Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'I love keeping things tidy'), include articles and connectors, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I enjoy keeping things tidy, especially my bedroom. For example, my books, notes and stationery are neatly arranged on shelves, so I can quickly find what I need and concentrate on studying.

提案: Use past tense consistently for past habits and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct past-tense statement, then add one clear reason. Fix errors like 'keep'→'kept' and remove duplicated words.

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child. I kept it organised so I could find my toys and books easily, and it helped me relax after school.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct word choice; keep answers coherent and within 3–4 sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence about how you keep the space tidy, use linking words (for example, 'First', 'Also'), and provide specific actions (e.g., storage boxes, labels). Avoid unclear phrases like 'study my nose' or 'my boat'.

例: I keep my study space tidy by organising items into boxes and shelves. For example, I use a pencil holder for stationery and stack my books by subject on a shelf, which makes it easier to focus and keeps the desk clear.

提案: Use concise, grammatically correct sentences and give one or two concrete benefits with linking words. Fix collocations ('spare some time', 'clean my desk'), and avoid repeating the same idea. State reasons clearly and briefly.

例: Yes, I believe being tidy is important. I usually spare some time each day to clean my desk and room because a tidy environment helps me concentrate and feel better prepared for work.

× Yes, I love to keeping tidies, especially for my bedroom.

✓ Yes, I love keeping things tidy, especially my bedroom.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form without 'to' (love keeping). 'To keeping' is incorrect. 'Tidies' is not the correct noun; use 'things tidy' or 'keeping tidy' to describe maintaining cleanliness. Suggestion: use 'love keeping things tidy' or 'love to keep things tidy'.

× My room is tidy and well organized which helps create a focused atmosphere for studying.

✓ My room is tidy and well organized, which helps create a focused atmosphere for studying.

A comma is needed before 'which' because it introduces a nonrestrictive relative clause. This is punctuation/structure related but listed under adjective/adverb use because 'well organized' is correct but the sentence needs the comma for clarity. Suggestion: add a comma before 'which'.

× My notes, books and stationery are nicely arranged make it easy to find what I need.

✓ My notes, books and stationery are nicely arranged, which makes it easy to find what I need.

Two clauses are incorrectly joined; need a relative clause 'which makes' or a conjunction. Also verb agreement: 'makes' matches singular 'which'. Suggestion: use '..., which makes it easy...' or separate into two sentences.

× Guess when I was a child I always keep my room tidy and well organised because I think it will be more focused for me and also I can easily find found what I need.

✓ I guess when I was a child I always kept my room tidy and well organized because I thought it helped me focus and I could easily find what I needed.

When referring to past habits use past tense 'kept' (not 'keep'). Also 'think' should be past 'thought'; 'will be more focused for me' is awkward—use 'helped me focus'. 'Can easily find found' contains both present 'can' and past 'found' incorrectly; use 'could... find' or 'could find'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in past narrative.

× I think is also a better atmosphere for me to relax.

✓ I think it also created a better atmosphere for me to relax.

Missing subject after 'think' and tense mismatch. 'I think is' is ungrammatical. Since speaking about the past, use past 'created' or rephrase to present: 'I think it also creates a better atmosphere for relaxing.' Suggestion: include the subject 'it' and match tense.

× In my bedroom and where are usually concentrated, study my nose.

✓ In my bedroom, where I usually concentrate, I study.

Word order and phrase choice are incorrect. 'Where are usually concentrated' should be 'where I usually concentrate' and 'study my nose' is incorrect—probably 'I study'. Suggestion: use 'where I usually study' or 'where I usually concentrate on studying.'

× My boat and stationery are nicely arranged so I'm easy to find what I need.

✓ My books and stationery are nicely arranged, so it's easy to find what I need.

'Boat' is a wrong word; context suggests 'books'. 'I'm easy to find' incorrectly uses pronoun and structure; should be 'it's easy to find' (impersonal 'it'). Suggestion: correct nouns and use 'it's easy to find.'

× So along the shelf I also put a small collection of different kinds of books that I love to read and I think it's make my room more.

✓ So on the shelf I also place a small collection of books that I love to read, and I think it makes my room more inviting.

Preposition 'along the shelf' is awkward; use 'on the shelf'. Verb tense/form: 'put'->'place' or 'put' acceptable but 'it's make' is incorrect; should be 'it makes'. The sentence ends incomplete 'more'—add an adjective like 'inviting' or 'pleasant'. Suggestion: use correct preposition, subject-verb agreement, and complete the adjective.

× Yes, I think it is very important to be tidy.

✓ Yes, I think it is very important to be tidy.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included for completeness.)

× I usually spare spend sometimes to ID my desk and also my room everyday because I think I'm well organised and so tidy atmosphere make me more easily to focus on what I'm going to work and also make myself more prepared.

✓ I usually spend some time tidying my desk and my room every day because I think being well organized and having a tidy atmosphere helps me focus more easily on my work and makes me more prepared.

Multiple errors: 'spare spend sometimes' -> 'spend some time'; 'to ID' probably 'tidy'; 'everyday' (adjective) -> 'every day' (adverbial); 'I'm well organised and so tidy atmosphere' needs gerund/noun forms: 'being well organized and having a tidy atmosphere'; subject-verb agreement: 'make me' -> 'helps me' or 'makes me'; 'more easily to focus' -> 'focus more easily' or 'make it easier for me to focus'; 'what I'm going to work' -> 'my work' or 'what I'm going to work on'. Suggestion: use correct collocations, gerunds, adverb forms, and maintain subject-verb agreement.