were very rude and treated me very roughly.

Problems: 'Look on in my primary' unnatural — use 'In my primary school'; 'there's some teacher are' incorrect subject-verb agreement; repeated 'taught taught' wrong verb; 'the very rough behavior' -> 'treated me very roughly'. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and proper verbs for behavior.

× But high school teacher was very polite and also helped me the step by step and try to me to improve my mistakes in without any hesitation.

✓ But my high school teachers were very polite and helped me step by step and tried to help me improve my mistakes without any hesitation.

Errors: singular/plural mismatch 'high school teacher was' -> 'teachers were' if plural; 'helped me the step by step' -> 'helped me step by step'; 'try to me to improve' -> 'tried to help me improve'; remove unnecessary 'in'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently and correct verb forms.