Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تكون إجابتك أكثر تنظيماً ووضوحاً: ابدأ بجملة مباشرة تجيب على السؤال ثم أضف تفاصيل محددة قصيرة. تجنب الترددات (مثل "umm") والكلمات غير الواضحة، واستخدم ضمائر وأزمنة صحيحة (مثلاً "she was" وليس "she is" إذا كانت تتحدث عن الماضي). استخدم جملة أو اثنتين داعمتين فقط مع ربط منطقي مثل "because" أو "for example".

例: Yes, I did. My favorite teacher was my family studies teacher in secondary school because she was very kind and friendly. For example, she always listened to students and used fun activities to make lessons interesting.

提案: اجعل إجابتك مختصرة ومباشرة مع استخدام تراكيب صحيحة وواضحة: ابدأ بجملة موضوعية ثم اشرح السبب بجملة دعم واحدة مستخدماً روابط مثل "because" أو "so". تجنب التكرار وقلل من الكلمات المحشوة مثل "umm". استبدل كلمات غير دقيقة بأخرى مناسبة (مثلاً "patient" → "a job that requires patience").

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because it is a job that requires patience and allows me to help students learn. I enjoy guiding young people and working closely with their families to support progress.

提案: ركز على البنية الزمنية الصحيحة ووضوح الفكرة: قل إنك ما زلت تتذكر المعلمة ثم اذكر سبباً محدداً واحداً يدعم ذلك. تجنب التكرار وتصحيحات الكلام أثناء التحدث. استخدم عبارات واضحة لوصف العلاقة الحالية مثل "we still keep in touch".

例: Yes, I still remember one of my teachers because she was very kind and supportive. We still keep in touch through a WhatsApp group with my classmates.

提案: حسّن الدقة النحوية والمعنى: ابدأ بالإجابة مباشرة ثم أضف سبباً واحداً واضحاً يدعم الإجابة. تجنب الأخطاء مثل "saw touch" و"advices" واستعمل عبارات مثل "stay in touch" و"give advice" و"encourage me positively". لا تذكر أمور متضاربة أو غامضة.

例: Yes, I stay in touch with a primary school teacher who supported and encouraged me to study. She often gives me helpful advice and helps me solve problems in a positive way.

提案: كن أكثر تحديداً عند ذكر الطرق التي ساعدك بها المعلم: اذكر 1-2 أمثلة ملموسة (مثل تشجيع، أنشطة صفية، نصائح دراسية). استخدم تراكيب واضحة ومترابطة مع روابط مثل "for example" أو "for instance" وتجنب الكلمات المبهمة أو الترتيب الفوضوي.

例: She helped me in several ways. For example, she encouraged me to believe in my abilities and used fun class activities to make learning enjoyable. She also gave me practical advice on how to study effectively.

提案: أجب بجملة واضحة تقارن بين مرحلتين ثم اذكر سبباً محدداً واحداً يدعم تفضيلك. استخدم كلمات مقارنة مثل "more than" وقدم أمثلة محددة (مثل اللعب والأنشطة) بدلاً من تكرار الكلمات أو الحشو الصوتي.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers because they used games and fun activities that made learning enjoyable and helped me improve.

× I have family teacher, uh, when I was studying in secondary school, I remember when a teacher, she is a very kind and friendly.

✓ I had a family teacher when I was studying in secondary school; I remember that she was very kind and friendly.

The student misused pronouns and tense. 'I have family teacher' should be 'I had a family teacher' to match past time. 'when a teacher, she is' is redundant and mixes present and past. Use 'I remember that she was' to convey a past memory. Use a relative clause or conjunction rather than repeating 'when' and avoid unnecessary subject pronoun after 'teacher.' Suggestions: Use consistent past tense for past events and avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily.

× She was uh, very closer from umm students and she have a lot of uh, benefits, uh, type to how to attract that.

✓ She was very close to the students and she had many qualities that helped her attract them.

'Closer' is comparative; use adjective 'close.' Preposition 'from' is incorrect here; use 'to.' 'She have' is subject-verb agreement error; correct is 'she had' for past tense. 'Benefits' is awkward; 'qualities' or 'qualities that helped her attract them' is clearer. Suggestion: match verb forms to subject and use correct prepositions.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher in future because, uh, the teacher job, I think it is a, a patient job and it's learn and learn how to lead with the student, how to teach and how to be a closer with the student and umm, and their family of students.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because the teaching job, I think, requires patience and allows you to learn how to lead students, how to teach, and how to build a closer relationship with students and their families.

