Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly addresses the question with a clear topic sentence and a supporting detail. To improve, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add a brief specific example or frequency phrase using a linking word. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "organised" instead of "in order").

例: Yes, I do — I like to keep my surroundings organised because it helps me feel calm and more productive. For example, I tidy my desk every evening before dinner so I can start fresh the next morning.

提案: Your response answers the question directly but is slightly repetitive and uses awkward phrasing ("remind herself"). Improve by giving one specific reason or short anecdote and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep to fewer sentences and correct pronoun use.

例: No, I didn’t. When I was little I often left toys everywhere because I found playing more fun than tidying up, so my parents usually had to remind me to clean once a week.

提案: Good practical answer, but grammar and word choice need correction (e.g., "the next day", "in the evening", "work or study efficiently"). Condense to two sentences, use a linking word, and add one more specific habit to show variety.

例: I usually pack the books I will need for the next day into my backpack in the evening, which saves time in the morning. I also keep pens and notes in separate pouches so my desk stays uncluttered.

提案: Your opinion is clear but the sentence has grammatical errors and awkward comparisons. Improve by stating your view in one clear sentence, then give a concise reason with a linking word and a relevant example. Use natural phrasing (e.g., "people who live in tidy environments").

例: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because people who live in organised spaces usually work more efficiently. For instance, I find I finish tasks faster when I can quickly find documents and stationery.

× Yes, of course, I enjoy keeping everything around me in order because it makes me feel calm and more productive.

✓ Yes, of course, I enjoy keeping everything around me in order because it makes me feel calm and more productive.

No grammatical error that matches the provided problem types; sentence is correct in present simple tense describing habitual action.

× No, when I was little I was unable to keep my room clean by myself.

✓ No, when I was little I could not keep my room clean by myself.

'Was unable to' is not wrong but 'could not' is the more natural past-tense modal expression for ability. This fits past tense issue (ID 5). Suggest using 'could not' for clarity and naturalness.

× It was really hard for a child to remind herself to tidy up the room.

✓ It was really hard for a child to remind herself or himself to tidy up the room.

The original uses 'herself' which assumes the child is female. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12). Use 'herself or himself' or a gender-neutral 'themselves' to avoid gender assumption. Suggest using 'themselves' in informal contexts: 'to remind themselves to tidy up the room.'

× I often take the books which will be used at the next day in my backpack at evening.

✓ I often put the books that I will use the next day in my backpack in the evening.

Multiple preposition and word-choice issues (ID 11). 'Take the books ... in my backpack at evening' is awkward. Use 'put ... in my backpack' and 'in the evening'. Also change relative clause to 'that I will use the next day' for natural word order and tense consistency.

× It is quite convenient and useful.

✓ It is quite convenient and useful.

Sentence is grammatically correct and matches no listed error types; no change needed.

× It can also help me to do the works or study efficiently.

✓ It can also help me work or study more efficiently.

'Do the works' is unidiomatic and 'study efficiently' needs an adverb modifier. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use 'help me work or study more efficiently' for correct verb forms and natural phrasing.

× Of course, in my opinion, someone lives in a tidy environment will be more efficient than the other one who always keeps himself in a mess.

✓ Of course, in my opinion, someone who lives in a tidy environment will be more efficient than someone who always keeps themselves in a mess.

Several problems: missing relative pronoun 'who' after 'someone' and awkward pronoun 'the other one who always keeps himself in a mess.' This is a present-tense general statement so use 'who lives' (ID 6 for present tense issue) and use 'someone' in parallel and gender-neutral 'themselves' to avoid incorrect pronoun use (ID 12). Suggest: 'someone who lives in a tidy environment will be more efficient than someone who always lives in a mess' or 'someone who always keeps their space messy.'