Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장을 더 자연스럽게 만들고 문법 오류를 고치세요. 구체적 예시를 하나로 정리하고 중복 표현을 줄이세요. 또한 마지막 문장은 부정문과 이유를 분리해 명확히 표현하세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유 → 구체적 예시 순으로 2~3문장으로 구성하세요.

例: Yes, I do. I like to keep things neat and organized because it saves time and reduces stress. For example, I always return items to their designated places after using them, so I can find them easily later.

提案: 중복된 말과 문법 오류(시제·주어동사 일치)를 줄이고 명확한 시제 사용을 연습하세요. 불필요한 말(honestly, filler)을 제거하고 과거 습관을 표현할 때 'used to'를 사용하세요. 구조: 과거 주제문 → 이유 또는 변화 설명으로 2문장으로 정리하세요.

例: No, I didn't used to keep my room tidy when I was a child. As I grew older, I developed habits of cleaning and organizing because I realized it made life easier.

提案: 문장에서 대명사와 소유격을 일치시키고 동사 형태를 바로잡으세요. 불분명한 표현(‘make their own plays’)을 구체적으로 바꾸고 간결한 단계별 설명을 하세요. 예: 먼저 계획을 세운다 → 적절한 가구를 고른다 → 사용 후 제자리에 둔다. 각 단계는 연결어로 이어 표현하세요.

例: I usually plan the layout of my workspace first and then choose suitable furniture. I keep everything in its place and always put items back after using them to maintain order.

提案: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 문장 연결과 명확성을 개선하세요. 불완전한 문장('Feel much?')을 제거하고, 근거를 2~3문장으로 정리해 이유와 구체적 결과를 제시하세요. 연결어(therefore, because, for example)를 사용해 논리성을 높이세요.

例: Yes, definitely. Being tidy makes everyday life much easier because you can find things quickly. For example, I use boxes and shelves to separate items, which saves time and reduces stress.

× Yes I do. I prefer keeping things neat and organized to save times and reduce stress.

✓ Yes, I do. I prefer keeping things neat and organized to save time and reduce stress.

'Times' should be singular 'time' in the phrase 'save time' because it is an uncountable noun when used in this idiom. Add commas after 'Yes' and appropriate spacing for clarity.

× For example, I return things their own place after using them.

✓ For example, I return things to their proper places after using them.

Missing preposition 'to' and incorrect possessive phrase. Use 'to their proper places' to indicate returning objects to where they belong; 'proper' or 'original' is more natural than 'their own' here.

× I can't easily find them later on when I need them.

✓ I can't easily find them later when I need them.

'Later on' is acceptable but 'later' is more concise. Sentence otherwise fine; removal of 'on' improves fluency.

× Actually, to be honest, I'm, I'm not, I'm, I was not a child who are, were good at organize or clean up some things.

✓ Actually, to be honest, I was not a child who was good at organizing or cleaning up things.

Multiple issues: tense should be past 'was'; subject-verb agreement 'who was'; verbs need -ing forms 'organizing' and 'cleaning up' after 'good at'. Remove stuttered fillers and simplify.

× But as I grow older, I as I got older, I'm familiar with clean up and organizing.

✓ But as I got older, I became familiar with cleaning up and organizing.

Mixing present and past tenses. Use past 'got' and 'became' to match timeframe. Use gerund forms 'cleaning up' and 'organizing' after 'familiar with'.

× I tend to make their own plays before designing or is buying some furnitures in my room by myself and always keep them on their own place and return to them their own place.

✓ I tend to plan my own layout before buying furniture for my room, and I always keep items in their proper places and return them after use.

Pronoun 'their' incorrect for speaker; use 'my' and 'items' or 'them' appropriately. 'Plays' should be 'plans', 'is buying' wrong auxiliary, 'furnitures' is uncountable 'furniture', 'place' plural 'places'. Recast sentence for clarity and correct word forms.

× Yes, definitely. I think being tidy makes everyday life much more easier.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think being tidy makes everyday life much easier.

'Much more easier' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'much easier' or 'more easy' (but 'easier' is correct).

× When things are organized it's easier to find what you need.

✓ When things are organized, it's easier to find what you need.

Add a comma after the introductory clause for correct punctuation; sentence is otherwise correct.

× Also things are stored in different containers, even the same space.

✓ Also, things can be stored in different containers even within the same space.

Add comma after 'Also' and preposition 'within' clarifies location. Add modal 'can' to indicate possibility and improve naturalness.

× Feel much?

✓ Does it feel better?

Original fragment 'Feel much?' lacks subject and auxiliary verb. Rephrase as a full question 'Does it feel better?' to be grammatical and clear.