Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish your idea. Focus on verb forms, articles, and word order (e.g., “my favorite teacher,” not “his favorite teacher”).

例: My favorite teacher was Dr. Harpreet Kaur, who taught economics in my senior secondary school. She explained difficult concepts clearly and used real-life examples to make them easy to understand. Because of her clear explanations, I felt more confident in exams.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain reasons with clear linking words. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences. Correct tense and article use (e.g., “I don't have any plans” not “I haven't has any plan”). Be specific about your future goals.

例: No, I don't plan to become a teacher. Right now I am improving my communication skills because I want to study abroad for further education. Since I come from a commerce background, I am aiming to pursue a chartered accountancy qualification instead.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific details about why you remember them, using linking words for coherence. Correct collocations (e.g., “kind in nature,” “explained things very well”) and avoid fillers like “UH.” Keep to three to four sentences.

例: Yes, I remember my UKG teacher, Ms. Bharti. She was very kind and patient with every student, and she explained things very clearly using simple examples. Because of her gentle approach, I always felt comfortable asking questions.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific examples of how you keep in touch. Use correct plural/singular forms and prepositions (e.g., “in touch with my primary school teachers,” “added me on Instagram”). Avoid tense errors and redundant phrases.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with some of my primary school teachers. We follow each other on Instagram and sometimes message each other when we miss one another. They also contact me if they need help, and I try to support them when I can.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, then provide two specific examples of help using linking words like “for example” or “for instance.” Correct verbs and phrases (e.g., “helped me a lot,” “explained questions to me clearly”). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

例: My favorite teacher helped me a lot, especially when I struggled with difficult questions. For example, she would explain problems step by step and give extra practice, which made me feel supported and more confident in my studies.

提案: Answer directly and use comparative structures correctly. State your preference clearly and give a short reason using linking words like “because” or “however.” Fix grammar (e.g., “we have grown older,” “teachers become more friendly”). Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I like both, but I prefer my high school teachers more because we were older and developed a friendlier relationship with them. For instance, high school teachers often discussed future plans and gave more personal guidance.

× I'm not in the school now, but I had his favorite teacher in my senior secondary school.

✓ I'm not in school now, but I had a favourite teacher in my senior secondary school.

The sentence uses 'had his favorite teacher' which is incorrect: 'had' is acceptable for past possession but 'his' is wrong reference and 'the school' should be 'school' in this context. Also 'favorite' should be 'favourite' depending on variety; keep consistent. Suggest using 'a favourite teacher' to indicate one teacher among many.

× Her name is Doctor Harpreet Kaur.

✓ Her name is Dr Harpreet Kaur.

Using 'Doctor' in full is acceptable but typical spoken English uses 'Dr' as a title before the name. No grammatical error besides style; prefer 'Dr' for natural speech.

× She taught us economics.

✓ She taught us economics.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I liked her because she explained every and everything in a very keen way and she explained every difficult concept in a very clearly way.

✓ I liked her because she explained everything very clearly and explained every difficult concept in a clear way.

Problems: 'every and everything' is redundant; use 'everything' or 'every concept'. 'in a very keen way' is unnatural—'keen' is not used to describe explanation manner. 'in a very clearly way' mixes adverb and noun incorrectly. Use adverb 'clearly' or adjective 'clear' with 'way' (clear way). Suggest simplifying to 'explained everything very clearly'.

× And she also.

✓ She was also very encouraging.

This fragment 'And she also.' is incomplete (no verb or object). Provide a complete idea consistent with context, e.g., 'She was also very encouraging.' Suggest always include a verb and complement to complete a sentence.

× Till now I haven't has any plan about to uh become a teacher or a umm teach the student uh as now I'm working on my communication skills I have I have want to move to abroad for my further studies.

✓ So far I don't have any plans to become a teacher or to teach students; right now I'm working on my communication skills and I want to move abroad for further studies.

Multiple issues: 'haven't has' mixes present perfect negative with wrong auxiliary; 'any plan about to become' is ungrammatical—use 'plans to become' or 'plan to teach'. 'I have I have want to' is wrong; use 'I want to'. 'move to abroad' should be 'move abroad'. Also tense consistency: present simple 'don't have' is appropriate for current state. Suggest simplifying and using correct auxiliaries.

× As I am in the background of the commerce.

✓ As my background is in commerce.

The phrase 'in the background of the commerce' is unidiomatic. Use 'my background is in commerce' or 'I have a background in commerce.' Ensure correct preposition 'in' after 'background' and omit article before 'commerce'.

× I would definitely like to uh come in the uh, in the CA or the.

✓ I would definitely like to pursue the CA qualification.

