Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘helps me and speaks clearly’). Keep it concise (maximum 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my secondary school biology teacher, Mr. Gay. He is very kindhearted and always explains difficult topics clearly, speaking slowly so I can follow. Because of his patience, I improved a lot in biology and enjoyed the lessons.

提案: Give a direct answer, then give specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar (e.g., ‘teachers’, ‘the job is’). Avoid hesitation and redundancy. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I respect teachers because the job is very demanding and requires strong patience and planning, which I feel I lack. For these reasons, I don't think I would be a good teacher.

提案: Answer clearly and use past details with correct tenses. Avoid irrelevant or unclear stories; explain briefly why you remember him using linking words. Keep the story concise and precise.

例: Yes. I still remember my favorite teacher, Mr. Gay, because he was always patient with my mistakes. For example, when I was 14 and behaved badly toward a friend, he calmly explained why my action was wrong instead of punishing me, which made a big impression on me.

提案: Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases (‘the parrot was too long’ is unclear). Give a clear reason and, if possible, one supporting detail or example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘period was too long’ or ‘it’s been too long’).

例: No, I am not. I haven't kept in touch because it has been many years since primary school, so I don't have their contact details and I think they may not remember me well.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and grammar (‘patient’, ‘speaks’). Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples of how he helped you, using linking words. Avoid repetition.

例: My favorite teacher helped me by being very patient and explaining topics slowly and clearly. As a result, I felt comfortable asking questions and my confidence in biology improved.

提案: Answer the question directly, even if briefly, then support with one reason using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘students’, ‘respectful’). Avoid refusing to answer; instead say you prefer not to compare and explain why.

例: I prefer not to compare them. Although I appreciate teachers from both levels, they do different jobs: primary teachers focus on basic skills while high school teachers prepare students for exams, so it's unfair to say one group is better.

× He's my uh, biology teacher at secondary school.

✓ He's my biology teacher at secondary school.

Remove filler 'uh' as it is not a grammar error but interruptive; no verb change needed. Sentence is correct in third person singular 'He is'. Suggestion: avoid fillers in formal speech.

× He's very kind hearted and gentle.

✓ He's very kind-hearted and gentle.

Compound adjective 'kind-hearted' should be hyphenated when used before a noun or as a fixed adjective. Also keep parallel adjectives; this correction improves punctuation and readability.

× He always helps me me and uh speak very slowly and understandable.

✓ He always helps me and speaks very slowly and understandably.

Subject-verb agreement: after 'He' the verb must be 'speaks' (third person singular). Remove duplicated 'me'. Use adverb 'understandably' to modify the verb 'speaks'. Avoid filler 'uh'. Suggestion: ensure verb matches subject and use adverbs to modify verbs.

× I respect all my teacher because the jobs is very hard and has a lot of, uh tough requirements so that I think I cannot be a good teacher.

✓ I respect all my teachers because the job is very hard and has a lot of tough requirements, so I don't think I could be a good teacher.

Plural required: 'teachers' (more than one). Use singular 'job' when referring to the profession in general. Subject-verb agreement: 'job is'. 'Has a lot of tough requirements' is acceptable; remove filler and improve connector: 'so I don't think I could be a good teacher.' Use modal 'could' for ability/possibility. Suggestion: match singular/plural and ensure verbs agree with subjects.

× Yes, he's my favorite teacher that I told you Mr. Gay ****.

✓ Yes, he's the favorite teacher I told you about, Mr. Gay ****.

Use definite article 'the' when referring to a specific favorite teacher. Reorder phrase to 'I told you about' for correct verb phrase. Remove redundant 'that'. Suggestion: use 'the' for a specific item and correct verb phrase order.

× He's very kind and when it was 14 I hit my friends because of some unreasonable reasons, but he's still lovely.

✓ He's very kind. When I was 14 I hit my friend for some unreasonable reason, but he was still kind.

Incorrect word order: use 'When I was 14' (past time + subject + past verb). Use past tense 'was' for description then 'hit' is past. 'Friends' -> 'friend' if hitting one friend; if multiple, keep plural but adjust verbs. 'Unreasonable reasons' -> 'an unreasonable reason' or 'some unreasonable reasons'. Also 'he's still lovely' should be past 'he was still kind' to match context. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct word order for age expressions.

× Hmm, to be honest, uh, no. Now I don't keep in touch with any of my primary school teachers because the the parrot was too long and I think they cannot remember.

✓ No. I don't keep in touch with any of my primary school teachers because the period was too long and I think they don't remember me.

Typo 'parrot' should be 'period'. Use present simple 'don't' for habitual state. 'They don't remember me' includes object pronoun 'me'. Suggestion: correct typos, use appropriate tense for current states and include object pronoun.

× Well Mr. gay **** is very patent, he was always speak slowly and understandable to me to make me feel comfortable learning his lessons and end of it I I love it, I love him.

✓ Well, Mr. Gay **** is very patient; he always spoke slowly and understandably to me to make me feel comfortable learning his lessons, and in the end I loved them; I loved him.

'Patent' is wrong word; correct is 'patient' (adjective). Tense consistency: 'always spoke' (past) matches recollection. Use adverb 'understandably' to modify 'spoke'. Add appropriate punctuation and change 'lessons' object agreement: 'loved them'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: choose correct adjective, keep consistent past tense, and use adverbs to modify verbs.

× I cannot answer this question because I'm now not a high school students.

✓ I cannot answer this question because I'm not a high school student now.

Number agreement: 'students' should be singular 'student' to match 'I'. Word order: place 'now' at end or after auxiliary. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches the subject and place time adverbs appropriately.

× First thing we we shouldn't compare the teachers of each other because they are all respective and they always want to be kind for their students.

✓ First, we shouldn't compare teachers with each other because they are all respectable and they always try to be kind to their students.

Remove duplicate 'we'. Use 'compare teachers with each other' or 'compare one teacher to another'. 'Respective' is incorrect here; use 'respectable' or 'respected' depending on meaning. Use 'try to be kind to' rather than 'want to be kind for'. Suggestion: remove repetition, choose correct adjective, and use correct preposition 'to' with 'kind'.