Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Giảm sự lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp; mở đầu trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó dùng 1–2 cụm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: cách cô dạy, hoạt động giúp cải thiện kỹ năng). Dùng liên từ hợp lý (for example, because, so) và giới hạn độ dài 3–4 câu. Chú ý thì động từ và giới từ (help with homework, help me improve my speaking).

例: My favorite teacher at secondary school was my English teacher. She was very encouraging and used interactive activities to help me improve my speaking. For example, she organized small group discussions and gave me specific feedback on pronunciation and vocabulary, which really boosted my confidence.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng với câu chủ đề (Yes/No) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn nguyên nhân và kết luận. Sửa lỗi thì (I was, when I grew up) và dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, mạch lạc. Tránh lặp và cụm từ không chính xác (gonna, your teacher).

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future. I used to think I might teach when I was a child, but as I grew up I realised teaching isn't my dream. Instead, I have chosen a career in marketing because I enjoy creativity and working with brands.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, giảm tiếng 'umm' và lặp. Nói cụ thể hơn về loại vấn đề cô giúp (study advice, career guidance, confidence) và dùng thì đúng (when I was having). Giữ 2–3 câu liên kết bằng 'because' hoặc 'she helped by...'.

例: Yes, I still remember my favourite teacher, Mrs. Huang. She helped me a great deal when I faced problems with my studies and future career choices. For example, she gave me advice on university applications and encouraged me to join extracurricular activities that improved my skills.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng (No/Yes) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn, tránh diễn đạt lủng củng. Thay "I am barely get in touch" bằng "I barely keep in touch" hoặc "I'm not in touch"; dùng lí do cụ thể và lịch sự. Giữ 2 câu tối đa.

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I rarely contact them because I feel a bit intimidated and haven't had a reason to reconnect since childhood.

提案: Cải thiện: Nói rõ cách cụ thể cô giúp: hỗ trợ tinh thần (mental health), hướng nghiệp, sửa bài. Dùng cấu trúc đúng (she supported me, helped me do my homework, pointed out mistakes) và thêm ví dụ ngắn. Hạn chế 'umm' và câu dài lộn xộn.

例: She supported me emotionally and encouraged me to continue my education. She also helped with my homework by pointing out mistakes and explaining how to correct them, which improved my study habits.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer high school teachers) rồi nêu lý do rõ ràng, cụ thể (memories, teaching style, subject interest). Sửa ngữ pháp (I don't have many memories, I remember many funny moments with my high school teachers) và tránh lặp. Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers. I don't have many memories from primary school because I focused more on friends, while in high school I remember many funny moments and engaging lessons with my teachers.

× I did have a favorite teacher at a secondary school which is my English teacher.

✓ I had a favorite teacher at secondary school; she was my English teacher.

Use simple past to describe a past state. 'Did have' is unnecessary emphasis and 'which is' should be 'she was' to match past time frame. Suggestion: Use 'I had' and 'she was' for past descriptions.

× She was very engaging, engaging and encouraging and she helped me a lot to do in my homework and helped me a lot to a lot in like improving my speaking so I love her so much.

✓ She was very engaging and encouraging; she helped me a lot with my homework and greatly improved my speaking, so I loved her very much.

Remove repetition and fix collocations: 'helped me a lot to do in my homework' is incorrect; use 'helped me with my homework'. 'Helped me a lot to a lot in like improving' is redundant. Match past tense 'was' with 'helped' and 'loved'. Suggestion: Simplify, avoid repeated words, use 'helped me with' and past tense consistently.

× I were, I used to think I'm gonna be your teacher in the future, but when I was a kid.

✓ I used to think I was going to be a teacher in the future when I was a kid.

Use past forms: 'were' is incorrect for first person singular here; use 'used to' plus 'was going to' instead of 'I'm gonna'. Also remove 'your' which is wrong referent. Suggestion: Say 'I used to think I was going to be a teacher'.

× But when I grow in when I growing up, I'm, I just feel like teacher is not my dream job.

✓ But as I grew up, I felt that being a teacher was not my dream job.

Tense and form errors: 'when I grow in when I growing up' is ungrammatical; use 'as I grew up'. Match past perception: 'felt' and 'was not'. Use 'being a teacher' as noun phrase. Suggestion: Use 'as I grew up, I felt that being a teacher was not my dream job.'

× So actually I choose to be a marketer.

✓ So actually I chose to become a marketer.

Choice in the past requires past tense 'chose'. 'To be a marketer' is okay but 'become' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'I chose to become' for past decisions.

× Yeah, I do have a teacher from the past that I still remember until now, which is my favorite teacher, Mrs. Huang, because she is, umm, she helped me a lot when I, uh, having a lot of, uh, problems in my career in my educational.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from the past whom I still remember, my favorite teacher Mrs. Huang, because she helped me a lot when I had many problems in my studies.

Use 'whom' or 'that' for object relative clause; 'until now' is redundant with 'still'. 'She is' conflicts with past 'helped' — use past. 'Having' should be 'had'. 'Problems in my career in my educational' is ungrammatical; use 'problems in my studies'. Suggestion: Use 'I have a teacher from the past whom I still remember... she helped me a lot when I had many problems in my studies.'

× Umm, actually I, I am barely get in touch with the teachers in school because you know, umm, it's, it's kind of difficult to say, but I have a fear, a certain fear of them.

✓ Actually I barely get in touch with my school teachers because it's difficult to say, but I have a certain fear of them.

Incorrect verb form: 'am barely get' should be 'barely get' or 'am barely in touch with' is awkward. Use 'my school teachers' rather than 'the teachers in school'. 'A fear, a certain fear of them' is wordy; 'a certain fear of them' suffices. Suggestion: Say 'I barely get in touch with my school teachers; I have a certain fear of them.'

× So I still not in touch with my primary school teachers currently.

✓ So I am still not in touch with my primary school teachers currently.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for present tense. Place 'currently' appropriately. Suggestion: Use 'I am still not in touch with...'.

× Yeah, I remember that day, she supporting me a lot in my mental health, like encouraged me to continue my career path, umm, my education path, umm, she also helped me to doing my homework like umm, point out some mistakes so.

✓ I remember that day; she supported me a lot with my mental health, encouraged me to continue my educational path, and she also helped me do my homework by pointing out some mistakes.

Tense and verb form corrections: 'supporting' should be past 'supported'. 'Helped me to doing' is wrong; use 'helped me do'. 'Point out' should be 'pointing out'. Match past narrative. Suggestion: Use past verbs: 'she supported', 'encouraged', 'helped me do', 'pointing out'.

× I love my high. I prefer my high school teachers to primary school teachers because umm, at the primary school when I was a kid, I do not get a lot of uh memories about teachers, mostly about friends.

✓ I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because at primary school, when I was a kid, I don't have many memories about teachers; they are mostly about friends.

Fragment 'I love my high.' removed. Use 'prefer A to B'. Use 'my primary school teachers'. Tense mixing: 'do not get a lot of memories' should be 'don't have many memories'. Suggestion: Say 'I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers; at primary school I don't have many memories of teachers, mostly of friends.'

× But in high school I remember a lot about the funny memories with teacher.

✓ But in high school I remember many funny memories with my teachers.

Use plural 'teachers' and 'many' rather than 'a lot about the funny memories with teacher'. Maintain simple present for present memory 'I remember'. Suggestion: Use 'I remember many funny memories with my teachers in high school.'