Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more accurate with vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and pronunciation errors (e.g. 'tidy' pronounced clearly).

例: Yes, I do. I believe being tidy reflects a person’s personality because it shows they are organized and reliable. For example, I always put my clothes away and clean common areas so I can find things easily.

提案: Answer the question directly, then give a brief explanation with a reason and one specific example. Use past tense correctly and avoid trailing off. Replace fillers with a short pause if needed.

例: Not really. When I was a child I preferred playing with my brother, so my room was often messy. For instance, toys and clothes would be left on the floor, and my parents had to tidy up for me.

提案: Provide a clear method with specific actions and logical linking words. Use the present simple for habitual actions and avoid repetition. Name concrete steps you take to keep the space tidy.

例: I keep my study area tidy by clearing my desk every evening and putting papers in folders. Also, I use a pen holder and a drawer for cables so the desktop stays uncluttered.

提案: Give a direct opinion then support it with clear reasons and an example. Use accurate vocabulary (tidy, organized, responsible) and avoid repeating words. Link sentences with words like 'because' and 'for example.'

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it creates a pleasant environment and shows you are responsible. For example, colleagues are more likely to trust someone who keeps their workspace organized.

× Of course I do. Uh, I think the tighter knees, uh, reflect they are people's, the personal personalities. So I prefer uh, being tight knees.

✓ Of course I do. I think being tidy reflects people's personalities, so I prefer being tidy.

The student used incorrect words and adjective forms ('tighter knees', 'tight knees') instead of 'tidy'. Word choice and adjective form errors fall under incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs. Also word order and redundancy ('they are people's, the personal personalities') is confusing. Suggestion: use the adjective 'tidy' and the gerund 'being tidy' to describe a habit; use 'reflects people's personalities' with singular verb agreement and concise phrasing.

× Uh, I don't remember exactly, but I didn't because I preferred the playing, umm, anything with my brother. So I always did messy. So my parents usually, uh, clean the.

✓ I don't remember exactly, but I didn't because I preferred playing with my brother. I was always messy, so my parents usually cleaned my room.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'preferred the playing, anything with my brother' should be 'preferred playing with my brother' (use gerund after 'prefer'); 'I always did messy' is ungrammatical — use 'I was always messy' (past state). 'My parents usually, uh, clean the.' should be past tense 'cleaned my room' to match past context. Suggestion: use past simple for habitual past actions ('was', 'cleaned') and gerund after 'prefer'.

× I usually try not to be messy because I don't want to the messy place so I usually cleaned my desktop and desk desk.

✓ I usually try not to be messy because I don't want a messy place, so I usually clean my desktop and desk.

Tense inconsistency: 'I usually try' (present) is correct, but 'I usually cleaned' mixes past tense with present habitual meaning. Use present simple 'I usually clean' for habitual actions. Also article misuse 'the messy place' should be 'a messy place'. Remove duplicated word 'desk'. Suggestion: keep present simple for routines and use appropriate articles.

× Of course, because the tighteners reflect their people's personality. So if you are tidy, uh, for everything, umm, people think you are really calm and uh, relaxed person for.

✓ Of course, because tidiness reflects people's personalities. If you are tidy in everything, people think you are a calm and relaxed person.

Wrong word forms: 'the tighteners' is incorrect; use noun 'tidiness' or adjective 'being tidy'. 'reflect their people's personality' should be 'reflects people's personalities' (singular/plural and word order). 'for everything' -> 'in everything'. Missing article before 'calm and relaxed person'. Also unnecessary trailing 'for'. Suggestion: use 'tidiness' or 'being tidy' as the subject, ensure verb agreement ('reflects'), use plural 'personalities' when referring generally, and include the indefinite article before 'calm and relaxed person'.