Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and varied vocabulary. Avoid repetition (e.g., "study" and "reading" mentioned twice) and correct tense/word choice (use present tense consistently: "helps me concentrate"). Use a linking word to connect reason.

例: Yes, I prefer to keep things tidy because an organized space helps me concentrate. For example, when my desk is uncluttered I can find my textbooks and notes quickly, which makes studying more efficient and less stressful.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use past tense consistently and rephrase awkward parts. Give one clear reason and a brief specific example of your mother's rules. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so").

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my mother insisted on it. For instance, she made me put toys away every evening so I could do my homework in a clean, comfortable space.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear sequence and correct word forms. Use linking words (first, then, finally) and specific vocabulary (stationery, unrelated items). Limit to 2–4 sentences and avoid redundancy. Mention one or two concrete habits.

例: First, I put unrelated items away and clear my desk. Then I place only essential stationery and a notebook with my to-do list and today's schedule, so I can focus on the tasks I need to complete.

提案: Clarify your position and make it more balanced. Start with a direct answer, then provide one or two specific reasons and a short example. Use correct grammar and linking words (however, for example). Avoid vague phrases and repetitive ideas.

例: I don't think being tidy is always necessary because some people work well in controlled mess. For example, my friend keeps papers scattered but can find what she needs quickly; however, for most people, a tidy space helps reduce stress and improve productivity.

× Yes, I would like to keep things tidy because usually I would like to see the environment as organized and then I would feel so relaxed and focused when I was studying.

✓ Yes, I would like to keep things tidy because usually I like to see the environment organized, and then I feel relaxed and focused when I study.

The original uses inconsistent tenses and unnecessary conditionals 'would' where simple present is appropriate for habits and preferences. Use present simple 'like', 'see', 'feel', 'study' to describe general habits. Also use 'organized' (past participle used adjectivally) without 'as'.

× Or maybe I'm reading and then the tidy environment could let me have more effort to study.

✓ Or maybe when I am reading, a tidy environment helps me concentrate and study more effectively.

'Could let me have more effort' is unnatural; use 'helps me concentrate' or 'helps me study more effectively'. Present continuous 'I'm reading' is fine but clearer to say 'when I am reading'. Use 'helps' (present simple) for general effect.

× Yes, when I was a child I always keep my room tidy, but not because of my own opinions be but because of my mum's requirements.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always kept my room tidy, not because it was my choice but because of my mum's rules.

Describe past habitual actions with past simple 'kept' not present 'keep'. 'My own opinions be' is ungrammatical; replace with 'it was my choice'. 'Requirements' can be simplified to 'rules'.

× She always told me to tidy up my room more clean than I can do my homework, more comfortable in a comfortable environment.

✓ She always told me to tidy up my room so it would be cleaner and more comfortable for me to do my homework.

Original has incorrect conjunctions and comparison structure 'more clean than I can do my homework' which is wrong. Use purpose/result structure 'so it would be cleaner and more comfortable for me to do my homework'.

× Umm so yes.

✓ Yes, so I did keep it tidy when I was a child.

Short answer 'Umm so yes' is informal and incomplete. Provide a full sentence to clarify: 'Yes, so I did keep it tidy when I was a child.' This improves clarity and sentence completeness.

× 1st when I was going to study I would put all the unrelevant things away and then just only some of my stationeries on my desk and then one notebook which is for my To Do List and the schedules of today and then just the things I need to study.

✓ First, when I was going to study I put all irrelevant things away, leaving only some stationery on my desk, one notebook for my to-do list and today's schedule, and the materials I needed to study.

Use past simple 'put' for a habitual past action. 'Unrelevant' is incorrect; use 'irrelevant'. 'Stationeries' should be 'stationery' or 'stationery items'. Simplify and reorder the list for clarity and natural English.

× Now, I don't think it is necessary to be tidy.

✓ Now, I don't think it is necessary to be tidy.

This sentence is actually grammatical. It uses present tense appropriately to express current opinion. No change needed.

× As you know that's many people are really messy but they know what they need in those messy spaces.

✓ As you know, many people are really messy, but they know where everything is in those messy spaces.

'That's many people are' is ungrammatical; remove 'that's'. Also 'they know what they need' is less natural than 'they know where everything is'. This clarifies meaning and fixes structure.

× So which is their comfort zone.

✓ So that is their comfort zone.

'Which is their comfort zone' is a fragment. Use 'So that is their comfort zone' to link the idea properly. This fixes sentence structure by providing a complete clause.

× If you tidy up, maybe they cannot find the things they want and also you may just mess up in just few days.

✓ If you tidy up, maybe they cannot find what they want, and you may just make a mess again in a few days.

'They cannot find the things they want' is acceptable but 'what they want' is more natural. 'You may just mess up in just few days' is incorrect: 'mess up' needs an object or use 'make a mess again'. 'Just few days' needs an article: 'a few days'.