Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and well structured with a topic sentence and supporting reasons. To improve, vary your vocabulary (e.g., use 'orderly' or 'well-organized'), add a brief personal example to make it more specific, and avoid minor repetition between 'concentrate better' and 'more productive'. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I prefer to keep things tidy because it helps me concentrate and makes me more efficient. For example, when I'm studying I keep all my notes in labeled folders so I can find them quickly, which saves time and reduces stress. Overall, an orderly space helps me stay focused and disciplined.

提案: Good honesty and reflection, but the answer is a bit long-winded and speculative. Be more concise: state your childhood habit clearly, then give one specific supporting detail or example. Avoid tentative phrasing like 'I can only imagine'—either give a memory or say you don't remember and explain why.

例: I don't clearly remember, because I usually shared a room with my sister, but I think I was fairly tidy even then. For instance, we each had a shelf for our things and I always kept my toys in boxes, which suggests I liked order as a child.

提案: Very good: direct topic sentence, clear organization strategy and a concrete example. To reach an even higher score, use linking words for flow ('for example' already used—add 'also' or 'therefore'), and add one short result of this method (e.g., it reduces distractions). Keep it concise (3 sentences).

例: I keep my workspace tidy by assigning a place for everything: the table holds my computer and current work, while shelves store books and notebooks. I also tuck away extra pens and notepads in a drawer, so the desk doesn't get cluttered. As a result, I can start work quickly and stay focused.

提案: Thoughtful answer and good example distinguishing appearances from personal systems. To improve, make the opening more direct (e.g., 'I think being tidy is useful but subjective'), use a linking word ('however' or 'for example'), and add one specific benefit of tidiness (e.g., less time wasted searching). Keep it within 3 sentences.

例: I think being tidy is useful but it's subjective—what matters is that your system works. For example, someone might appear messy but still find things quickly, so their method is effective. However, generally having some order reduces wasted time and stress.

× In my view, being tidy reflects better habits and self-discipline.

✓ In my view, being tidy reflects good habits and self-discipline.

The original sentence is mostly correct grammatically but the adjective 'better' is comparative without a clear comparison; 'good habits' is more natural here. This corrects word choice (adjective use) while keeping present simple tense. Suggestion: use 'good habits' when not comparing explicitly.

× To be honest, I'm not quite sure since I have always shared a space with my sister or with my mother, but seeing how organized I am now as an adult, I can only imagine that I'm also organized back then when I was a child.

✓ To be honest, I'm not quite sure since I always shared a space with my sister or my mother, but seeing how organized I am now as an adult, I can only imagine that I was also organized back then when I was a child.

This sentence mixes present perfect ('have always shared') and then uses present tense ('I'm also organized') to refer to the past. Change 'have always shared' to 'always shared' (simple past) or keep present perfect consistently; here simple past 'shared' and 'was' match the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Also simplify 'or with my mother' to 'or my mother'. Suggestion: keep past time references in past tense: use 'was' for states in the past.

× I keep my workspace tidy by allocating a space for all of my things.

✓ I keep my workspace tidy by allocating a space for all my things.

The phrase 'all of my things' is grammatical but wordy; 'all my things' is more natural and concise in spoken English. This is an article/word-choice/style adjustment. Suggestion: omit 'of' in common phrases like 'all my' for smoother speech.

× For instance, the table is for my main setup, while my shelves are for the books and notebooks.

✓ For instance, the table is for my main setup, while my shelves are for books and notebooks.

Using 'the books and notebooks' implies specific books previously mentioned; in general statements it's more natural to use the plural without 'the'. This is a minor article usage issue. Suggestion: drop 'the' when speaking generally about categories of items.

× I no longer use the ballpoint pens and the notepads are tucked away in a drawer so my table is not scattered.

✓ I no longer use ballpoint pens, and the notepads are tucked away in a drawer, so my table is not cluttered.

Change 'the ballpoint pens' to 'ballpoint pens' for general reference; add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Also 'not scattered' is grammatically okay but 'not cluttered' is a more natural collocation. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('cluttered') and remove unnecessary definite articles for general references.

× From my view, it is important to define what being tidy means for each person.

✓ From my point of view, it is important to define what being tidy means for each person.

'From my view' is nonstandard; the idiomatic phrase is 'from my point of view' or 'in my view'. This is a fixed-expression/word choice issue. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions such as 'in my view' or 'from my point of view'.

× For instance, someone can look untidy in front of other people but still know where everything is.

✓ For instance, someone can look untidy to other people but still know where everything is.

The phrase 'in front of other people' suggests physical positioning; 'to other people' correctly expresses perception. This is a preposition/pronoun usage issue. Suggestion: use 'to other people' when talking about how others perceive someone.

× As long as their system works for them, then everything is good.

✓ As long as their system works for them, everything is fine.

The original is understandable but uses redundant 'then' and informal 'is good'. Removing 'then' improves flow and 'everything is fine' is more natural. This is a minor sentence structure and word choice improvement. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary connectors and use more natural adjectives like 'fine' or 'okay'.