Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更简洁自然，并注意时态一致与连贯衔接。避免重复（如“very, she was very”），把重点信息用一两句表达清楚，补充具体例子来支持观点。可以先一句话直接回答，然后用一两句举例说明老师如何影响你。

例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my English teacher from middle school. She was very friendly and made lessons fun by using games and stories, which helped me enjoy learning and improve my speaking. For example, she organized weekly speaking activities that boosted my confidence.

提案: 句子结构与语法需更准确，避免口语填充词（like “know” 用错）。先直接回答，再给出原因和具体准备措施，句子不要太长。

例: Yes. Becoming an English teacher has been my childhood dream because I enjoy helping others learn. To achieve this, I am preparing for English proficiency tests and taking teaching practice classes at university.

提案: 回答含糊且重复很多填充词，信息不清晰。应先说明有几位，然后选一位详细描述（姓名或特点、做了什么、给你的影响），使用连词保持连贯。控制在3-4句内。

例: Yes, I remember several English teachers, but one stands out. She was my homeroom English teacher who encouraged creative projects and gave personal feedback, which improved my writing and confidence. For instance, she corrected my essays and praised my improvements.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但有重复和语法小错误（性别代词、‘connection measures’不自然）。可以用一两句直接说明原因并用连词连接。

例: Not really. It has been many years and I don't have their contact details, so we lost touch. I sometimes think about emailing the school but I haven't done so yet.

提案: 内容重复且语法错误较多。应用清晰的时态（past for past events），先陈述问题（shy），再说明老师具体做法与结果，并提供具体例子。使用连接词（for example, so）提高逻辑性。

例: When I was a child I was very shy and lacked confidence. My teacher encouraged me to speak in front of the class and praised small improvements, so I gradually became more outgoing. For example, she asked me to present a short story, which boosted my confidence.

提案: 表达理由要具体且措辞自然，避免模糊或含糊的表达（如“she's more straight to me”不清晰）。先直接回答，再比较具体差异并给出原因与例子。

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teacher because she was warm and encouraging, while my high school teacher was strict and focused only on grades. For example, my primary teacher praised my effort, which made learning enjoyable, whereas my high school teacher rarely gave positive feedback.

× ...my English teacher is my favorite teacher. She is very, she was very friendly and taught me a lot.

✓ ...my English teacher was my favorite teacher. She was very friendly and taught me a lot.

学生在谈过去的经历（“when I was... 12 years old”），应使用过去时态。原句混用现在时（is）和过去时（was），导致时间不一致。建议：描述过去的老师时统一使用过去时，例如“was”、“was very friendly”。

× Umm let me and she let me love English very much.

✓ She let me love English very much.

句子结构混乱，含有多余主语“let me and she”。应保留单一主语并使用正确动词结构。建议：使用“She made me love English”或“She let me love English very much”，更自然可改为“She made me fall in love with English.”（过去时）。

× Yes, it's my childhood dream and still know I always want to be a English teacher in my future, so I prepared for my English test.

✓ Yes, it was my childhood dream and I still always want to be an English teacher in the future, so I am preparing for my English test.

句子时间和时态混用，且冠词使用错误（an）。“childhood dream”发生在过去，用过去时更合适；目前仍然想做教师则用现在时态或现在进行时说明正在准备考试。建议：保持时态一致，注意冠词使用“an English teacher”。

× I always want to be a English teacher in my future

✓ I always want to be an English teacher in the future

在英文中，元音音素开头的单词前用不定冠词an，而不是a；另外“in my future”不自然，改为“in the future”。建议：使用“an”并用固定短语“in the future”。

× Yes, it's my uh, several English teachers. Uh, the first English teacher is my uh, host host teacher. Umm, I love it. I love she her very much.

✓ Yes, I had several English teachers. The first was my homeroom teacher. I loved her very much.

原句存在语序和词汇错误（“it's my several”应为“I had several”；“host host teacher”疑为“homeroom teacher”；“I love she her”人称代词和动词形式错误）。建议：使用正确的名词和过去时态，代词用宾格“her”，动词用过去时“loved”。

× The second in the second teacher is my uh, was my mouse teacher. I.

✓ The second teacher was my music teacher.

原句混乱且词汇错误（“mouse teacher”应为“music teacher”），时态应为过去时。建议：简洁表达“The second teacher was my music teacher.”

× Not really. It has been so many years and I don't have his, I don't have her mobile phone number or any kind of measures, connection, connection measures.

✓ Not really. It has been so many years and I don't have her mobile phone number or any contact information.

原句代词混用“his, ... her”，应统一并与先行词性别一致；“measures, connection measures”用词不当，应使用“contact information”。建议：使用单一代词（如“her”）并用常见表达“contact information”。

× So I don't contact with her.

✓ So I don't contact her.

动词“contact”在英语中通常直接跟宾语，不加介词“with”。因此应说“I don't contact her”或更自然“I don't keep in touch with her”。建议：使用“contact her”或“keep in touch with her”。

× When was a child, I'm very shy. I was very shy and I'm not confident.

✓ When I was a child, I was very shy. I wasn't confident.

开头缺少主语“I”；应使用过去时描述过去的性格，且“not confident”在过去用“wasn't confident”。建议：句子改为“When I was a child, I was very shy and not confident.”。

× My teacher taught me and taught me don't be shy and be confident about myself because I'm very excellent and by that.

✓ My teacher taught me not to be shy and to be confident in myself because I was very capable.

原句中“taught me don't”结构错误，应该用不定式“taught me not to...”。“be confident about myself”搭配不当，常用“be confident in myself”。“I'm very excellent and by that”表述不清，应改为“I was very capable”或“because I had potential”。建议：使用不定式结构并调整搭配与用词。

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

句子本身语法正确，这里无需修改。保持复数以比较两组教师。

× Yes, of course, because primary school teacher is my first teacher and she is very young.

✓ Yes, of course, because my primary school teacher was my first teacher and she was very kind.

谈论过去的老师应使用过去时。“is very young”与上下文（过去）不符；另外“young”可能非原意，改为“kind/friendly”更贴切。建议：保持过去时并用合适形容词。

× But my high school teacher, she's more straight to me and I'm not. I don't like her very much.

✓ But my high school teacher was stricter with me, and I didn't like her very much.

描述过去经历应使用过去时。“more straight to me”表达错误，正确应为“stricter with me”。“I'm not”不合时态且不完整，改为“I didn't like her very much.”建议：使用“stricter”并统一为过去时。