Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn tốt: tự nhiên, rõ ràng và có lí do cụ thể. Để đạt điểm cao hơn, hãy rút ngắn một chút và tránh lặp ý (motivation/focus tương tự), đồng thời thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: một hành động bạn làm khi dọn dẹp hoặc một ví dụ ngắn) để tăng tính phong phú và cụ thể của nội dung.

例: Yes, I do. I feel more motivated when my room is neat because I can find things quickly and start tasks without delay. For instance, when my desk is organized I can begin studying immediately instead of wasting time searching for notes.

提案: Câu trả lời trung thực và có cấu trúc tốt, nhưng hơi lặp và dài hơn cần thiết. Bạn nên đưa thêm một liên kết thời gian hoặc lý do ngắn gọn (ví dụ: bận chơi, không thấy cần thiết) để làm rõ hành vi, và cố gắng chỉ trong 2-3 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Not really. I usually cleaned only one corner because I preferred playing and often got tired, so I put the rest off for a few days. For example, I often left my books scattered while I played outside.

提案: Rất rõ ràng, cụ thể và có các hành động cụ thể - đây là câu trả lời mẫu. Để hoàn thiện hơn, bạn có thể thêm một liên kết ngắn giữa các ý hoặc một kết quả cụ thể (ví dụ: tiết kiệm thời gian khoảng bao nhiêu) để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: I put items back immediately after use and organise books and stationery into labelled sections, so I can find things quickly. I also deep-clean my desk every two months, which saves me time because I rarely have to search for misplaced items.

提案: Ý chính rõ ràng và thuyết phục, nhưng hơi lặp với câu trả lời trước. Hãy nêu thêm một lý do hoặc lợi ích cụ thể khác (ví dụ: giảm căng thẳng, tạo ấn tượng tốt với người khác) và dùng một liên kết để làm mạch lạc hơn.

例: Definitely. A tidy environment helps me concentrate and reduces stress, so I can finish tasks faster. For example, when my room is clean I rarely feel overwhelmed and can focus on studying.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

No grammar problem from the provided list; added a comma after the introductory affirmation for natural punctuation. This is punctuation, not a grammar problem from the given list.

× I actually feel that I can always stay motivated when everything around me is neat and organized.

✓ I actually feel that I can always stay motivated when everything around me is neat and organized.

Sentence is grammatically correct with respect to the listed grammar problem types; no changes required.

× If my space is messy, I find it quite hard to focus on my work.

✓ If my space is messy, I find it quite hard to focus on my work.

No grammar errors from the provided list.

× Not really.

✓ Not really.

Short answer is acceptable and has no grammar errors from the list.

× Back then I used to clean just one corner of my room and then get tired and stop.

✓ Back then, I used to clean just one corner of my room and then get tired and stop.

Grammar is correct (use of 'used to' for past habitual action). A comma after 'Back then' improves readability; this is punctuation, not a listed grammar error.

× I would usually finish the rest a few days later.

✓ I would usually finish the rest a few days later.

Correct use of 'would' for habitual past; no listed grammar error.

× I don't think I ever managed to clean my whole room in one go back then.

✓ I don't think I ever managed to clean my whole room in one go back then.

Tense and aspect are appropriate; no grammar problem from the provided list.

× I usually put things back in their proper place right after using them.

✓ I usually put things back in their proper place right after using them.

Sentence is grammatically correct.

× I also organise my books and stationery into different sections so everything is easy to find.

✓ I also organise my books and stationery into different sections so everything is easy to find.

Spelling 'organise' is British English and acceptable; no grammar error from the list.

× On top of that, I clean my desk thoroughly about once every two months.

✓ On top of that, I clean my desk thoroughly about once every two months.

Sentence is grammatically correct.

× Definitely, I feel quite uncomfortable and unmotivated when everything is messy.

✓ Definitely, I feel quite uncomfortable and unmotivated when everything is messy.

Sentence is grammatical; 'Definitely' as a sentence adverb is acceptable.

× A tidy environment really helps me concentrate and work more effectively.

✓ A tidy environment really helps me concentrate and work more effectively.

Sentence is grammatically correct.