Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì, danh từ đếm được/số ít-số nhiều), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh từ thừa; bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể. Nên sửa thì về quá khứ khi nói về kí ức, dùng mạo từ phù hợp và cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. There was a small park near my school, so I visited it almost every day after class. I especially enjoyed playing on the swings and riding my bicycle there.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và động từ (sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen), tránh câu bị dang dở; thêm liên từ để liên kết ý và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên.

例: Definitely. I still go to parks whenever I have free time because they help me relax and improve my mood. For example, I usually walk my dog or meet a friend for coffee on a bench, which makes the visit more enjoyable.

提案: Làm rõ ý (bạn đang nói muốn nhiều công viên hay chỉ một công viên cụ thể), tránh từ sai (ví dụ 'bug' không phù hợp), sửa ngữ pháp và hoàn thiện câu; cung cấp lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn thêm công viên.

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces improve air quality and provide places to relax. For instance, I hope to visit a large, peaceful park with wide lawns and many trees that is planned near the city center.

提案: Tránh lặp từ và dùng từ đúng nghĩa ('big' thay cho 'bug', 'peaceful' thay cho 'speedful'); hoàn thiện câu thay vì bỏ dở; nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn đến công viên đó và dự định làm gì ở đó.

例: Yes, there is one big park in the city center that I would like to visit. It is very large and peaceful, with many trees and walking paths. I plan to go there to read a book under the shade and take long walks to enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, I really love going to park when I was a child, but in my country there was a park nearby Hall, so I really went.

✓ Yes, I really loved going to parks when I was a child, and in my country there was a park near my house, so I visited it often.

Error type: mixing present tense with past context and article/plural errors. Use past tense 'loved' because speaker talks about childhood; 'going to park' should be 'going to parks' or 'going to the park'; 'nearby Hall' is unclear and likely meant 'near my house'; 'really went' is awkward — use 'visited it often'. Suggestions: keep past tense consistently, use correct articles and plurality, and use clearer nouns.

× Definitely, I still like going to parks when I have free time. It's help me improve my mood and relax or walk. I usually going with my friend and.

✓ Definitely, I still like going to parks when I have free time. It helps me improve my mood and relax or take a walk. I usually go with my friends.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'It's help' should be 'It helps' (third person singular present), 'relax or walk' needs a verb form 'take a walk', 'I usually going' is incorrect structure — needs base verb 'go', and 'my friend' likely plural 'friends' if habitual. Suggestions: use third-person singular -s for 'it', use correct verbs after 'or', and use correct verb forms after adverbs of frequency.

× Yes, I would. There's one bug I want to go in the future. It's really large and peaceful. It's have a lot of green grass or.

✓ Yes, I would. There's one big park I want to visit in the future. It's really large and peaceful. It has a lot of green grass.

Errors: 'one bug' is wrong word; should be 'one big park' or 'a big park'. 'I want to go in the future' -> 'I want to visit in the future'. 'It's have' incorrect verb form; should be 'It has'. 'or' at end is incomplete. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary, use correct verb forms, and complete the sentence.

× Yes, there's there's one bug I want to go in the future. It's in the city center. It's really large and speedful. I think it.

✓ Yes, there's one big park I want to visit in the future. It's in the city center. It's really large and peaceful. I think it's a great place to relax.

Errors: repeated 'there's there's'; 'bug' should be 'big park'; 'want to go' -> 'want to visit'; 'speedful' is not an English word, likely 'peaceful'; sentence 'I think it.' is incomplete. Suggestions: remove repetition, use correct nouns and adjectives, and finish thoughts with complete clauses.