Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答直接，结构清晰，也提供了陪伴家人、交流和锻炼等具体原因。不过，“a good time for us to communicate”不够自然，可以改为“a good opportunity for us to talk”。“keep healthy”建议改为“stay healthy”；另外，“which brought me a sense of pure joy”略显生硬，可以用“so I always felt really happy”。注意避免堆积太多并列内容，使表达更自然简洁。

例: Definitely. When I was a child, I often went to a park near my home with my parents in the evening. It was a great opportunity for us to talk about our day and get some exercise together, so I always felt really happy.

提案: 回答有明确观点和原因，但时态不一致。问题询问现在的习惯，应将“went”和“was”改为现在时“go”和“is”。“every time I walked beside the river it made me feel better”应改为“walking beside the river always makes me feel better”，这样更自然。还可以补充一个具体活动，如听音乐或放松，以增强内容。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually go to the park near my school once a week because it helps me relieve stress. I especially like walking beside the river and listening to music, as these activities always make me feel more relaxed.

提案: 回答有条件式观点和对比，逻辑方向较好，但“Either city center”是明显的表达错误，应改为“In the city center”或“If you mean the city center”。“traffic jams will be worse”缺少明确因果，公园本身不一定导致堵车；可以改为说明市中心空间有限，更多公园可能挤占道路或商业用地。注意使用更自然的连接方式，如“On the other hand”。

例: It depends on where they are built. I would not necessarily want more parks in the city center because space is limited, and they might replace roads or other important facilities. On the other hand, I would love to see more parks in suburban areas, where people could exercise and enjoy some fresh air.

提案: 回答包含具体公园、时间和景色，内容较丰富，但有几处词汇和语法问题。“so much beautiful scenery”应改为“a lot of beautiful scenery”；“a music storm”可能是词语误用，应确认具体设施名称，例如“a music fountain”或“a music show”；“a lot of birds”应改为“a lot of birds”但前面的“there is”要改为“there are”。此外，既然谈未来计划，最后一句的“around here”应改为“there”。

例: Yes, I’d like to visit Nanjing Park next month. I’ve heard that it has beautiful scenery, including lush trees, colorful flowers and a river. It also has a popular musical fountain, and I’m hoping to see many birds there. I think it would be a relaxing place to spend a day.

× Yes, I went to the park near my school every week and I think it was a good way for me to relieve my stress because every time I walked beside the river it made me feel better.

✓ Yes, I go to the park near my school every week, and I think it is a good way for me to relieve my stress because every time I walk beside the river, it makes me feel better.

问题是在回答“Do you still like...?”时，描述的是现在的习惯，因此应使用一般现在时。将“went”改为“go”，“was”改为“is”，“walked”改为“walk”，“made”改为“makes”。描述现在经常发生的事情时，通常使用一般现在时。

× Well, I think it depends on the situation. Either city center, I don't want to see more parks there because traffic jams will be worse than before. However, in the countryside, I hope there will be more parks where people can do some exercise.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the situation. In the city center, I don't want to see more parks there because traffic jams will be worse than before. However, in the countryside, I hope there will be more parks where people can do some exercise.

“Either city center”不能正确表示“在市中心”。表示地点时应使用介词“in”，因此应改为“In the city center”。“Either”通常用于“either...or...”结构，不能单独放在这里表示地点。

× In the park, there is so much beautiful scenery, lush trees, vibrant flowers and a river.

✓ In the park, there is so much beautiful scenery, including lush trees, vibrant flowers, and a river.

“Much”通常修饰不可数名词，而“trees”和“flowers”是可数名词复数。加入“including”后，“lush trees, vibrant flowers, and a river”成为对“beautiful scenery”的具体说明，数量词与名词的搭配更加正确。

× There is also a music storm, which is the most popular place, and there is a lot of birds around here.

✓ There is also a music storm, which is the most popular place, and there are a lot of birds around here.

在“There be”句型中，be动词通常要和后面的名词保持一致。“birds”是复数，因此应使用“There are”，不能使用“There is”。