Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with a direct topic sentence. To improve, make it slightly more natural by avoiding repetition (neat and clean) and add one brief specific example or consequence. Use a linking phrase to connect reason and example.

例: Yes, I do. I keep my belongings well organized because a tidy space helps me concentrate better; for example, when my desk is clutter-free I can find study materials quickly and focus for longer periods.

提案: Good direct response, but grammar and word choice need attention (did not use to, repeat 'tidy', 'what do you do' is awkward). Shorten and add a specific example of change. Use linking words to contrast past and present.

例: Not really. When I was a child I rarely tidied my room because I didn't realise its importance; however, now I tidy regularly, so I feel calmer and can find my books more easily.

提案: Solid content with specific routine, but repetitive phrasing and small awkwardnesses ('do that' repeated). Combine sentences, vary vocabulary, and use linking words to show purpose.

例: I tidy my study area every evening: I leave current notes on the desk and file older notebooks in the drawers, so I can quickly review relevant material before a test.

提案: Clear opinion but contains grammatical errors, awkward phrasing and repetitions ('keeps you keeps', 'in contact', 'messed up'). Make language concise, correct subject-verb agreement, and give one concrete reason with a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I do. Being tidy creates a comfortable environment and reduces distractions, so I can think more clearly and work more efficiently.

× When I was younger, I did not used to keep my room as tidy as it is now because as a child I did not understand the importance of keeping your room tidy.

✓ When I was younger, I did not use to keep my room as tidy as it is now because, as a child, I did not understand the importance of keeping my room tidy.

The phrase 'did not use to' uses the base form 'use' after 'did not', not 'used'. Also there is inconsistent pronoun: switch from 'your' to 'my' to maintain the same speaker perspective. Add commas for clarity.

× But now I have learnt that keeping your things neat and clean has a great impact on how you behave and what do you do.

✓ But now I have learned that keeping your things neat and clean has a great impact on how you behave and what you do.

In statements, do not use auxiliary 'do' for questions: use 'what you do'. Also 'learnt' is acceptable British English but 'learned' is common; either is fine. Maintain consistent present simple with 'has' and 'behave'.

× As I am a student, I keep my desk neat and clean.

✓ As I am a student, I keep my desk neat and clean.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included as confirmation.

× I do that every evening.

✓ I do that every evening.

Sentence is correct; simple present describes habitual action. No change required.

× I do that by keeping my everyday notes on the top of the desk and my previous ones in the drawers so that I'm able to go through the notes whenever I need to and to go for a test.

✓ I do that by keeping my everyday notes on top of the desk and my older notes in the drawers so that I can go through them whenever I need to prepare for a test.

Use 'on top of' -> 'on top of the desk' is okay but 'on top of' vs 'on top' both acceptable; 'on top of the desk' is wordy. 'Previous ones' is awkward; 'older notes' is clearer. Use 'I can' instead of 'I'm able to' for conciseness and 'prepare for a test' is more natural than 'to go for a test'. Replace repetition 'the notes' with pronoun 'them'.

× Yes, definitely. I believe that keeping yourselves and your possessions neat and clean give you a a comfortable and a cozy place to be in.

✓ Yes, definitely. I believe that keeping yourself and your possessions neat and clean gives you a comfortable, cozy place to be.

Pronoun 'yourselves' (plural reflexive) should be 'yourself' to match singular 'you' in this context. Subject 'keeping ... gives' is singular, so verb should be 'gives' not 'give'. Remove duplicate 'a' and streamline adjectives order and comma usage.

× It also keeps you keeps your mind in contact and does not let you be messed up.

✓ It also helps keep your mind focused and prevents you from getting confused.

Original had duplicated verb 'keeps you keeps' and awkward 'in contact' and 'be messed up'. Use natural collocations: 'helps keep your mind focused' and 'prevents you from getting confused'.