Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题时要注意语法和句子完整性，避免重复和口语停顿；先给出直接的主题句，再用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。例如改正时态和人称错误，修正重复词（如两次“I”或“hobby”），并把细节压缩到不超过五句话。

例: Yes, I do. Keeping things tidy is a habit I learned from my parents when I was a child, because they always asked me to put my toys away after playing. As a result, I still tidy up regularly now since it helps me stay organized and responsible.

提案: 注意主谓一致、代词一致和去除填充词（uh, um）；回答要更连贯地表达因果关系，使用连接词如 because or so；控制在三到四句内并提供具体例子（比如怎样整理）。

例: Yes, I did. My parents were quite strict and very organized, so they often asked me to tidy my room when it became messy. For example, I had to put toys in boxes and stack books on shelves every evening, which taught me good habits.

× Yes of course keep things tidy, it's a good habit.

✓ Yes, of course. I keep things tidy; it's a good habit.

句子缺少主语和谓语的适当形式，原句“keep things tidy”作答时应使用第一人称单数现在时“I keep”。建议在句首补上主语“I”，并把动词改为现在时单数形式，使用逗号或分号分隔两个独立分句。使用简短句子更自然。

× When was a child my parents always asked me to sort out my toy after I I play them.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always asked me to sort out my toys after I played with them.

句子中时态和人称混乱：应为过去时间背景（When I was a child），所以主句和从句都需用过去时（asked, played）。此外名词复数和代词使用错误：toy应为复数toys，play them应为played with them。建议按时间顺序统一使用过去时，注意复数和正确的动词搭配（play with）。

× So I still keep this hob hobby right now.

✓ So I still keep this hobby right now.

原句有重复单词“hob hobby”。此外虽然句子表达现在持续状态，使用“keep”也可以，但更自然的表达是“I still keep this hobby”或“I still have this hobby”。建议去掉重复并考虑用更地道的短语如“I still have this hobby”。 (错误类型归为动名词形式问题是因为重复/形式错误影响动词名词化使用。)

× It's a great way to stay organized and responsible.

✓ It's a great way to stay organized and responsible.

此句语法正确，时态与上下文一致，无需修改。保留原句即可。

× Yes, of course. My parents is really uh, strict and uh and organized, so she often asked me to keep my room tidy if they saw my my room is full of toys or books.

✓ Yes, of course. My parents were really strict and organized, so they often asked me to keep my room tidy if they saw my room was full of toys or books.

句中主谓不一致及代词错误：parents为复数，谓语应为were（过去时），不能用is或单数代词she。因为叙述的是过去习惯，整句应使用过去时（were, asked, saw, was）。另外去掉多余重复的“my”。建议注意主语复数时动词和代词一致，保持时态一致。

× Always uh, asked me to sort them out.

✓ They always asked me to sort them out.

原句缺少主语，导致句子结构不完整。应补上主语“they”或“my parents”，并保持过去时“asked”。建议说完整句子以提高表达清晰度。