Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn; tránh câu quá ngắn và sửa lỗi động từ/cách dùng: nên nói “I like to keep my bedroom clean.” hoặc “I like a tidy bedroom.” Thêm một câu hỗ trợ ngắn giải thích lý do (lợi ích) để câu đầy đủ và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I do. I like to keep my bedroom clean because it helps me relax and sleep better.

提案: Sửa cấu trúc thời gian và ngữ pháp (used to + bare verb), sửa lỗi từ vựng và diễn đạt rõ lý do; tránh từ không phù hợp như “away”. Nên nêu chủ ngữ rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn về thói quen từ nhỏ.

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents encouraged me to put my toys away every evening.

提案: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc (nhiều từ không đúng/mơ hồ: “bottling pack”, “small story”, “deck”). Nên dùng các cụm từ đơn giản và cụ thể như “put items back”, “use storage boxes/shelves”. Trình bày 1-2 hành động cụ thể, có linking word nếu cần.

例: I keep my workspace tidy by putting items back in storage boxes after I use them and keeping only essential books on a small shelf.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp cho đúng (it's necessary; a clean room helps me find things quickly). Nên mở rộng bằng một lý do rõ ràng, dùng linking word như “because” hoặc “so” để làm rõ kết quả của việc gọn gàng.

例: Yes, I think it's necessary to be tidy because a clean room helps me find things quickly, so I can concentrate better on my work.

× Yeah, I do because I like clean my bedroom.

✓ Yeah, I do because I like cleaning my bedroom.

Use the gerund (verb + -ing) after verbs like 'like' when referring to activities. 'Like cleaning' means you enjoy the activity; 'like clean' is incorrect word form. Suggestion: After 'like', use 'cleaning' to describe the action (I like cleaning my bedroom).

× Well yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my friend away ask me to clean it.

✓ Well yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents always asked me to clean it.

Multiple errors: 'used to' correctly indicates past habit, but 'friend away ask' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'parents' and past tense 'asked'. Use 'always asked' for repeated past requests. Suggestion: Ensure subject is correct and verb is in past tense for past habits (asked).

× Well, I keep my workspace tidy by bottling pack after I use them and having a small story for on my deck.

✓ Well, I keep my workspace tidy by putting things back after I use them and having a small shelf on my desk.

Errors in word choice and forms: 'bottling pack' is incorrect; use 'putting things back' (verb + -ing after 'by'). 'Having a small shelf on my desk' corrects 'story' and 'deck'. Suggestion: Use gerund phrases after 'by' to describe methods (putting, having).

× Well, I think it's it necessary to be tidy because a clean room help me find dinged quickly and concentrate better.

✓ Well, I think it is necessary to be tidy because a clean room helps me find things quickly and helps me concentrate better.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'it's it necessary' has extra 'it'; 'a clean room help' should be 'helps' (third person singular). 'Dinged' is incorrect; intended 'things'. Also parallelism: use 'helps me find... and helps me concentrate' or 'helps me find... and concentrate'. Suggestion: Remove extra words, use third person singular 'helps', and correct vocabulary to 'things'.