Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法や語順の誤り、語彙の選択ミス、冗長さが目立ちます。まずトピック文で直接答え（肯定・否定）を明確に述べ、その後で理由や具体例を1〜2文で述べましょう。接続詞（because, so, however）を使って文をつなぎ、語順と時制に注意してください。発音や流暢さも練習し、短く自然な文にまとめる癖をつけてください。

例: I don't really like keeping things tidy, but I try to keep my space organized. Because I often feel more relaxed and focused when my room is clean, I spend a few minutes each day putting things away.

提案: 過去習慣について話すときは 'used to' を正しく使い、文を一つずつ完結にしましょう。原因と結果を説明する際は接続詞（so, because）を使い、家族の反応を描写する場合は過去形を統一してください。冗長な繰り返しを避け、より自然な表現（my mother got angry / scolded me）を使いましょう。

例: I didn't use to keep my room tidy when I was a child, especially when I was tired. As a result, my mother often got angry and scolded me because she wanted me to learn responsibility.

提案: ここでは具体的な方法を一貫して述べる必要があります。まず直接答え（I usually...）を言い、その後で具体例を1〜2つ挙げてください。語順や名詞の数（plural/singular）に注意し、短い句を結ぶときは because, for example, such as を使いましょう。道具（pencils, books, boxes）や頻度（always, often）を明確にすると良いです。

例: I usually keep my study space tidy by organizing my books on a shelf and keeping pens and pencils in a box. For example, I always put notebooks in order and store stationery in a small container so my desk stays clear.

提案: 意見を述べるときは 'Yes, I think so' のように明確に開始し、理由を一貫した文で説明しましょう。感情表現は natural な語彙（feel refreshed, happier）を使い、接続詞で理由と結果をつなげてください。曖昧なフレーズ（or something）は避け、具体性を持たせましょう。

例: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because being organized helps me feel refreshed and happier. As a result, I can concentrate better when studying or working.

× Actually, I hate to keep things tidy, but I try to keep things steady. This is because cleaning made me. Fresh or feel fresh habit?

✓ Actually, I hate keeping things tidy, but I try to keep things neat. This is because cleaning makes me feel fresh.

The student used incorrect verb forms: 'hate to keep' is acceptable but 'hate keeping' is more natural with continual action; more importantly 'cleaning made me' is wrong because the verb should be present tense 'makes' to indicate habitual effect and needs the object 'feel' after 'makes me'. 'Steady' is the wrong adjective for tidiness; 'neat' is appropriate. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual effects (cleaning makes me feel) and the correct adjective (neat).

× Actually, whenever tired I didn't use to keep my room tidy. So my mother angry, my mother often angry me. My mother say you should. You are doing.

✓ Actually, whenever I was tired I didn't use to keep my room tidy. So my mother was angry; my mother often got angry with me. My mother said, 'You should change what you are doing.'

Multiple tense errors: time context refers to past, so 'I was tired' and 'my mother was angry' require past simple. 'Didn't use to' is correct for past habit but needs subject position. 'Angry me' is ungrammatical; English uses 'angry with me' or 'got angry with me'. Reported speech must use past tense: 'said' and complete clause. Suggestion: place subjects before adjectives, use 'angry with', and use past tense consistently for past habits and reactions.

× I usually try to make a small books, for example I. Small books I often did of pencil in a box.

✓ I usually try to keep my books small; for example, I often keep a few pencils in a box.

The original has broken, unclear sentence fragments and wrong verb choices. 'Make a small books' is ungrammatical (number mismatch and verb choice). 'Did of pencil' is incorrect. Suggest rewriting to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'I usually try to keep my books small' or if meaning different, 'I try to organize my books; for example, I often keep pencils in a box.' Keep consistent number agreement and simple present for habitual actions.

× I yes I think so. This is because tidying makes me feeling fresh or happiness so I can focus on studying. Or something.

✓ Yes, I think so. Tidying makes me feel fresh and happy, so I can focus on studying.

Use of 'makes me feeling' is incorrect: after 'make' use the bare infinitive 'feel'. 'Happiness' is a noun; the adjective 'happy' fits here. Remove filler 'Or something' in formal answers. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths and the structure 'make someone feel + adjective'.