Original is fragmented and unclear: 'come in the CA' is incorrect collocation. 'CA' (Chartered Accountant) requires verbs like 'pursue' or 'become a'. Suggest 'pursue the CA qualification' for clarity.

× Yes I remember 1 teacher. Her name is UH Bharti and she is my UKG teacher.

✓ Yes, I remember one teacher. Her name is Bharti and she was my UKG teacher.

Use 'one' instead of numeral '1' in speech transcripts. 'is my UKG teacher' should be past 'was' if referring to past, since UKG was in the past. Remove filler 'UH' in transcription when correcting.

× She is very good in the nature and she was very polite with me and each and every student.

✓ She had a very kind nature and was very polite to me and to every student.

'Good in the nature' is incorrect; use 'kind nature' or 'good-natured'. 'Polite with' is acceptable but 'polite to' is more natural. 'Each and every' is wordy; 'every' suffices.

× Also she explained everything in a very nicely read and the politely way.

✓ She also explained everything very nicely and politely.

'In a very nicely read and the politely way' is ungrammatical: adverbs 'nicely' and 'politely' should modify 'explained'; remove 'read' and awkward 'the ... way' phrase. Use parallel adverbs.

× She is a very UH. She is my favorite teacher.

✓ She was a very caring teacher. She is my favourite teacher.

'She is a very UH' is an incomplete fragment with filler. Replace with a complete adjective phrase like 'a very caring teacher.' Keep 'is my favourite teacher' if the preference still holds.

× Yes I am still in the touch with my primary school teacher.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teachers.

Use 'in touch' not 'in the touch'. If referring to multiple teachers, use plural 'teachers'. Also add commas for clarity. 'Primary school teacher' singular would be correct only if referring to one person.

× They are the some teacher who are very polite to me and they are being added with me in the on the Instagram.

✓ They are some teachers who are very polite to me, and they have added me on Instagram.

'the some teacher' is incorrect; use 'some teachers'. 'They are being added with me in the on the Instagram' is ungrammatical—use 'they have added me on Instagram' or 'we are connected on Instagram.' Use correct verb tense and preposition 'on Instagram'.

× Sometimes she texted me or I texted her whenever I miss her and she also texted me when she want anything or the any need of me.

✓ Sometimes she texts me or I text her when I miss her, and she also texts me when she wants anything or needs me.

Mixes past and present tenses. Use present simple 'texts' for habitual actions. 'Whenever I miss her' is fine; 'when she want' should be 'wants'. 'the any need of me' is incorrect—use 'needs me' or 'needs anything from me.' Ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I always help her.

✓ I always help her.

This sentence is correct; present simple appropriately expresses habitual action.

× My favorite teacher helped me in a lot of a way.

✓ My favourite teacher helped me in many ways.

'In a lot of a way' is ungrammatical. Use 'in many ways' or 'in a lot of ways.' Also 'favourite' spelling consistency.

× Whenever I feel any difficulty in any questions, she explained me that question in a very keen way and in a very polite way that makes me feel happy and relaxed that I have someone who can stand with me and whenever I needed someone and she always stood with me whenever I need her.

✓ Whenever I have difficulty with any question, she explained it to me clearly and politely, which made me feel happy and relaxed because I knew I had someone who would stand by me whenever I needed support.

Many errors: use present for general habit 'have difficulty', not 'feel any difficulty'. 'Explained me that question' incorrect—use 'explained it to me'. 'In a very keen way' is wrong; use 'clearly'. Tense consistency: past actions 'explained' and 'made' used appropriately; 'whenever I need her' should be 'whenever I needed her' to keep past narrative or adjust all to present. Suggest simplifying and using correct object placement and prepositions.

× Yes, I love my primary school teacher but as compared to the high school teacher, I will prefer to choose the high school teacher because as the we have become a elder in the high school and the teacher become a friendly with us.

✓ Yes, I love my primary school teachers, but compared to high school teachers, I would prefer high school teachers because we become older in high school and the teachers become more friendly with us.

Issues: 'as compared to the high school teacher' awkward—use 'compared to high school teachers'. 'I will prefer to choose' should be 'I would prefer'. 'a elder' incorrect; use 'older'. 'the teacher become a friendly' should be 'teachers become more friendly' or 'friendlier'. Use plural consistency and correct comparative forms.

× I think so I am more friendly with my high school teachers rather than the primary school teachers.

✓ I think I am friendlier with my high school teachers than with my primary school teachers.

'I think so I am' is awkward — use 'I think'. 'More friendly' is acceptable but 'friendlier' is more natural. Use parallel structure 'than with' for comparison. Avoid redundant 'the' before 'primary school teachers'.