Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ve doğal fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve anlatım bütünlüğü var. Cümleleri daha akıcı yapmak için zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (örneğin "she lives in America" veya "she lived"). Gereksiz tekrarları ve kelime eksiklerini giderin, örneğin “I first learned English from her” şeklinde tamamlayın. Ayrıca 3–4 cümleyi geçmemeye çalışın ve bağlaçlarla (because, since, when) destekleyin.

例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher. She lives in the United States and taught me English when I was a teenager. Because she used fun activities and encouraged me to speak, I learned to enjoy studying English.

提案: İyi fikirleri var ama tekrar eden "uh" ve eksik cümle sonları konuşmayı zayıflatıyor. Daha kısa, net cümleler kurun ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltın. Hedeflerinizi sıralarken bağlaçlarla (because, so, therefore) mantıklı bağlantılar kurun ve cümleleri tamamlayın (örneğin "earn money from them").

例: Yes, I plan to teach in the future, but not as my main job. I want to run conversation clubs on social media because I enjoy speaking practice, and I hope to earn some money from those classes.

提案: Cümle yapısı karışık ve tekrarlar mevcut. Geçmiş zaman kullanımı ve basit bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın (e.g. "Yes, I still remember a teacher from primary school"). Gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve belirli bir ayrıntı ekleyin (ne öğrettiği, neden unutulmaz olduğu gibi).

例: Yes, I still remember a teacher from primary school. She was my first English teacher and made lessons fun, so I always admired her.

提案: Olumsuz ifadeyi basit ve düzgün kurun ("No, I'm not in touch with them"). Sosyal medya bağlantısını belirtirken zaman ve fiil uyumuna dikkat edin ("we follow each other on Instagram" ve "I sometimes see her stories"). Dolgu sözcüklerini azaltın.

例: No, I'm not really in touch with my primary teacher. We follow each other on Instagram and I sometimes watch her stories, but we don't communicate directly.

提案: Cevap net fakat kelime sıralaması hatalı ("helped me in learning English" şeklinde düzeltilmeli). Daha spesifik örnekler verin: nasıl yardımcı oldu (teknikler, aktiviteler, destek). Bağlaçlarla neden-sonuç ilişkisini belirtin.

例: She helped me learn English by encouraging me to speak and by using games and songs in class. Because of her, I understood how important English is for communication.

提案: Cümleler karışık ve çelişkili görünüyor. Net bir görüş belirtin, ardından kısaca nedenini açıklayın. Örneğin "Both are special, but I prefer my primary teachers because..." gibi bir yapı kullanın. Gereksiz tekrarları ve belirsiz ifadeleri çıkarın.

例: Both groups of teachers are special to me, but I prefer my primary school teacher because she inspired me when I was young. In high school I liked only a few teachers who helped me in specific subjects.

× She's now living in a country named America and I love her so much.

✓ She now lives in a country called America, and I love her very much.

The student used a continuous form 'is now living' which is acceptable for temporary actions but 'now lives' is more natural for a permanent residence; also 'named America' is unnatural—use 'called America'. Use 'very much' for emphasis.

× Since my teenagerhood we were studying together English and I first learned English from.

✓ Since my teenage years we studied English together, and I first learned English from her.

'Teenagerhood' is not a natural noun; use 'teenage years'. 'Since' with past simple is incorrect here—if action started in past and continued, use 'when I was a teenager we studied' or simply 'we studied'. The sentence ended incomplete; add 'her' as the object.

× Well, actually I plan to be teacher in the future, uh, but not as a main job.

✓ Well, actually I plan to be a teacher in the future, but not as my main job.

A countable singular noun 'teacher' requires an article 'a'. Also 'main job' needs a determiner like 'my' to be natural.

× I plan to do it, uh, as a second job because, uh, I want to teach English.

✓ I plan to do it as a second job because I want to teach English.

Remove fillers. The structure is acceptable; no -ing needed here. Keep infinitive 'to teach'.

× I want to open like conversation clubs in social media and uh, through social media, I want to earn money at.

✓ I want to start conversation clubs on social media and earn money through social media.

Use 'start' rather than 'open like'; preposition for platforms is 'on social media'. 'Earn money at' is incorrect; use 'earn money through' or 'on'.

× Yes, I have a teacher that I still remember was from my primary period.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my primary school whom I still remember.

Original combines relative clauses incorrectly. Use 'a teacher from my primary school' and 'whom I still remember' (or 'who I still remember').

× I really love her and uh, I first learned from her and my first teacher be, uh, this teacher at school.

✓ I really love her; I first learned from her. My first teacher at school was her.

'Be' is incorrect; use past 'was'. Split into clearer sentences. Use proper past tense for completed events.

× Actually, no, I didn't, uh, still get in touch with my primary teacher.

✓ Actually, no, I don't still keep in touch with my primary teacher.

'Didn't still get in touch' mixes past negation with 'still'. For current state use present: 'I don't still keep in touch' or better 'I'm not still in touch' but 'I don't keep in touch' is natural.

× Just, uh, we are following each other on, uh, Instagram and just sometimes I saw, uh, her stories.

✓ We follow each other on Instagram, and sometimes I see her stories.

Use simple present for habitual actions: 'follow' and 'see', not present continuous for a general habit or past 'saw'.

× In, uh, learning a language, my favorite teacher helped at me.

✓ In learning a language, my favorite teacher helped me.

Do not use preposition 'at' after 'helped'; correct object is 'helped me'.

× Uh, as I mentioned before, now she's living abroad, far away from us, but still, I love her and I really learned, uh, the importance of the English language.

✓ As I mentioned before, she now lives abroad, far away from us, but I still love her, and I really learned the importance of the English language from her.

Use 'lives' instead of continuous for permanent situation. Place 'still' before verb 'love' for natural word order. Add 'from her' to indicate source of learning.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question sentence is correct; no change needed.

× Actually both of them are special for me, but my primary teacher, I remember her a lot.

✓ Actually, both of them are special to me, but I remember my primary teacher a lot.

Use 'special to me' not 'special for me'. Place object 'my primary teacher' before pronoun 'her' or drop pronoun to avoid redundancy.

× Also for my high school I didn't like a lot of teachers, but some of them 'cause I'm good with them, but I can remember from other courses maybe.

✓ Also, in high school I didn't like many teachers, but I liked some of them because I got along with them; I can remember teachers from other subjects too.

Original is fragmented and uses colloquial 'cause'. Use 'many' not 'a lot of' with countable 'teachers'. Clarify 'got along with' for 'I'm good with them'. Reorder for coherence.