Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details about why she was your favorite using linking words. Avoid redundancy and long relative clauses.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because she explained difficult ideas clearly. For example, she used simple examples and class activities that helped everyone understand grammar and vocabulary better.

提案: Organize the answer: state your intention, give a reason, and finish with a brief explanation. Correct grammar (prepositions, articles) and use linking words like 'although' and 'however'.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future, although I am currently studying tourism. I think teaching is possible even without an education degree because you can gain a teaching license and practical experience.

提案: Be specific about methods and correct tense and agreement. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and avoid vague phrases like 'all of that methods technologies'. Limit to two or three sentences.

例: Yes. I still remember my English teacher because she used technology and interactive methods. For example, she showed videos and used online quizzes, which made the lessons memorable and easy to understand.

提案: Give a direct answer then a clear reason. Correct vocabulary (moved away, rural/urban) and grammar (plural agreement). Keep it short and coherent.

例: No, I am not. We moved away from our old neighborhood to a rural area, so my primary school teachers live far away and we lost contact.

提案: Clarify timeline and use correct tenses and vocabulary. Start with the main point, then give specific examples of help (skills, methods). Avoid unclear phrases like 'some image' and 'IS'.

例: She helped me improve my basic English skills. Before her classes I could not read or speak English well, but after a year of her lessons I learned basic grammar, vocabulary, and simple conversation, which gave me confidence to continue learning.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief reason with specific details. Use correct prepositions and concise phrasing (e.g., 'shape who I am' or 'helped me choose my field').

例: Not really. I prefer my college professors because they guided me from the first year and helped me develop skills and interests related to my current field of study.

× Yes, I do have my favorite teacher which is my English teacher way back on my high school days because she is so good at teaching which makes all of her students to understand what she was saying as well as what she was pertaining to learn.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher: my high school English teacher, because she was so good at teaching that all of her students understood what she said and what she wanted them to learn.

Use of 'which' for people and clauses is incorrect; use 'who' or restructure. 'Way back on my high school days' is wrong preposition and plural; use 'in high school' or 'during my high school days'. 'Makes all of her students to understand' incorrectly uses infinitive with 'make' which should take base verb without 'to' and the tense should match past 'made... understand'. 'What she was pertaining to learn' is incorrect phrase; use 'what she wanted them to learn'. Overall restructure improves clarity.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future even though that I am a tourism student which is not related on education and more related on travel arrangements.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future even though I am a tourism student, which is not related to education but related to travel arrangements.

Incorrect use of prepositions: 'related on' should be 'related to'. Remove unnecessary 'that' after 'even though'. Also use commas to separate clauses and 'but' is better than 'and more' to contrast.

× You can be a teacher just by taking an licensure.

✓ You can become a teacher by taking a licensure exam.

Article error: 'an licensure' is incorrect because 'licensure' is an uncountable noun in this context or the collocation is 'licensure exam'. Use 'a licensure exam' or 'licensure'. Also 'be a teacher' can be 'become a teacher' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, recently my favorite teacher is my English teacher because I like how she use all of that methods technologies to teach us to make it easier for us to understand which all of the knowledge on her subject is still on my mind as of now.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher was my English teacher because I like how she used all those methods and technologies to teach us, which made it easier to understand; the knowledge from her class is still in my mind.

Pronoun and determiner errors: 'she use' should be 'she used' (verb tense and subject-verb agreement). 'All of that methods technologies' is incorrect; use 'those methods and technologies'. 'Which all of the knowledge on her subject is still on my mind' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'the knowledge from her class is still in my mind'. Also tense adjusted to past since referring to past teacher.

× No, because we moved out to our previous house, we are now living in the province or to the urban areas.

✓ No, because we moved from our previous house; we now live in the province rather than in an urban area.

Preposition errors: 'moved out to our previous house' is wrong; use 'moved from our previous house' or 'moved out of'. 'Living in the province or to the urban areas' is incorrect contrast and preposition; use 'in the province' and contrast with 'in an urban area' or 'rather than in an urban area'.

× So my primary school teachers is now far away.

✓ So my primary school teachers are now far away.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teachers' is plural and requires the plural verb 'are', not 'is'.

× She helped me to understand the difficulties of her subject.

✓ She helped me understand the difficulties of the subject.

Verb pattern: 'help' can be followed by the base verb without 'to' ('helped me understand'). 'Her subject' is acceptable but 'the subject' is more natural in this context.

× Since before IS I don't know how to write, read and speak English.

✓ Before her classes, I did not know how to write, read, or speak English.

Tense error: 'I don't know' should be past 'I did not know' because referring to a past state. 'Since before IS' is ungrammatical; remove 'IS' and use 'Before her classes' or 'Before that'.

× But because of her IS I learned some the basics as well as some image, not just the proficient because I think one year is not enough to be a proficient in English.

✓ But because of her, I learned some basics and some concepts, though I did not become proficient; I think one year is not enough to become proficient in English.

Many errors: 'IS' should be removed. 'I learned some the basics' incorrect article use and word order; use 'some basics'. 'Some image' is wrong word choice; likely 'some concepts' or 'some ideas'. 'Not just the proficient' is incorrect; use 'did not become proficient'. Use 'become proficient' not 'be a proficient'. Tense consistency to past.

× Not really, I prefer my college professors because they shape me on where I am now since first year and they let me grow to the field that I am currently taking.

✓ Not really. I prefer my college professors because they shaped me into who I am now since my first year, and they helped me grow in the field I am currently studying.

Conjunction and preposition errors: 'shape me on where I am now since first year' is ungrammatical; use 'shaped me into who I am now' and include 'my' before 'first year'. 'Let me grow to the field' should be 'helped me grow in the field' or 'grow into the field'. Also adjust tense to past 'shaped' and 'helped' since referring to past influence.