Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (past tense, word forms) and avoid repetition. Use clearer vocabulary: e.g., "inspiring," "knowledgeable," "ambitious."

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is the coach of the basketball team I joined last year. She was inspiring and very knowledgeable about the game, which helped me improve my skills. In addition, her ambition and patience motivated the whole team to work harder.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and concise reasons with linking words. Use correct structures (e.g., 'I'm not good at teaching' and 'I don't like talking to children'). Avoid long, unclear phrases and provide one specific example or explanation.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I don't feel confident teaching because I find it hard to explain things clearly, and I struggle to understand how young children think. For example, when I tried tutoring younger students, I found it difficult to keep their attention.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence naming or identifying the teacher, then give specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., 'because,' 'for example'). Improve grammar (past tense, pronouns) and reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm.'

例: Yes, I still remember a teacher from my childhood. He helped me when I was struggling with learning and always took care of me; for example, he stayed after class to explain difficult concepts and encouraged me when I felt discouraged.

提案: Give a clear, concise answer and explain briefly with specific reasons. Fix grammar and pronoun use. Avoid confusing phrases like 'appointment school.' Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and one clear example if needed.

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost their contact information after I graduated. Also, in my next school I didn't connect well with the teachers there, so I didn't keep contact with anyone.

提案: Start with a clear statement of how she helped you, then add a specific example and use correct verb forms and collocations (e.g., 'listen to me' not 'listen to my consulting'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance.'

例: She supported me whenever I had problems. For example, when I struggled with my training routine she listened to my concerns, gave practical advice, and encouraged me, which boosted my confidence.

提案: Answer directly, then compare with specific reasons using linking words such as 'because' and 'however.' Fix grammar (e.g., 'talk with them' -> 'talk to them') and clarify who 'her' refers to. Keep to 1–2 supporting sentences.

例: No, I don't like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers. In fact, I have a favorite high school teacher now because she connects with students better and helped me improve academically, whereas I struggled to communicate with primary school teachers.

× Last year I was belong to the basketball team.

✓ Last year I belonged to the basketball team.

The verb phrase 'was belong' is ungrammatical because 'belong' is a stative verb that takes a simple past form 'belonged' to indicate past membership. Use 'belonged' without 'was'. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past states: 'I belonged to the team.'

× I also I especially like the coach.

✓ I especially liked the coach.

Redundant subject 'I' and incorrect tense. The speaker refers to a past year, so use past tense 'liked' and remove the extra 'I'. Suggestion: Say 'I especially liked the coach.'

× She was very impressive on the smart.

✓ She was very impressive and smart.

The original phrase 'impressive on the smart' is ungrammatical. Likely intended to use two adjectives 'impressive' and 'smart' joined by 'and'. Ensure correct adjective order if needed. Suggestion: Use 'She was very impressive and smart.'

× I was very, very impressed by her ambitious and wisdom.

✓ I was very impressed by her ambition and wisdom.

Use the noun 'ambition' (not adjective 'ambitious') and parallel structure with 'wisdom'. Remove duplicate 'very, very' unless for emphasis; one 'very' is enough. Suggestion: 'I was very impressed by her ambition and wisdom.'

× No, I don't want to be because I'm not good at teaching to something and I'm not.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher because I'm not good at teaching and I don't enjoy it.

Missing article before 'teacher' and incorrect phrase 'teaching to something'. Also 'I'm not' incomplete. Use 'a teacher', remove 'to something', and complete thought with 'I don't enjoy it' or similar. Suggestion: 'I don't want to be a teacher because I'm not good at teaching and I don't enjoy it.'

× I don't like talking with child because I can't understand what they thinking and it is difficult for me so I don't want to be like that.

✓ I don't like talking with children because I can't understand what they are thinking, and it is difficult for me, so I don't want to be a teacher.

Use plural 'children' instead of singular 'child' when speaking generally. 'They thinking' needs auxiliary 'are' for present continuous. 'Be like that' is vague; clarify 'be a teacher'. Suggestion: 'I don't like talking with children because I can't understand what they are thinking, and it's difficult for me, so I don't want to be a teacher.'

× Yes, I have and because I was very uh struggling person when I was child, so my teacher always take care of me.

✓ Yes, I do. When I was a child I struggled a lot, so my teacher always took care of me.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing. Use 'do' to answer 'Do you have', use 'when I was a child' with article 'a', and 'struggled' (past simple) plus past 'took care' for agreement. 'Take care' should be past 'took care'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child I struggled a lot, so my teacher always took care of me.'

× Umm, I very appreciate him.

✓ I really appreciate him.

'Very appreciate' is incorrect collocation; use adverb 'really' or 'greatly' with 'appreciate'. Suggestion: 'I really appreciate him.'

× He's very he's very kind to our child.

✓ He is very kind to us when we were children.

Original repeats phrase and uses 'our child' incorrectly. Likely meaning 'was kind to us when we were children.' Clarify time with past tense. Suggestion: 'He was very kind to us when we were children.'

× So I'm remember him.

✓ So I remember him.

'I'm remember' is incorrect because 'remember' is not used with continuous here. Use simple present 'I remember him'. Suggestion: 'I remember him.'

× No, I don't because I couldn't get the contact when I graduated my primary school and in my appointment school I don't have any teachers that I liked because I was not.

✓ No, I don't, because I couldn't get their contact information when I graduated from primary school, and at my current school I don't have any teachers I like.

Awkward and incomplete clauses. Use 'couldn't get their contact information', 'graduated from primary school', and 'current school' for clarity. Remove incomplete 'because I was not.' Suggestion: 'I couldn't get their contact information when I graduated from primary school, and at my current school I don't have any teachers I like.'

× I was struggling to talk with them and she was difficult for me.

✓ I found it difficult to talk with them.

Sentence mixes subjects and tenses and uses 'she was difficult for me' awkwardly. Use impersonal structure 'I found it difficult to talk with them.' Suggestion: 'I found it difficult to talk with them.'

× When I have trouble, she always listen to my consulting and cheered me up.

✓ When I had trouble, she always listened to my concerns and cheered me up.

Tense mismatch: question refers to past; use past 'had' and 'listened'. 'Consulting' is wrong noun here—use 'concerns' or 'problems'. Suggestion: 'When I had trouble, she always listened to my concerns and cheered me up.'

× I was very glad to her behavior and I appreciate it.

✓ I was very grateful for her behavior, and I appreciated it.

'Glad to her behavior' is incorrect collocation. Use 'grateful for' or 'pleased with'. Also match tense: past 'appreciated' if referring to past. Suggestion: 'I was very grateful for her behavior, and I appreciated it.'

× No I don't. As I said I'm not good at talk with them when I was primary student and I like I have a favorite teacher in my high school now so I don't like her.

✓ No, I don't. As I said, I wasn't good at talking with them when I was a primary student, and I now have a favorite teacher in high school, so I like her more.

Tense and verb form errors: use past 'wasn't' for past condition, 'talking' gerund after 'good at', and clarify comparison 'like her more'. Also 'primary student' -> 'a primary school student'. Suggestion: 'I wasn't good at talking with them when I was a primary school student, and I now have a favorite teacher in high school, so I like her more.'