Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good clear response with a direct topic sentence and a specific example. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a linking phrase to connect the reason and example more smoothly. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'clear' or 'organised' instead of repeating 'tidy').

例: Yes, I do. Keeping my space organised helps me feel calm and focused; for example, I always clear my desk before I start studying so I can concentrate on the tasks at hand.

提案: The response answers directly and gives contrast between past and present, which is good. Improve by using a cohesive linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'now') and make the final statement more specific to your experience rather than generalizing. Avoid repeating 'tidy' too often.

例: No, I didn't; my room used to be very messy because I found cleaning boring. However, now I tidy it regularly because I realise that an organised room makes me feel healthier and less stressed.

提案: You answer the question and give frequency, which is good, but the explanation is slightly repetitive and a bit negative. Improve by explaining one concrete habit to maintain tidiness and use a linking word (e.g., 'however' or 'so') to clarify cause and effect. Try to avoid contractions and improve grammar: 'every two or three days.'

例: I usually clean my desk every two or three days. If I can't put items away immediately, I set aside ten minutes at the end of each study session to sort papers and return things to their places, so clutter doesn't build up.

提案: Good direct answer with reasons, but watch grammar ('it also reduces') and avoid vague phrases like 'get disease.' Provide a clearer, slightly more specific example of the physical benefit and use a linking word such as 'moreover' to connect points.

例: Yes, I do. Being tidy benefits mental health because a neat environment reduces stress; moreover, it lowers hygiene risks—for example, regularly cleaning surfaces helps prevent the spread of germs.

× 'For example, I like making my table surface tidy before I'm going to do some work so I can focus on the problems I need to solve instead of other things.'

✓ 'For example, I like to make my table surface tidy before I do some work so I can focus on the problems I need to solve instead of other things.'

'like' can be followed by either a gerund or an infinitive but when describing habitual or typical actions 'like to + verb' or 'like + gerund' are both possible; however the phrase 'before I'm going to do some work' is unidiomatic. Use simple present 'before I do some work' to refer to a habitual action. Suggestion: use 'I like to make' or 'I like making' and change the subordinate clause to 'before I do some work.'

× 'When I was a child my room was always in a mess because I thought it was boring to clean my room.'

✓ 'When I was a child my room was always a mess because I thought it was boring to clean.'

The idiomatic expression is 'a mess' not 'in a mess.' Also repeating 'my room' is redundant; shorten to 'clean.' Use 'a mess' to describe state. Suggestion: remove 'in' and the repeated noun for clarity.

× 'But now I know the importance of keeping rooms tidy.'

✓ 'But now I know the importance of keeping my room tidy.'

'keeping rooms tidy' is general and acceptable, but in context the speaker is contrasting their own past behavior about their room; use 'my room' or 'rooms' consistently. To be clearer and maintain coherence, use 'my room tidy.'

× 'I clean and tidy my desk quite often, like every two days or three days.'

✓ 'I clean and tidy my desk quite often, like every two or three days.'

Use the phrase 'every two or three days' instead of 'every two days or three days.' The corrected form is the idiomatic expression for an approximate repeating interval.

× 'I know it is better to put things back where they belong, but I usually don't do that, so I just clean my desk more often.'

✓ 'I know it is better to put things back where they belong, but I usually don't, so I just clean my desk more often.'

The phrase 'don't do that' is grammatically acceptable, but shortening to 'don't' avoids repetition and sounds more natural. Present tense 'usually don't' is correct for habitual actions.

× 'Yes I do because it's beneficial for both mental and physical health.'

✓ 'Yes, I do because it's beneficial for both mental and physical health.'

Missing comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation; not strictly an article error but punctuation improves clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct. Suggestion: add comma after 'Yes.'

× 'Keeping things tidy helps people feel relaxed and less stressed.'

✓ 'Keeping things tidy helps people feel relaxed and less stressed.'

Sentence is correct; no change needed. Keep as is. (Included to indicate no grammatical error of this type.)

× 'It also reduce the possibility to get disease so it is necessary.'

✓ 'It also reduces the possibility of getting diseases, so it is necessary.'

Subject-verb agreement requires 'reduces' (third person singular). Use 'possibility of getting disease' → 'possibility of getting diseases' or 'getting a disease' and add a comma before 'so.' Suggestion: 'reduces the possibility of getting diseases' or 'reduces the risk of getting a disease.'