Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับประโยคให้ชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้าง: เริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรง ๆ แล้วอธิบายสั้น ๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม (because, so) และคำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้องเกี่ยวกับการอยู่รวมกัน เช่น "roommates" และ "my area" นอกจากนี้ควรลดคำซ้ำ/คำพูดเปลี่ยนใจ (uh) และจำกัดความยาวไม่เกิน 3–4 ประโยค ตัวอย่างสิ่งที่ต้องปรับ: หลักไวยากรณ์ (I keep thinking tidy → I like to keep things tidy), คำว่า "from other perspective" ควรเป็น "from others' perspective", รูปพหูพจน์ roommate → roommates, และจบประโยคให้สมบูรณ์

例: I like to keep things tidy because it helps me concentrate. However, I live in a dorm with five roommates, so I only control my own area. Therefore, I make sure my desk and shelves are organized so they don't bother others.

提案: ควรตอบตรงคำถามด้วยเวลาอดีต (used to / when I was a child) และเรียงเหตุผลให้กระชับ ใช้ linking words เช่น "because" และหลีกเลี่ยงการซ้ำซ้อนของคำ ควรแก้ไวยากรณ์เรื่อง tense (was a child) และ verb forms (she always cleaned my room) ให้ถูกต้อง

例: No, I didn't. When I was a child my mother always cleaned my room, so I never had to tidy it myself.

提案: ตอบด้วยประโยคหลักแล้วให้รายละเอียดเป็นขั้นตอนหรือวิธีการ ใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง (boxes, separate into categories, easier, room) และ linking words (for example, because, so) แก้ไวยากรณ์เรื่อง tense และรูปพหูพจน์ รวมถึงลำดับคำให้ชัดเจน

例: I keep my study space tidy by using boxes to organize my items. For example, I have several boxes for stationery, cables and documents, so it's easier to find things and the room looks cleaner.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดเจนว่าคุณเห็นด้วยหรือไม่ จากนั้นอธิบายเหตุผลโดยใช้ตัวอย่างที่เหมาะสมและเป็นระเบียบ ใช้คำว่า "necessary" และโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจน เช่น "I think being tidy is necessary for... but not everything needs to be perfectly organized." แก้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ในตัวอย่าง (socks, wear → worn/used)

例: I think being tidy is useful because it saves time and reduces stress, but not everything needs to be perfectly organized. For instance, I keep frequently worn socks near the door for convenience, while other items are stored neatly.

× For me, I keep thinking tidy, but I don't know what the from other perspective.

✓ For me, I try to keep things tidy, but I don't know how it looks from other people's perspective.

The original sentence has word order and missing words causing unclear meaning (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). Use 'try to keep things tidy' for intention, and 'how it looks from other people's perspective' to express viewpoint. Also add plural 'people's' for possession and 'things' as plural object.

× I also live in dormitory with other five roommate, so I need to keep the thing in my areas.

✓ I also live in a dormitory with five other roommates, so I need to keep things in my area.

Errors include missing article 'a', incorrect word order 'other five roommate' and singular/plural mismatches (ID 1). Use 'a dormitory', 'five other roommates' (plural), and 'things' (plural). Use 'my area' instead of 'my areas' for the personal space.

× I cannot uh put the thing everywhere in my.

✓ I cannot put my things everywhere in my room.

The sentence is missing the object and location, causing a sentence structure error (ID 26). Replace 'uh' with pause removed, use 'my things' and specify location 'in my room'.

× No I don't keep my room tidy because when I was child I live with my mom so she always keep she always clean my room that made me don't what do don't need didn't need to clean my old room.

✓ No, I didn't keep my room tidy because when I was a child I lived with my mom, and she always cleaned my room, so I didn't need to clean it myself.

Multiple tense and structure errors: wrong present tense 'don't keep' should be past 'didn't keep' for childhood, missing article 'a child', past tense 'lived' and 'cleaned' required (IDs 6 and 5). Also remove repetition and correct 'didn't need to clean it myself' for clarity.

× I try to put everything in box.

✓ I try to put everything in boxes.

Count noun and plural needed; 'box' should be plural 'boxes' (ID 9 relates to participles but here fix is plural—primary issue is singular/plural ID 1). The sentence uses present tense 'try' which is fine for habitual action.

× I have buy a lot of box to keep to separate into category and keep them on the box so I it's more easy to find the things and also make the loom feel clean.

✓ I have bought a lot of boxes to separate items into categories and keep them in the boxes, so it's easier to find things and makes the room feel clean.

Multiple errors: 'have buy' should be present perfect 'have bought' (verb form, ID 9), 'a lot of box' needs plural 'boxes' (quantifier/plural, ID 14 and 1), 'separate into category' should be 'separate items into categories', 'keep them in the boxes' not 'on', 'it's easier' instead of 'it's more easy', and 'room' not 'loom' (word choice). Also maintain consistent tense.

× I don't think everything needs to be tidy because I just want to put everything in the place that they need to be.

✓ I don't think everything needs to be tidy because I just want to put everything in the place where it should be.

Awkward clause 'in the place that they need to be' — use 'place where it should be' for clarity and correct pronoun agreement ('everything' is singular so use 'it') (ID 6 and 12).

× For example, I always put my sock in front of the door because I have wear it.

✓ For example, I always put my socks in front of the door because I wear them often.

Pronoun and number errors: 'sock' should be plural 'socks' if habitual, and 'have wear it' is ungrammatical—use simple present 'I wear them' or 'I have worn them' if past relevance. Match pronoun 'them' to plural 'socks' (ID 12 and 1).