Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and keep to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes — my favorite teacher was Mr. Pereira. He was very knowledgeable and inspiring, and he didn’t just read from the textbook; instead, he used laboratory demonstrations and real‑life problems to clarify difficult concepts. Because of this, I understood complex topics much more easily.

提案: Improve fluency by linking sentences and fixing small wording issues. Use a clear topic sentence, then add concise reasons and a brief plan. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Definitely — I want to become a teacher. I have more than ten years’ experience in my field, so I would like to share that knowledge with students and publish books. Therefore, I plan to work as a part‑time lecturer at a nearby university so I can both teach and continue my professional work.

提案: Correct grammar and clarity issues, remove repetitions and ambiguous phrases. Use linking words to explain who they are and give one specific example of their support. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I remember a couple of teachers who still live in my city. We often meet at the gurdwara and in the public park, and they have always encouraged me and praised my academic efforts. I really appreciate their ongoing support.

提案: Make the answer clearer by separating reasons and contrasting current relationships. Fix grammatical mistakes and avoid run‑on sentences. Use linking words like "because" and "however" to structure your response.

例: Unfortunately, no — I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because we moved frequently when I was young due to my father’s military postings. However, I have an excellent relationship with my high school teachers since they still live in my city and we meet up occasionally.

提案: Be precise and avoid redundancy. Correct phrasing (e.g., "religions" unclear) and remove duplicated words. Provide one or two specific examples of feedback or a challenge to make it concrete.

例: My favorite teacher inspired and encouraged me, which helped me develop a habit of consistent study and better focus. She also taught life skills like time management by giving regular feedback and setting challenging but achievable goals, such as weekly projects with strict deadlines.

提案: Make the comparison clearer and correct tense/grammar. Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain why, using linking words like "because" and "therefore". Limit to 3 sentences for clarity.

例: No, I can’t say I prefer my primary school teachers because I don’t have clear memories of them. I remember my high school teachers much better because when I moved to Patiya they became part of my daily life. Therefore they were more influential and I learned more from them.

× I am a big fan of Mr. Pereira because he was inspiring and very knowledgeable teacher.

✓ I am a big fan of Mr. Pereira because he was an inspiring and very knowledgeable teacher.

Missing article 'an' before the noun 'teacher' and 'inspiring' needs to modify 'teacher' as an adjective. Use 'an' because 'teacher' is a singular countable noun and begins with a vowel sound. Improve by adding the appropriate article: 'an inspiring and very knowledgeable teacher.'

× He used the textbook but always explained every detail clearly and gave practical example like laboratory demonstration, real life problem which helped the student understand difficult concepts.

✓ He used the textbook but always explained every detail clearly and gave practical examples like laboratory demonstrations and real-life problems, which helped the students understand difficult concepts.

Plural nouns are required for general counts: 'examples', 'demonstrations', 'problems', and 'students' because the speaker refers to multiple instances and more than one student. Also 'real-life' is a compound adjective and needs a hyphen; add a comma before the relative clause. Improve by making nouns plural and adding necessary punctuation.

× Definitely yes. I have over a decade of experience in my field and I would like to turn that knowledge into books and teach students.

✓ Definitely, yes. I have over a decade of experience in my field and I would like to turn that knowledge into books and teach students.

Minor punctuation: add a comma after an interjection 'Definitely' for natural rhythm. The sentence is otherwise correct grammatically.

× For that reason, I am planning to work as part time lecturer in my nearby university so I can keep working while sharing my expertise.

✓ For that reason, I am planning to work as a part-time lecturer at my nearby university so I can keep working while sharing my expertise.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'part-time lecturer'. 'Part-time' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. Use preposition 'at' with 'university' when speaking of working there. Improves grammaticality and natural phrasing.

× Yes, I remember a couple of my teacher who still live in my city.

✓ Yes, I remember a couple of my teachers who still live in my city.

'A couple of' requires a plural noun 'teachers'. Change singular 'teacher' to plural 'teachers' to agree with 'a couple of'.

× We often meet at the gurdwara hours in the public park and they have always encouraged me and praised my HA efforts, which I really really appreciate.

✓ We often meet at the gurdwara and in the public park, and they have always encouraged me and praised my efforts, which I really appreciate.

The original mixes locations awkwardly and includes 'hours' incorrectly. Remove 'hours'. Separate the two meeting places with 'and in'. 'HA' is unclear; assuming it's extraneous, remove it. Also avoid repeating 'really' twice for formality. This fixes preposition and word-choice errors.

× Unfortunately not. I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers because we moved around a lot when I was young due to my father's military posting, and I do have an excellent relationship with the high school teachers and though because they still live in my city and we meet up occasionally.

✓ Unfortunately, no. I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers because we moved around a lot when I was young due to my father's military posting, but I do have an excellent relationship with my high school teachers because they still live in my city and we meet up occasionally.

Sentence had redundant and misplaced conjunctions 'and though' and mixed clauses. Change 'not' to 'no' after 'Unfortunately' for natural reply and replace 'and though' with 'but' to contrast the two clauses. Specify 'my high school teachers' and remove redundancy. This corrects sentence structure and coherence.

× My favorite teacher encouraged and inspired me, which helped me to develop a habit of consistent study and greater focus.

✓ My favorite teacher encouraged and inspired me, which helped me develop a habit of consistent study and greater focus.

The infinitive 'helped me develop' is more natural without 'to' after 'helped'. Removing 'to' makes the verb phrase standard in this context.

× She also taught important life lessons such as time management and religions by giving regular feedback and setting challenges challenging but achievable goals.

✓ She also taught important life lessons such as time management and religion by giving regular feedback and setting challenging but achievable goals.

Use singular 'religion' as a general topic paired with 'time management'. Remove duplicated word 'challenges' and use adjective 'challenging' before 'but achievable goals'. This fixes redundancy and noun/adjective form.

× I don't have clear memories of my primary school teacher so I can't say I like them more.

✓ I don't have clear memories of my primary school teachers, so I can't say I like them more.

If referring to multiple teachers, use plural 'teachers' and adjust verb punctuation. Also 'them' is plural, so 'teachers' agrees with the pronoun. Add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× I remember my high school teacher much better because I moved to Patiya and they become daily part of my life there.

✓ I remember my high school teachers much better because I moved to Patiya and they became a daily part of my life there.

Use past tense 'became' (past simple) to match 'moved' and the time frame. Also use plural 'teachers' to match 'they' and include the article 'a' before 'daily part'.

× They were more influential and stayed in the same city so I saw them more often and learned a lot from them.

✓ They were more influential and stayed in the same city, so I saw them more often and learned a lot from them.

Sentence is grammatically correct; added a comma before 'so' to improve readability. No verb agreement issue present.