Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неоднозначен и содержит паузы и тавтологию. Нужно дать ясное тематическое предложение, затем одно-два конкретных уточнения с использованием связок (because, so, for example). Сократите количество слов-паразитов (uh) и повторений (I like my teacher).

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my high school history teacher because she makes lessons very engaging. For example, she uses stories and images to explain events, which helped me remember dates and understand causes.

提案: Предложение грамматически некорректно и неясно. Нужно прямо ответить и дать причину. Используйте простую структуру: "Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future" + причина и пример. Избегайте неверного порядка слов и отсутствия артиклей.

例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy helping others learn. For example, I would like to teach English to young students and organise interactive lessons.

提案: Ответ запутанный, содержит грамматические ошибки и вопросы вместо утверждения. Надо четко назвать учителя, предмет и причину запоминания. Используйте связки (because, who) и избегайте вопросов в ответе.

例: Yes, I still remember my maths teacher from primary school because she was very patient and explained difficult ideas clearly. She often gave extra help after class, which made a big difference.

提案: Короткий, но правильный ответ; однако он слишком краткий. Следует расширить ответ одной дополнительной фразой с объяснением. Используйте слова-связки (because, but) для полноты.

例: No, I'm not. I lost contact with them after moving to another city, but I remember their lessons fondly.

提案: Ответ фрагментарный и неполон. Нужно начать с тематического предложения и конкретно описать, как помогла учительница, используя связь (for example, by). Дайте один конкретный пример результата её помощи.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by making history interesting and easy to understand. For example, she encouraged me to read different history books and discuss ideas in class, which improved my grades.

提案: Ответ противоречив и неконсистентен (отрицание, затем утверждение). Нужно дать ясное мнение и пояснить причину. Используйте связки (because, whereas) и избегайте повторов.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more caring and supportive, whereas my high school teachers focused mainly on exams.

× Yes, uh, I have a favorite teacher, this history teacher, because I like my teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher: my history teacher, because I like him/her.

The original sentence is redundant and awkwardly structured. Use a clear noun phrase 'my history teacher' rather than 'this history teacher' and avoid repeating 'teacher'. Also include a pronoun if needed for clarity. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and remove repetition.

× Yes, I want a teacher in a future lesson English.

✓ Yes, I want to be an English teacher in the future.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing infinitive 'to be'. 'A future lesson English' is ungrammatical. Use 'in the future' for time expression after the verb and the correct noun phrase 'an English teacher'.

× Yes, she's a teacher. Is mathematic. Uh, she is. Don't I like?

✓ Yes, she was my mathematics teacher. I liked her.

The original contains fragmented clauses and incorrect pronoun/reference and tense. 'Is mathematic' is wrong word order and word choice; 'mathematics teacher' is the correct noun. Use past tense 'was' and 'liked' when referring to a past relationship. Avoid fragments and use complete sentences.

× My. How my favorite teacher helped me open history book. Uh, interesting.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me open a history book and made the subject interesting.

Original is fragmented and missing articles and verbs. Use a full clause with subject and verb: 'helped me open a history book' and add a coordinating clause to explain effect: 'and made the subject interesting.' Include the article 'a' before 'history book'.

× No, I don't like my primary. I don't like my high school teachers. I love primary school teachers.

✓ No, I don't prefer my high school teachers; I love my primary school teachers.

The first fragment 'I don't like my primary' is incomplete: 'primary' needs a noun (primary school or primary school teachers). Combine sentences to clarify contrast: 'I don't prefer my high school teachers; I love my primary school teachers.' Use consistent noun phrases.