Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意句子结构和时态，先给出直接回答，然后用一两句简短、具体的细节支持。避免重复（如“so smart and intelligent”意思重复），并使用连接词使表达更自然。可以把“family teacher”改为更准确的说法（例如“favourite teacher”或“family’s teacher”视情况而定）。

例: Yes. My favourite teacher at college taught mathematics. He explained difficult concepts clearly and gave lots of practical examples, which helped me understand and enjoy the subject.

提案: 先明确回答“是”或“否”，然后用一两句说明理由。注意时态和句子连贯，避免混淆职业身份（例如‘chapter’应为‘lecturer’或‘teacher’）。用连接词如“because”或“so”组织理由。

例: Yes. I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy sharing knowledge and currently I work as a doctor who also lectures medical students, so teaching feels very rewarding.

提案: 回答要更有条理：先回答有或没有，然后列举一两位具体老师并说明为什么记得他们。注意人名前的冠词（不需要“the”）与时态（use past tense），避免不明词语（如“genuine state”、“Oncology State”）。

例: Yes. I still remember several teachers from my childhood, such as Mr Jones, who made lessons fun, and Mrs Chen, who always encouraged me to read more and build my confidence.

提案: 先直接回答，然后简要说明原因或例外。用简单明确的句子表达是否保持联系，注意词汇（例如用 ‘lost contact’、‘stay in touch’）。如果有例外，清楚说明是谁并用正确时态。

例: No, I have lost contact with most of my primary school teachers, mainly because we moved and changed schools. However, I still keep in touch with one former teacher through social media.

提案: 先总结老师如何帮助你（主题句），然后给出具体例子。注意语法（例如‘when I faced difficulties in learning’），使用连接词（When, so, because）使句子连贯，避免模糊表达如“confess”。

例: My favourite teacher helped me by explaining difficult topics clearly and giving extra practice. When I struggled with new material and got low marks, she encouraged me and offered one-to-one support until I improved.

× Yes, my family teacher was in my college state.

✓ Yes, my family teacher was at my college.

句子中使用的介词不当且短语不自然。将“in my college state”改为“at my college”。此外，“family teacher”可能不自然但不在指定列表中改动。建议：使用正确介词并用更自然的短语，如“my college”或“my hometown”。

× He was teaching my mathematics and so smart and intelligent.

✓ He taught me mathematics and was very smart and intelligent.

原句混用了过去进行时和形容词短语，且缺少宾语“me”。根据语境描述的是过去常态，应使用一般过去时“taught”。另外“so smart and intelligent”用法不够地道，改为“very smart and intelligent”。建议：确定时态并补充必要宾语，使句子结构完整。

× Yes, I'm had to be a teacher now because even I'm a chapter, I'm a doctor, but I'm teaching the medical student.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher now because even though I'm a doctor, I teach medical students.

原句存在时态和词汇错误。“I'm had to be”混淆现在时和过去分词，应使用表示愿望或意图的“want to be”或“would like to be”。“even I'm a chapter”不通，推测为“even though”或“although”。“I'm teaching the medical student”应为一般现在时“I teach medical students”或现在进行时取决于情况。建议：使用正确的表达“want to be / although / I teach”并注意复数形式。

× Yes, I like a lot of teacher when I'm children, the Mr. Jones and I'm genuine state and remember the Mrs. Chen and Oncology State I remember the Mr. Wong.

✓ Yes, I liked a lot of teachers when I was a child, for example Mr. Jones, Mrs. Chen and Mr. Wong.

存在单复数错误（teacher → teachers）、时态和代词错误（I'm children → I was a child）、句子结构混乱以及不必要或错误的短语（genuine state、Oncology State）。建议使用过去时“liked”并改正名词和代词为单数/复数匹配，列举老师时用逗号分隔并使用正确称呼。

× No, we have lost the chat and message. We don't have any communication. But in my January students, I'm always continue contact with him.

✓ No, we have lost contact and messages. We don't have any communication. But among my university classmates, I always keep in contact with him.

“lost the chat and message”不自然，应为“lost contact and messages”。“in my January students”无法理解，推测为“among my university classmates”或“among my classmates”。“I'm always continue contact”时态和语法错误，应为“I always keep in contact with him”。建议使用固定搭配“lose contact / keep in contact”并改正介词短语。

× When I face the difficult on my learning or studying in the new knowledge and I'm not have a good score when I feel confess the teachers always encourage me to.

✓ When I face difficulties in learning or studying new material and do not get a good score, I always confess to the teachers and they encourage me.

句中多处动词形式和结构错误。“face the difficult”应为“face difficulties”或“face a difficulty”，“studying in the new knowledge”应为“studying new material”。“I'm not have a good score”混用助动词，应为“do not get a good score”。“I feel confess the teachers”应为“I confess to the teachers”。最后“encourage me to”不完整，应直接用“they encourage me”。建议：注意名词单复数、正确使用助动词和介词短语（confess to），并保持句子结尾完整。