Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰，直接回应了问题并给出例子，但存在语法小错误和用词不够地道的问题（如“more productive”应放在句尾的完整结构，“start work the next morning more productive”应改为“so I can be more productive when I start work the next morning”）。建议注意句子结构，把主题句与支持细节连接得更自然，避免冗长。可以用一两个连接词（for example, so, which）使逻辑更流畅。

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because being organized helps me feel less stressed. For example, I always file documents in labeled folders and clear my desk at the end of the day, so I can be more productive when I start work the next morning.

提案: 回答直接且包含原因和例子，但有语法与词汇问题（“learned by copying some”不自然，建议改为“learned by copying them”或“learned by following their example”；“folded my crate”用词不当，可能想说“folded my clothes”或“put away my toys”）。建议使用更准确的词汇并保持句子简洁。

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child because my parents were very organized and I learned by following their example. For instance, every morning I made my bed and put my clothes away before going to school.

提案: 总体回答合理并有方法说明，但有明显用词与表达错误（“cartridged”不是适当词，可能想说“cluttered”；“sort and fill them”不清楚，应为“sort and file them”）。建议使用准确的动词短语（sort, file, discard）并加入连贯连接词，使表达更自然。

例: I usually clean my desk every day to keep it tidy. If it becomes cluttered with papers or folders, I sort and file them and discard anything I no longer need, so I can concentrate better.

提案: 回答包含观点和理由，但有语法与流畅性问题（例如“help your mood be more stable”应为“help stabilise your mood”或“help you feel more stable”;“We also with the tidy uh environment”语序和填充词不当）。建议去掉口头语，注意主语和从句结构，用更自然的表达连接观点与结果。

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important. It reflects your personality and can help stabilise your mood. In a tidy environment, you are also more likely to work and study efficiently.

× For example, I always put documents in folders and tidy my desk at the end of the day so I can start work the next morning more productive.

✓ For example, I always put documents in folders and tidy my desk at the end of the day so I can start work the next morning more productively.

原句中“more productive”用作副词修饰动词短语“start work”，但“productive”是形容词，不能直接修饰动词。应使用副词“more productively”或改为名词短语如“in a more productive way”。建议练习副词和形容词的用法，记住动词需要副词修饰。

× Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents were very tidy and I learned by copying some.

✓ Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child because my parents were very tidy and I learned by copying them.

原句末尾使用“some”没有明确指代，语法和语义都不正确。应使用宾格代词“them”指代前文的“parents”。建议复习代词用法，区分人称代词与不定代词。

× For example, every morning I made my bed and folded my crate before going to school.

✓ For example, every morning I made my bed and folded my clothes before going to school.

原句使用“crate”（箱子）与上下文不符，且想表达叠衣服应为“clothes”。这是词汇选择错误，属于语法交流问题。建议注意常用搭配：make the bed, fold clothes。

× If it gets cartridged with papers or folders, I sort and fill them and throw away anything I no longer need so I can focus better.

✓ If it gets cluttered with papers or folders, I sort and file them and throw away anything I no longer need so I can focus better.

原句中“cartridged”不是正确词汇，应为“cluttered”表示被杂物弄乱；“fill”用错，应为“file”（把文件归档）。这是形容词/动词选择错误。建议背诵常用词组如“cluttered with”和“file documents”。

× It'll reflect your personality and can help your mood be more stable.

✓ It reflects your personality and can help stabilize your mood.

问答在讨论一般事实时更常用一般现在时而非将来时“It'll”。因此将“It'll reflect”改为“It reflects”。另外短语“help your mood be more stable”结构笨拙，改为“help stabilize your mood”更自然。建议练习一般现在时的使用及动词不定式/使役结构的简化。

× We also with the tidy uh environment, you will be more efficient on study and work.

✓ Also, with a tidy environment, you will be more efficient in study and work.

原句结构混乱，插入“we also”后紧接介词短语导致主语不明确。改为“Also, with a tidy environment, you will be more efficient in study and work.”并将“on study”改为惯用搭配“in study”。建议说话时注意主句和从句的连接，避免口语填充词破坏句子结构。