Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the past tense: use “I really liked...” rather than “I really like...”. Avoid repeating words and correct unclear expressions such as “pod,” “parch,” and “at a child.” Organize your response with a clear reason and one specific example, using linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

例: Yes, I really liked going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my family, especially at weekends, because we could have a picnic and play games together. For example, I enjoyed riding my bike and playing hide-and-seek with my cousins.

提案: Use the present tense and avoid repeating “until now.” The phrase “pick me” is unclear; use “have a picnic” or “eat sandwiches.” Give a direct answer, followed by a natural reason and a specific activity, and use “because” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are a relaxing place to spend time with my friends. We often have a picnic there and eat sandwiches together. It is also a good way to get some fresh air after a busy week.

提案: Your answer is direct and includes a reason, but use the plural form “parks” and avoid repeating “in my city.” The expression “lash park” is unclear, so name a recognizable type of park, such as a lakeside park or a sports park. Instead of ending with “or something like that,” provide one or two specific examples.

例: No, I do not think my city needs more parks because it already has plenty of green spaces. For example, we have a beautiful flower park and a large lakeside park where people can relax and exercise. I think improving these existing parks would be more useful than building new ones.

提案: State the type or location of the park more clearly and use the correct structure “I would like to visit...” Avoid repeating “I would like” and “want to.” Add a reason and a specific feature you hope to see, such as beautiful scenery, wildlife, or a famous landmark.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a national park in another country, such as Banff National Park in Canada. I have heard that it has spectacular mountain scenery and clear lakes. I would love to see the views and take photographs there.

× I really like going to the pod at a child also and stay now.

✓ I really liked going to the park as a child, and I still like going there now.

The question asks about the past, so liked is needed for the childhood experience. Still like describes a present preference, so it remains in the present tense.

× I really like to go to the parch or in the park.

✓ I really like going to the park.

The correct preposition after go is to: go to the park. Also, going to is more natural than go to when describing an activity that you enjoy.

× We can picnic or do some activity with my friends or with my family when we hang out together.

✓ We can have a picnic or do some activities with my friends or family when we hang out together.

When referring to several possible activities, activities should be plural. The expression have a picnic is more grammatically complete than picnic when used as an activity.

× Yeah, I still like going to the pods until now because until now I always hang out with my friend and we always pick me and ate the sandwich together.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because I often hang out with my friends there, and we always have picnics and eat sandwiches together.

Park is used as a general place here, so the singular form with the is appropriate. Friends and sandwiches are plural because the speaker is referring to more than one friend and sandwich.

× Yeah, I still like going to the pods until now because until now I always hang out with my friend and we always pick me and ate the sandwich together.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park because I often hang out with my friends there, and we always have picnics and eat sandwiches together.

The answer describes a current habit, so eat must be in the present tense, not the past form ate. The phrase until now is unnecessary because still already shows that the activity continues in the present.

× No, I don't want to see more park in my city because we had a lot of park in my city like a flower park or a lash park or something like that.

✓ No, I do not want to see more parks in my city because we have a lot of parks, such as flower parks and art parks.

Parks must be plural after more and a lot of because these expressions refer to more than one park.

× No, I don't want to see more park in my city because we had a lot of park in my city like a flower park or a lash park or something like that.

✓ No, I do not want to see more parks in my city because we have a lot of parks, such as flower parks and art parks.

The speaker is describing the number of parks that currently exist in the city, so have is more appropriate than the past-tense form had.

× Yes, I would like to go park or the park in other country I would like to visit and want to see the view.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park in another country because I would like to visit it and see the view.

The verb go requires the preposition to before a destination: go to a park. The preposition in correctly shows that the park is located in another country.

× Yes, I would like to go park or the park in other country I would like to visit and want to see the view.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park in another country because I would like to visit it and see the view.

A singular, countable noun needs an article. Use a park because the speaker is referring to any park, and another country because country is singular and begins with the meaning one different country.

× Yes, I would like to go park or the park in other country I would like to visit and want to see the view.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a park in another country because I would like to visit it and see the view.

The original sentence joins several ideas without a clear grammatical connection. Using because creates a complete structure: the desired destination is stated first, followed by the reason for visiting it.