Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неестественный и невнятный: нужно прямо ответить на вопрос, использовать связные предложения и ясные слова. Уточните, что вы понимаете под "tidy", укажите пример привычки (например, убирать вещи после использования) и избегайте слов-паразитов. Постройте ответ из 2–3 коротких предложений, используйте связку (for example, because) для пояснения.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, I always put my clothes away and wash dishes after meals because a tidy space helps me concentrate.

提案: Ответ смешан по временам и неясен: нужно явно говорить о прошлом (used to) и сравнить с настоящим, если нужно. Начните с прямого ответа ('Yes, I used to...'), затем добавьте причину или контраст, используя связки (because, but, now). Старайтесь не превращать ответ в едва связанные фразы.

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents taught me good habits. Now I still try to keep it neat, although I am sometimes busy with school.

提案: Ответ слишком краткий и содержит бессмысленные слова ('TV'). Дайте конкретные действия и используйте связки для последовательности (first, then, so). Опишите 2–3 конкретных шага, которые вы предпринимаете, чтобы поддерживать порядок.

例: I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk after each study session. For example, I put books on a shelf, throw away rubbish, and tidy my notes so I can find things quickly.

提案: Ответ слишком сокращён и содержит аббревиатуру, непонятную слушателю. Дайте прямое мнение в одном предложении и пояснение в следующем, используя связку (because, therefore). Приводите конкретные причины, как порядок влияет на вашу жизнь.

例: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because it reduces stress and saves time. For instance, when my room is organized I can find my books easily and focus better on tasks.

× Yes, I like to keep things ***** and my dad to teach. To keep things TV.

✓ Yes, I like to keep things tidy and my dad taught me to do that.

The original contains fragmented and unclear clauses. 'my dad to teach' is an incorrect infinitive structure; use 'my dad taught me' (past tense) or 'my dad teaches me' depending on meaning. 'To keep things TV' is nonsensical; likely intended 'tidy'. Suggested correction fixes sentence structure, provides a clear subject and verb, and uses the past tense 'taught' if the teaching happened in the past. Improve by forming a complete clause: subject + verb + object, and ensure adjectives like 'tidy' are used correctly.

× I chilled now and I keep my room tidy always.

✓ I chill now and I always keep my room tidy.

'Chilled' is the past form and does not fit with 'now'; use 'chill' (present) for current habitual or temporary states. Word order: adverbs of frequency like 'always' commonly come before the main verb (I always keep) or after auxiliary; placing 'always' before 'keep' sounds more natural. Improve by using the present simple for habits and correct adverb placement.

× Yes, I keep my work and study Space TV. And I like it.

✓ Yes, I keep my work and study space tidy, and I like it.

'Space TV' is incorrect and unclear; likely 'space tidy' was intended. Capitalization of 'Space' is unnecessary. Combine the two short sentences with a comma and conjunction for smooth flow. Use the adjective 'tidy' after the noun 'space' to describe it. Ensure consistent capitalization.

× For me BTD is so important.

✓ For me, being tidy is very important.

'BTD' is an unclear abbreviation; expand to 'being tidy' to convey meaning. Insert a comma after the introductory phrase 'For me'. Use 'very important' instead of 'so important' for formality, though 'so important' is not grammatically wrong. Improve clarity by avoiding unexplained abbreviations and using a gerund 'being' to describe the state.