Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question is about your childhood: use “liked,” “took,” and “walked.” Correct “when I was a little” to “when I was little,” and say “take me there” rather than “take me to there.” Give one clear detail about what you did in the park, and avoid repeating “and.”

例: Yes, I loved going to the park near my house as a child. My parents often took me there after dinner, and we would walk around together. I especially enjoyed chatting with them and watching other families.

提案: Your routine is relevant, but reduce fillers and make the sentence structure more direct. Say “we go to the park” and “it helps us digest dinner”; use “have a chat” instead of “have a small talk.” Add a specific example of what you discuss, and avoid switching into questions mid-answer.

例: Yes, I do, especially after dinner. My husband and I often go to a nearby park for a short walk, which helps us unwind and digest our meal. We usually chat about our work or how our day has gone.

提案: State your reason clearly and avoid the unclear phrase “a great first city.” Use “more parks would provide more green space” and organize your supporting details with a linking phrase such as “For example.” You already mention children and older people; explain how parks would benefit them, and keep the answer focused.

例: Yes, I’d like to see more parks in my city because they would give residents more green space. For example, children could play outdoors, while older people could enjoy a safe place to take a walk. Parks would also make the city more pleasant to live in.

提案: You name a specific park and give relevant reasons, which makes the answer engaging. Use the future form “I’d like to visit,” capitalize “Da’an MRT Station,” and avoid repeating “so.” Connect the description and your plan with a linking phrase, such as “because” or “so.”

例: Yes, I’d like to visit Daan Forest Park in Taipei. It’s near Da’an MRT Station and has lots of trees and flowers. Since it’s spacious and peaceful, I’d love to have a picnic there with my family.

× Umm yes of course I like to go to the park near my house.

✓ Umm, yes, of course. I liked going to the park near my house.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense liked rather than the present tense like. Liked going is a natural way to describe an activity you enjoyed in the past.

× I remember when I was a little my parents always take me to there.

✓ I remember that when I was little, my parents always took me there.

Do not use a before little in the expression when I was little. The article is unnecessary in this expression.

× I remember when I was a little my parents always take me to there.

✓ I remember that when I was little, my parents always took me there.

The speaker is describing repeated events during childhood, so take should be in the past tense: took.

× I remember when I was a little my parents always take me to there.

✓ I remember that when I was little, my parents always took me there.

There is an adverb of place and does not take the preposition to before it. Say took me there, not took me to there.

× After dinner we have a talk and and work around the park.

✓ After dinner, we had a talk and worked around the park.

The sentence describes what happened during the speaker's childhood, so use the past-tense forms had and worked.

× My husband and I, umm, we just umm, go to a park and help us uh, to digest our dinner and have a small talk, umm, talk about umm, how's our work? How's our umm, mood?

✓ My husband and I just go to a park after dinner to help us digest our dinner and have small talk about our work and mood.

The original coordination makes it sound as if the speaker and their husband go to the park and help themselves as separate actions. Use to help to show the purpose of going to the park, and connect the topics of conversation within the same sentence.

× My husband and I, umm, we just umm, go to a park and help us uh, to digest our dinner and have a small talk, umm, talk about umm, how's our work? How's our umm, mood?

✓ My husband and I just go to a park after dinner to help us digest our dinner and have small talk about our work and mood.

Small talk is generally an uncountable noun, so it does not take the article a. Say have small talk, not have a small talk.

× My husband and I, umm, we just umm, go to a park and help us uh, to digest our dinner and have a small talk, umm, talk about umm, how's our work? How's our umm, mood?

✓ My husband and I just go to a park after dinner to help us digest our dinner and have small talk about our work and mood.

After talk about, use indirect-question word order: how our work is and how our mood is. The original forms how's our work and how's our mood use direct-question word order.

× Yes, of course, umm have a lot of park means, umm, you will have a lot of green space and in your city.

✓ Yes, of course. Having a lot of parks means you will have a lot of green space in your city.

A lot of refers to multiple countable parks, so park needs the plural form parks. Use the plural when referring to many parks.

× Yes, of course, umm have a lot of park means, umm, you will have a lot of green space and in your city.

✓ Yes, of course. Having a lot of parks means you will have a lot of green space in your city.

The original phrase have a lot of park means does not form a complete, clear clause. Use the gerund phrase Having a lot of parks as the subject of means. Also remove the unnecessary and before in your city.

× MMM, yeah, umm, I like to go to the biggest park in Taipei, uh, it's near the da an MRT station and there's a lot of trees and flowers and it's umm, so huge so I can have a picnic there.

✓ Yeah, I would like to go to the biggest park in Taipei. It is near the Da'an MRT station, and there are a lot of trees and flowers. It is so huge that I can have a picnic there.

The question asks about a place the speaker wants to visit in the future. I would like to go clearly expresses this future intention; I like to go usually describes a general preference or habit.

× MMM, yeah, umm, I like to go to the biggest park in Taipei, uh, it's near the da an MRT station and there's a lot of trees and flowers and it's umm, so huge so I can have a picnic there.

✓ Yeah, I would like to go to the biggest park in Taipei. It is near the Da'an MRT station, and there are a lot of trees and flowers. It is so huge that I can have a picnic there.

Use there are with the plural noun trees. There is, contracted as there's, is used with a singular noun or an uncountable noun.