Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng và tự nhiên nhưng cần sửa một vài lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng và tránh lặp từ. Nên dùng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, thay đổi từ vựng (tidy, neat, organized), và sửa lỗi chính tả (‘tightest’ → ‘neatest’). Giữ độ dài tối đa 3-4 câu, thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về thói quen (ví dụ: dọn giường, gấp quần áo) và sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy keeping my home organized, and I clean every morning. For instance, I always make my bed and put clothes in the wardrobe, which helps me start the day calmly.

提案: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt, nhưng có vài lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: ‘tasked me to’ → ‘ask me to’, ‘become’ → ‘became’). Nên dùng linking word ngắn để nối hai câu và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về việc bạn làm khi còn nhỏ để minh họa (ví dụ: sắp xếp đồ chơi, giúp quét nhà). Giữ tối đa 3 câu để tránh lan man.

例: Yes. My mother asked me to keep my things tidy from a young age, so I learned to put toys back in boxes and make my bed. Because of that, tidying up became a regular habit.

提案: Câu trả lời hiện tại không tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng sai và cấu trúc lộn xộn (‘pay’ không đúng, ‘one of them are’ → ‘one of them is’). Cần bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words (for example, also) và nêu 2-3 phương pháp cụ thể, ngắn gọn (e.g. using shelves, folders, wiping desk daily). Sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh cụm từ thừa.

例: I keep my study area organized by putting books on a shelf and using folders for loose papers. I also clean my desk every evening and only keep necessary items on it, which helps me concentrate.

提案: Ý chính tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ nghĩa và từ vựng (dùng ‘tardiness’ sai chỗ, nên là ‘tidiness’; cấu trúc ‘can help you form comfortable’ không đúng). Nên mở đầu với ý kiến ngắn, giải thích lý do cụ thể với linking words (because, for example) và dùng từ chính xác. Thêm ví dụ ngắn về lợi ích (tiết kiệm thời gian, giảm stress).

例: Yes. I think being tidy is important because it saves time and reduces stress. For example, when my desk is organized I can find documents quickly and focus better on my work.

× I will always put things back where they belong after using them.

✓ I always put things back where they belong after using them.

The original uses 'will always' which is unnecessary for habitual actions. Use simple present for routines (third person singular not relevant here but tense correction fits list 2). Use 'always' with simple present to express habit.

× My bedroom is probably the tightest room in the house.

✓ My bedroom is probably the tidiest room in the house.

The adjective 'tightest' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'tidy' so use the superlative 'tidiest'. 'Tight' relates to size or fitting, not cleanliness.

× My mom tasked me to keep everything neat from a very young age.

✓ My mom tasked me with keeping everything neat from a very young age.

The verb 'task' is followed by the preposition 'with' plus a gerund ('keeping'). 'Tasked me to' is nonstandard; use 'tasked me with' or 'asked me to'.

× She was quite strict about it, so cleaning up after myself gradually become my habit.

✓ She was quite strict about it, so cleaning up after myself gradually became my habit.

The clause describes a past change, so use past tense 'became' not present 'become'. Ensure tense consistency in past narrative.

× Well to be honest I usually keep my work and studies pay by many ways.

✓ Well, to be honest, I usually keep my work and study spaces tidy in many ways.

Original is ungrammatical: 'keep my work and studies pay' makes no sense. Correct structure: 'keep my work and study spaces tidy' and 'in many ways' expresses methods.

× One of them are putting all books and textbooks in the corner of the table and I usually wipe the tables cleaning.

✓ One of them is putting all books and textbooks in the corner of the table, and I usually wipe the table clean.

Subject 'One' requires singular verb 'is'. Use 'table' singular for context and phrase 'wipe the table clean' is natural. Remove redundant 'cleaning'.

× Yes, of course, tidiness is one of the most important thing you should do every day, because tardiness can help you form comfortable and improves your mood.

✓ Yes, of course, tidiness is one of the most important things you should practice every day, because tidiness can help you feel comfortable and improve your mood.

Multiple issues: 'thing' should be plural 'things' after 'one of the most'; 'do every day' is unnatural for a habit—'practice' is better; 'tardiness' means being late and is wrong here—use 'tidiness'; verb agreement: 'improves' should be 'improve' to match plural subject 'tidiness' (or use 'helps to improve'). Also 'form comfortable' is incorrect—use 'feel comfortable'.

× For example, when you want to find something, if your desk is tidy, you can find things more quickly.

✓ For example, when you want to find something, if your desk is tidy you can find things more quickly.

This sentence is mostly correct; only punctuation adjustment removing the extra comma after 'tidy' improves flow. No major grammatical error; included for completeness under preposition/type list compatibility.