Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (use infinitives and articles) and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my things tidy because it makes it easier to find things when I need them and helps me relax. For example, when my desk is organized I can concentrate better on studying.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by briefly describing a specific childhood habit or example and by adding a linking word to show cause.

例: Yes, I did. My parents encouraged me to tidy my room every weekend, which helped me concentrate on my studies and feel more relaxed. For instance, I always made my bed and put toys away before doing homework.

提案: Be more coherent and avoid fragmented sentences. Use a clear structure: topic sentence, then specific steps with linking words. Correct word choice and punctuation.

例: I tidy my workspace every evening. After I finish studying, I put books and notebooks back on the shelf and wipe the desk, so everything is ready for the next day. This routine helps me start work quickly and stay focused.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then add a specific reason and a short example or result. Use correct comparative structure (find things more easily).

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because a tidy room lets you find things more easily and saves time. For example, I rarely lose my notes because they are always in the same place.

× Yes, I like to maintain my things tidy to not difficult when you move and to help you focus and to relax.

✓ Yes, I like to keep my things tidy so it is not difficult when I move, and it helps me focus and relax.

Original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect phrase 'maintain my things tidy' and 'to not difficult when you move.' This is a sentence structure problem (maps to item 26). Use 'keep' with 'tidy' (common collocation), change 'to not difficult' to 'so it is not difficult', and make pronouns consistent ('I' instead of 'you'). Remove unnecessary repeated 'to' before verbs: 'helps me focus and relax.' Suggestion: practise standard collocations (keep tidy) and use clear purpose clauses ('so...' or 'so that...').

× Yes, my parents encouraged me to clean my room because it helps me concentrate on my study and feel more relaxed.

✓ Yes, my parents encouraged me to clean my room because it helped me concentrate on my studies and feel more relaxed.

The main clause is past tense ('encouraged'), so the reason clause should use past tense 'helped' for consistency (sequence of tenses). Also change 'study' to plural 'studies' which is the normal noun. This is a past tense consistency error (maps to item 5). Suggestion: when reporting past events, keep subordinate clauses in past tense where appropriate.

× I tidy my workspace every evening. After I finish using my things, I clean my. Notebook, school words, Keeping everything organized helps me focus and make it easier to start.

✓ I tidy my workspace every evening. After I finish using my things, I clean them: notebooks and schoolwork. Keeping everything organized helps me focus and makes it easier to get started.

Original contains fragmented sentence 'I clean my.' and unclear phrase 'school words.' This is a sentence structure and word choice problem (maps to item 26). Replace fragment with 'I clean them' and clarify items as 'notebooks and schoolwork.' Ensure subject-verb agreement in final clause: 'helps me focus and makes it easier to get started.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and use clear nouns for school materials; check verb agreement.

× Yes, because when your room is tidy it helps you to find your things easier.

✓ Yes, because when your room is tidy, it helps you find your things more easily.

Original uses 'your' which is okay in context but the sentence has adverb/adjective error: 'find your things easier' is incorrect; 'easier' modifies adjectives, use adverb 'more easily' with verb 'find.' Also add comma after subordinate clause. This maps to incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (item 13) and adverb placement (item 20). Suggestion: use adverbs ('easily') with verbs and include comparative 'more' when appropriate.