Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "so" or "because"). Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "organize my things" not "organize my list").

例: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my desk tidy because it helps me find my books and pencils quickly, so I spend a few minutes each evening putting things back in their place.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail and a short result. Fix common grammar errors (e.g., "complimented me", not "complimented to me") and avoid unnecessary words.

例: Yes, I did. I always cleaned my room and arranged my stationery and notebooks on my desk, so my mother often praised me for being tidy.

提案: Give a clear method with specific steps and use linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "actual use items" and fix word order and prepositions (e.g., "put things back in their original places"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: I put items back in their original places after I finish using them. For example, I return pens to a cup and books to a shelf so I can find them easily later.

提案: Answer directly and explain with clear reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "important to be tidy", "helps me feel peaceful, not messy"). Give one or two specific benefits and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps me feel calm and focused; for instance, a clean desk makes it easier to concentrate on my studies.

× Yes I do. I prefer to keep my desk tidy. I'm trying to. I'm always trying to organize my list on my desk because it is convenient for looking for my book and pencil.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my desk tidy. I try to. I'm always trying to organize the items on my desk because it is convenient when looking for my books and pencils.

The student mixes present continuous and simple present incorrectly. Use 'I try' for habitual actions rather than 'I'm trying.' 'List' is incorrect in this context; 'items' or specific nouns are needed. Use plural 'books' and 'pencils' for general reference. Also add 'when' to connect the clause logically. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and ensure nouns match intended meaning.

× Yes, I did. I always cleaned my room and organized my stationery and notebook on my desk so my mother always complimented to me.

✓ Yes, I did. I always cleaned my room and organized my stationery and notebooks on my desk, so my mother always complimented me.

The sentence correctly uses past tense for habitual past actions but has errors: 'notebook' should be plural 'notebooks' when speaking generally; the verb 'complimented' does not take the preposition 'to' in this context, so remove 'to' and add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general items and remember which verbs require direct objects without prepositions.

× Umm, actual use items. I always take a bag in original locations because. It is convenient to fall looking for other items after later.

✓ I usually put things in their original places. I always carry a bag to store items because it is convenient when looking for other things later.

The original fragments are unclear and ungrammatical. 'Actual use items' is not standard; 'put things in their original places' expresses the idea. 'I always take a bag in original locations' is wrong word order and preposition use; better: 'I always carry a bag to store items.' 'because. It is convenient to fall looking for other items after later.' contains sentence fragments and wrong word choices; replace with 'because it is convenient when looking for other things later.' Suggestion: use complete sentences, standard verbs (put, carry), and logical connectors ('because', 'when') and correct word order.

× Yes, I do. It is important to being tidy because it helps me peaceful and messy. So it is very important being tidy.

✓ Yes, I do. It is important to be tidy because it helps me avoid feeling stressed and being messy. So it is very important to be tidy.

Use the infinitive 'to be' after 'important' rather than the gerund 'being'. The phrase 'helps me peaceful and messy' is incorrect: 'peaceful' is an adjective and doesn't fit after 'helps me'; intended meaning likely 'avoid feeling stressed' or 'keep my mind peaceful' and 'avoid being messy.' Rephrase to 'helps me avoid feeling stressed and being messy.' Repeat 'to be tidy' for clarity. Suggestion: after adjectives like 'important' use 'to' + base verb; choose appropriate verbs/nouns to express emotional states.