Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Порадьте зосередитися на ясному часі та граматиці, уникати повторів і зайвих слів. Почніть з короткого тематичного речення, потім додайте 1–2 конкретні деталі (наприклад, методи вчительки) і закінчіть висновком. Також виправте часи (наприклад, use past simple: "I hated physics") і видаліть тавтологію («for For Now»).

例: My favourite teacher was my primary school physics teacher. She used simple experiments and clear examples to explain difficult concepts, which made me start enjoying physics. Because of her patient approach, I remember several lessons very well.

提案: Поліпшіть структуру відповіді: дайте чітку тему («No, I don't think so» або «Maybe») і наведіть 2 конкретні причини. Уникайте розмитих фраз і граматичних помилок (наприклад, "I haven't graduated yet"). Застосовуйте зв'язки: firstly, secondly, finally. Будьте лаконічні (макс. 5 речень).

例: I don't think I will become a teacher. Firstly, I haven't graduated yet and I prefer a more flexible and less stressful career. Secondly, I'm interested in trying business or modern industries. For these reasons, teaching is not my current plan.

提案: Потрібно говорити чітко і уникати звуків-паразитів (uh, umm) та незавершених думок. Використовуйте коректну граматику ("explain to me", "a really kind woman", "cherished") і надайте конкретний приклад того, що вчителька робила. Дотримуйтеся простої структури: теза + приклад + висновок.

例: Yes, I remember my primary school English teacher fondly. She always explained things to me step by step and used games to help us practise vocabulary, which made learning enjoyable. I still appreciate her patience and support.

提案: Виправте помилки лексики та порядку слів ("follow them on social media", "say hello"), уникайте звуків-паразитів, і формулюйте повні логічні фрази. Використовуйте зв'язки для пояснення частоти зустрічей (e.g., "occasionally").

例: No, I'm not in regular contact with them. However, because my house is near my primary school, I occasionally see some teachers and say hello or ask how they're doing. I also follow a few of them on social media, but we don't keep in regular conversation.

提案: Будьте більш конкретними: назвіть приклад теми або методу, який вчитель використав, і сформулюйте речення граматично правильно (past tense: "helped me understand", "recommended an additional tutor"). Уникайте повторів та звуків-паразитів, використовуйте зв'язки (for example, as a result).

例: At first, she helped me understand topics I couldn't grasp, such as basic mechanics, by using clear diagrams and simple experiments. She also recommended that I work with an additional tutor and constantly encouraged me, saying I could pass my exams, which boosted my confidence.

× Yes, I had a favorite teacher.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher.

The speaker is talking about a past relationship that continues to the present; use present perfect 'have' to express current possession/relationship. Use: 'I have a favorite teacher' or 'I had a favorite teacher when I was in primary school' if only past.

× It was my physics teacher in primary school.

✓ She was my physics teacher in primary school.

Pronoun 'It' is incorrect for a person. Use 'she' for a female teacher. Also matches the prior clause referring to a person.

× She was a really kind person, and I was that kind of person who hate physics, but she made me understand it and love it.

✓ She was a really kind person, and I was the kind of person who hated physics, but she made me understand it and love it.

Use definite article 'the' with 'kind of person' and past tense 'hated' to match 'was'. Subject-verb agreement: 'who hated physics'.

× And I still remember some of the lessons that she taught me for For Now.

✓ And I still remember some of the lessons that she taught me.

Phrase 'for For Now' is incorrect and redundant. Remove it to make a clear sentence. If the speaker meant 'even now', use 'even now' instead.

× It really depends because I have haven't graduated yet and I would like to have a more flexible and not as stressful as teaching job and I'm also a young woman so I would like to try some business or some modern stuff and I also think that teaching is tired.

✓ It really depends because I haven't graduated yet, and I would like to have a more flexible and less stressful job than teaching. I'm also a young woman, so I would like to try some business or modern work, and I also think teaching is tiring.

Remove extra 'have' in 'have haven't'; use 'haven't graduated yet'. Use comparative structure 'less stressful than teaching'. Use adjective 'tiring' to describe teaching. Punctuation and clause separation improve clarity.

× Yes, I still remember my English teacher from primary school, uh, she was really kind woman who tried to explain me everything that I, uh, didn't get.

✓ Yes, I still remember my English teacher from primary school. She was a really kind woman who tried to explain everything to me that I didn't understand.

Add article 'a' before 'really kind woman'. Use correct verb pattern 'explain something to someone' (explain everything to me). Use past tense 'didn't understand' for clarity.

× And I remember her as a really, umm, cherish and uh.

✓ And I remember her fondly and with great affection.

'Cherish' is a verb, not an adjective. Use adverb/adjective expressions: 'remember her fondly' or 'with great affection' to convey sentiment.

× No, I am not. But uh, my house is near the, my primary school, so I occasionally see some of my teachers and I could just umm, cheer them and ask how everything's going.

✓ No, I'm not. But my house is near my primary school, so I occasionally see some of my teachers and I can just greet them and ask how everything's going.

Remove extra article 'the' before 'my primary school'. Use 'greet' instead of 'cheer' for meeting someone; use 'can' for ability in present.

× And I also sold them in social media. But we are not in a like talk.

✓ And I also follow them on social media, but we don't really talk.

'Sold them in social media' is incorrect; likely meant 'follow them on social media'. 'We are not in a like talk' is awkward; use 'we don't really talk'.

× Uh, at first, my uh, favorite teacher helped me to understand the topic that I cannot get and it's really helpful for me.

✓ At first, my favorite teacher helped me understand a topic that I couldn't grasp, and it was really helpful for me.

Use past tense 'couldn't grasp' to match 'helped'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helped' (help someone do something). Consistent past narrative.

× She also, umm, recommend me to find a additional tutor and she always uh, support me like I can do it, I will pass my exam.

✓ She also recommended that I find an additional tutor, and she always supported me, saying 'You can do it; you will pass your exam.'

Use past tense 'recommended' and 'supported' to match past context. Use 'recommended that I find' or 'recommended finding'. 'Additional' needs 'an'. Reported speech requires appropriate punctuation or 'saying' to introduce quotes.