Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve accuracy and clarity: correct word choice and grammar, give one clear reason and a brief supporting detail. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and avoid unclear phrases like “spay” or “stay for kids.”

例: Yes, I do. A clean and organized space helps me stay focused and reduces unnecessary risks, such as tripping over clutter or losing important items.

提案: Polish tense use and add a brief linking phrase: use clear past habits language and provide one specific example. Keep it concise and natural.

例: Not really — I was quite messy as a child, so my parents always reminded me to put my toys and books away, especially before bedtime.

提案: Fix word choice and grammar, state a clear routine and include one specific detail about how you organize items. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., 'first', 'then').

例: I declutter my desk at the end of each day: first I throw away rubbish, then I file loose papers and put stationery back in their drawers.

提案: Improve grammar (subject–verb agreement) and expand slightly with a concise example of the benefit. Use a linking word to connect the idea and the example.

例: Definitely. Being tidy saves time when you look for things and creates a more productive environment; for example, I can start work immediately without spending ten minutes searching for documents.

× Yes I do. Having a clean and organized spay has me stay for kids and reduce a lot of unnecessary risk.

✓ Yes, I do. Having a clean and organized space helps me stay safe for kids and reduces a lot of unnecessary risk.

The sentence contains multiple errors: 'spay' is a misspelling of 'space' (lexical error), 'has me stay for kids' is ungrammatical and unclear — the intended meaning is likely 'helps me stay safe for kids' or 'keeps kids safe', so 'helps me stay safe for kids' was used; 'reduce' must be 'reduces' to agree with the singular subject 'Having a clean and organized space' (subject-verb agreement and tense). Also add a comma after 'Yes'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure and correct word choice: 'Having a clean and organized space helps me keep kids safe and reduces unnecessary risks.'

× Not really, but then I was quite messy and my parents always had to remind me to clean up my toys and books.

✓ Not really; I was quite messy, and my parents always had to remind me to clean up my toys and books.

The original sentence is mostly correct grammatically but 'then' is unnecessary and slightly misleading in past context; punctuation improvements make the sentence clearer. The verbs 'was' and 'had to remind' correctly use the past tense. Suggestion: remove 'then' when recounting past habits and use appropriate punctuation for clarity.

× I make it a heartbreak to declutter my desk at the end of every day, putting everything bad in its proper place.

✓ I make it a habit to declutter my desk at the end of every day, putting everything back in its proper place.

The phrase 'make it a heartbreak' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'make it a habit'. 'Putting everything bad' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'putting everything back'. 'Back' is needed to indicate returning items to their place. Suggestion: use the correct idiom 'make it a habit' and include 'back' to show returning items to their place.

× Definitely being tidy save you a lot of time looking for things and creates a much more productive environment.

✓ Definitely, being tidy saves you a lot of time looking for things and creates a much more productive environment.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'being tidy' is a singular gerund phrase and requires the singular verb 'saves' rather than 'save'. Also add a comma after 'Definitely' for clarity. The rest of the sentence is correct. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects; with a gerund subject use singular verbs (e.g., 'being tidy saves').