Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve doğrudan olmalı; belirsiz seslerden (MMM) ve unutulan kelimeler için hemen özür dilemek yerine basit açıklama yapın. Konuyu açıklayan net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici detay verin. Örneğin hangi oyunları oynadığınızı veya parklarda ne yapmaktan hoşlandığınızı belirtin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because) kullanarak cümlenizi düzenli hale getirin.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had playgrounds and wide open spaces. For example, I often played on the swings and climbed trees with my friends, which made weekends very fun.

提案: Cevap daha akıcı ve dilbilgisi açısından düzgün olmalı. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra nedenini ve bir örnek verin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve bozuk kelime sırasını düzeltin. Bağlaçlar (so, because) kullanarak neden-sonuç ilişkisi belirtin.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and recharge. For example, I often sit on a bench to read a book and spend quality time away from my phone.

提案: Cevap net ve mantıklı, ancak dilbilgisi ve kelime sıralaması düzeltilmeli. Kısa bir ana fikir cümlesi (evet veya hayır + sebep) kullanın, sonra detay verin (örneğin parkların evlere yakın olmasının faydası). Bağlaçlar (especially, so) ile akışı güçlendirin.

例: Yes, I would like more parks in my city, especially near my home, because they would make it easy to visit them often. For instance, a nearby park would allow me to read outdoors for a short break between tasks.

提案: Cevap daha doğru kelime seçimi ve daha düzenli bilgi sunmalı. Park adını net söyleyin, sonra neden gitmek istediğinizi belirtin (boyutu, ilginç yerler). Yanlış kelimeleri (butcher palace, feature) düzeltin ve daha spesifik detay verin. Bağlaçlar (because, for example) kullanın.

例: I would like to visit Buhana Park in Istanbul because it is very large and has several historic pavilions. For example, I heard there is an old palace nearby and many walking paths, so I could explore and take photographs.

× Yes, I like going to parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The question asks about past preference 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' so the student should use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. Use past simple for completed past habits: 'I liked going to parks.'

× When I was a child especially, I liked child's games like this.

✓ When I was a child, I especially liked children's games like this.

Use 'children's' (possessive plural) not 'child's' to refer to games belonging to children. Adverb placement: 'especially' fits better before the verb. Commas are needed for clarity.

× MMM, Solemn Jack.

✓ For example, playing 'Simon Says.'

The original appears to attempt naming a game but is unclear. Provide a clear example and proper punctuation. 'For example' introduces the example and use correct game name 'Simon Says.'

× I don't know.

✓ I'm not sure.

'I don't know' is acceptable but 'I'm not sure' better expresses uncertainty in this context; both are grammatically correct. No tense issue.

× Sorry, I'm not.

✓ Sorry, I'm not sure.

Fragments like 'I'm not' are incomplete; add 'sure' to form a complete thought. Maintain present tense to express current uncertainty.

× I'm forget inverts.

✓ I forgot the words.

'Forget' must be in past form 'forgot' when referring to a past action. 'Inverts' is incorrect; likely meant 'words' or 'names.' Use clear noun. Maintain past tense to match 'Sorry, I'm not sure; I forgot the words.'

× Yes, I like going to parks now generally I am going to refresh and relaxing it.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks now. Generally, I go there to relax and refresh myself.

Use present simple 'I like' and 'I go' for habitual actions. 'Going to refresh and relaxing it' mixes forms; use infinitive or base form: 'to relax and refresh myself.' Add pronoun 'myself' and punctuation.

× I am doing read a book and I spend time quality and.

✓ I read a book and spend quality time there.

Do not use 'am doing read'; use simple present 'I read' for habitual action. 'Spend time quality' is wrong word order; correct phrase is 'spend quality time.' Remove extra conjunction. Maintain present simple for habits.

× Purse.

✓ Also, I sometimes take a snack or have a picnic.

Single-word 'Purse' is unclear. Provide a complete sentence expressing intended meaning (perhaps 'I bring a purse' or 'I have a picnic'). Use full sentence structure.

× Of course, I like to see more parks in my city, especially I want to nearby home because I want to quickly in the parks for reading a book and I am relaxing.

✓ Of course, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially near my home, because I want to get to the parks quickly to read a book and relax.

Use 'would like' for polite preference about future improvements. 'Nearby home' should be 'near my home.' 'Want to quickly in the parks' is ungrammatical; use 'get to the parks quickly' and 'to read a book and relax' (infinitives). Maintain word order and remove unnecessary progressive tense.

× I want to visit Buhana park in Istanbul city.

✓ I want to visit Buhane Park in Istanbul.

Proper noun capitalization and correct park name assumed 'Buhane Park.' 'Istanbul city' is redundant; use 'Istanbul.' Present simple 'I want' is acceptable for future intention, or 'I would like to visit' for politeness.

× This parks has very huge so I want to go feature in the park and this park has a Dolma butcher palace so very incredible.

✓ This park is very large, so I want to visit its attractions. The park has a historic palace called Dolmabahçe Palace, which is incredible.

Use singular 'park' with singular verb 'is.' 'Very huge' is awkward; use 'very large.' 'Go feature in the park' is ungrammatical; replace with 'visit its attractions.' 'Dolma butcher palace' appears to be 'Dolmabahçe Palace' (a proper noun) and requires correct name and structure. Use relative clause 'which is incredible.'