Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a short topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific examples using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repeating words and unclear phrases. Focus on accurate verb forms and simple connectors (for example, because, for instance, and so).

例: Yes, I do. I like to keep my things tidy because it helps me find items quickly. For example, I always keep my desktop files in labeled folders and put my books on the shelf, so my room looks neat and I can study without distractions.

提案: Answer directly with correct past-tense forms and a clear reason. Use one linking word (because or so) and one specific example from childhood. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child my parents asked me to tidy my room every day because it made me feel relaxed. For instance, I always put my toys in boxes and lined up my shoes by the door.

提案: Give a clear procedure using present simple tense: state one method and then explain how it helps. Use linking words like so or because, and include a concrete detail (e.g., folders, schedule). Avoid repetition and fragmented phrases.

例: I keep my study space tidy by using labeled folders and a daily checklist. Because everything has a place, I can start work quickly and save time when I need documents or notes.

提案: State your opinion clearly and support it with one or two logical reasons using connectors (because, therefore). Give a specific result of being tidy (e.g., saves time, reduces stress). Use concise and grammatically correct sentences.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it saves time and reduces stress. For example, when my papers are organized I can complete tasks faster, so I feel more productive and calm.

× I say yes I will.

✓ Yes, I will.

The original includes unnecessary words and awkward structure. Use a concise reply 'Yes, I will.' to match the examiner's question. Remove 'I say' which is not needed in natural spoken English.

× I like to keep everything and organization like my desktop or everything I will change on the arrangement and such as a bedroom, bedroom.

✓ I like to keep everything organized, for example my desktop and my bedroom.

The sentence is confused and repetitive. Use 'organized' (adjective) after 'keep' and give clear examples. Remove repeated words and restructure: 'I like to keep everything organized, for example my desktop and my bedroom.' This fixes word order and clarity.

× Therefore, my parents when I watched the toys meet to organize everything and has their place without making noise in the place.

✓ When I was young, my parents taught me to put toys away and keep everything in its place without making noise.

Multiple errors: incorrect tense ('when I watched' -> 'when I was young'), wrong verb ('meet' and 'has') and subject-verb agreement. Use 'taught me' (past) and 'keep everything in its place' for correct phrasing and agreement.

× Yes, when I was child my parents choice me to arrange everything and I enhance the place without make any noise in the place because it's making me very relaxed and comfortable and always a clear my room and organization it's.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my parents asked me to arrange everything, and I kept the room quiet because it made me feel relaxed and comfortable, so I always kept my room clean and organized.

Errors include missing article 'a' before 'child', incorrect verb forms ('choice' -> 'asked', 'enhance' -> unclear; use 'kept'), and wrong infinitive ('without make' -> 'without making'). Use past tense consistently and clear verbs: 'asked', 'kept', 'made'. Also correct word order and remove redundant phrases.

× When my work, it is towards me when my work is very organized, it's making the the everything.

✓ When I work, if my workspace is very organized, everything becomes easier.

Original is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use conditional structure 'If my workspace is very organized' and a clear main clause 'everything becomes easier' to express the idea.

× It's very easy to and and do it every every skill and some and short time without without without make without spare more time and and noisy and everything was very.

✓ It's very easy to do tasks quickly and without making noise when the workspace is organized.

The original has repeated words and wrong structure. Use correct adverbial phrases 'quickly' and 'without making noise' and clear noun 'tasks'. Remove repetitions and ensure logical word order.

× Yes, it's very necessary to be to be everything in in arrangement, because it is very easy to paint anything you have you you you found it or found in found own or found a hotel behind the research, everything is very easy.

✓ Yes, it is important to keep everything in order because then it is easy to find anything you need.

The sentence is confused and repetitive. Replace 'be to be everything in in arrangement' with 'keep everything in order' and simplify the latter clause to 'easy to find anything you need' for clarity and correct vocabulary.

× Therefore, when you are tried everything in in organized, it's making the the life is very easy and you are very.

✓ Therefore, when everything is organized, life becomes much easier.

Errors: 'are tried' is incorrect; use passive or simple present 'when everything is organized'. 'It's making the the life is very easy and you are very' is ungrammatical and incomplete. Use concise result clause 'life becomes much easier' to convey the meaning.