Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer first, then give one or two clear supporting reasons. Use correct grammar (articles, word order, singular/plural) and simpler, natural phrases. Add linking words (because, so, for example) to make the answer coherent and avoid repetition. Keep it under 5 short sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my home tidy because it helps me find things quickly and feel less stressed. For example, I always put my keys and documents in the same place, so I don’t waste time looking for them. This habit also helps me stay professional at work.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did.) then give a specific reason and a brief example. Correct common grammar errors: use 'used to' + base verb, correct articles and plural forms, and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My mother encouraged me to keep my room tidy because she believed it showed responsibility. For instance, I always made my bed every morning and put toys away after playing, which made it easier to find things and kept our house orderly.

× Yes, I do like to keep things a tidy in my home.

✓ Yes, I do like to keep things tidy in my home.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the uncountable adjective phrase 'tidy'. 'Tidy' here is an adjective describing 'things' and does not need an article. Remove 'a' to form the correct phrase 'keep things tidy'. Suggestion: do not insert an article before adjectives that modify plural nouns or uncountable states.

× This is a highly important our society that someone is will organize and prepared for myself that I used to keep things always prepared and organized, even my work when somebody came to my office and said check my office, it's just it's a sign that he smart and good enough for fitting that job.

✓ In our society it is very important for someone to be organized and prepared. I always try to keep things prepared and organized, even my work. When somebody came to my office and asked to check it, I saw it as a sign that he was intelligent and suitable for the job.

The original sentence mixes fragments and incorrect word order, uses incorrect modal/auxiliary forms ('is will'), and has awkward pronouns and adjectives. Break into clear sentences, use appropriate structures: 'In our society it is very important' (correct 'there is' type), 'for someone to be organized' (infinitive after 'important for someone'), and 'asked to check it' for clarity. Use past tense 'was' to match 'came' and replace informal 'he smart' with 'he was intelligent' and 'suitable for the job'. Suggestion: break long run-on sentences into shorter clauses, maintain consistent tense, and use correct infinitive or past forms.

× This is a highly important our society that someone is will organize and prepared for myself that I used to keep things always prepared and organized, even my work when somebody came to my office and said check my office, it's just it's a sign that he smart and good enough for fitting that job.

✓ In our society it is very important for someone to be organized and prepared. I always try to keep things prepared and organized, even my work. When somebody came to my office and asked me to check it, I saw it as a sign that he was intelligent and suitable for the job.

The phrase 'is will organize' incorrectly combines 'is' and 'will'—use either present or future, not both. Also 'said check my office' needs a reporting structure with a verb and object: 'asked me to check it'. Suggestion: use correct modal or auxiliary verbs and common reporting verbs ('ask someone to do something').

× Yes, I used to keep my room at tidy when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to keep my room tidy when I was a child.

The preposition 'at' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Used to' already indicates a habitual past action and should be followed directly by the verb phrase 'keep my room tidy'. Suggestion: remove extraneous prepositions after 'used to'.

× This is because of my mom instructions and at home everything should be organized and well prepared.

✓ This is because of my mom's instructions, and at home everything should be organized and well prepared.

'Mom instructions' needs possessive form 'mom's instructions'. Also a comma improves clarity between clauses. Suggestion: use possessive when indicating ownership and add punctuation to separate ideas.

× My mom instructed me all the time to keep things prepared and and shown to be a sign of good child.

✓ My mom instructed me all the time to keep things prepared, and this was shown as a sign of being a good child.

The clause 'and shown to be a sign of good child' is ungrammatical: it lacks a subject and uses 'good child' without an article or gerund phrase. Rephrase to 'this was shown as a sign of being a good child' to add subject and correct form. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a clear subject and use 'being a good child' for state descriptions.