Errors include article use ('in future' -> 'in the future'), noun form ('the teacher job' -> 'the teaching job'), and awkward phrasing ('it's learn and learn' incorrect verb forms). 'Be a closer with the student' is ungrammatical; use 'build a closer relationship with students.' Ensure verbs agree with subjects and use infinitives or gerunds correctly. Suggestion: use clear noun forms and parallel verb structures.

× So I think it is very, umm, interesting job.

✓ So I think it is a very interesting job.

Minor word order and article usage: 'a very interesting job' is correct collocation. Keep present tense 'I think' with present description. Suggestion: place adjectives in standard order and include the article 'a.'

× Yeah, I have uh, a teacher until now I remember because she is well, she was kind and very friend friendly and make a closer and until now connect by chatting with our friends in Group WhatsApp.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher I still remember because she was kind and friendly; she kept in touch with us and still chats with our friends in our WhatsApp group.

Mix of present and past tenses and pronoun/reference issues. 'I have a teacher until now I remember' should be 'I still remember a teacher.' 'She is well, she was' mixes tenses; use past 'she was kind and friendly.' 'Make a closer' is incorrect; use 'kept in touch with us' or 'built a close relationship.' 'Connect by chatting' -> 'chats with our friends in our WhatsApp group.' Suggestion: choose past tense for memories and use standard phrases for staying in touch.

× So it's she was a kind.

✓ So she was kind.

Unnecessary 'it's' and extra article 'a' before 'kind' (an adjective) are incorrect. Use 'she was kind.' Suggestion: avoid inserting 'it' and don't use 'a' before adjectives that describe people without a noun.

× Yeah, I saw touch with my umm teacher in primary school.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher.

'Saw touch' is wrong; correct idiom is 'in touch.' Use present continuous 'am still in touch' for ongoing situation. 'My umm teacher in primary school' reorder to 'my primary school teacher.' Suggestion: use standard expressions for contact (in touch, keep in touch).

× I remember when a teacher, she was a very uh, supportive and encouraged me how to study until now and give a lot of advices and how to solve solution and encourage me by uh give advice it's to negatively.

✓ I remember that my teacher was very supportive and encouraged me in my studies; she still gives me a lot of advice on how to solve problems and encourages me rather than discouraging me.

Mix of tenses and incorrect noun/verb forms: 'encouraged me how to study until now' should be 'encouraged me in my studies' and maintain past/present appropriately. 'Advices' is uncountable 'advice.' 'Solve solution' is redundant; use 'solve problems' or 'find solutions.' 'Give advice it's to negatively' likely means 'encourages me rather than discouraging me.' Suggestion: use 'advice' (uncountable), correct verb forms, and clearer phrasing.

× My favorite teacher helped me buy severed, uh, several ways like, uh, when I need to buying courage, uh, and umm, and believe my ability and how to, uh, do that by activity We, uh, do without any boring, uh, another thing.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me in several ways, for example when I needed to find courage and believe in my ability; she taught me how to do things through activities that were never boring.

Errors in verb forms: 'helped me buy severed' is incorrect; should be 'helped me in several ways.' 'When I need to buying courage' mixes tenses and forms; use 'when I needed to find courage.' 'Believe my ability' -> 'believe in my ability.' 'Activity We, uh, do' -> 'activities that we did.' Ensure past tense consistency and correct verb forms (past participle not required here but corrected phrasing uses past tense). Suggestion: use 'believe in' and maintain consistent past tense.

× It's like, give us a lot of yeah advice in positive way.

✓ She gave us a lot of positive advice.

Word order and tense: use past tense 'gave' to match 'helped.' 'Advice' is uncountable; 'a lot of positive advice' is correct. 'In positive way' -> 'positive' as adjective before 'advice.' Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and use correct tense.

× Yeah, I like, uh, my primary school teachers more than high school teacher because, uh, primary, when I primary school, umm, it's always, uh, help us to improve and, uh, learn by, uh, by, uh, games and in the enjoyable with us, uh, it's better than yeah.

✓ Yes, I like my primary school teachers more than my high school teachers because, when I was in primary school, they always helped us improve and taught us through games, which was more enjoyable.

Errors: missing plural/article 'high school teacher' -> 'high school teachers' and missing 'my.' Tense: 'when I primary school' -> 'when I was in primary school.' 'It's always help us' should be past 'they always helped us.' 'Learn by games and in the enjoyable with us' -> 'taught us through games, which was more enjoyable.' Subject-verb agreement and tense must match. Suggestion: use correct past tense and plural forms and clearer clause structure.